Reviews For Kokoro Uchiha
Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 13/05/11 - 06:52 pm · For: Chapter 2: Sasuke's Worry
See. This was much better in terms of writing style. ;0) It's obvious that you took a little more care here. This was brilliant. Most of it was incredibly touching and sentimental, but plenty of it was just downright funny. It was a good balance and the ending was beautiful. You painted a really touching picture and it was lovely.
Author's Response: Wow, all i can think to say is... Thanks.
Author's Response: Wow, all i can think to say is... Thanks.
Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 04/08/09 - 10:56 am · For: Chapter 2: Sasuke's Worry
Okay,I'm just going to tell you this,because I read NKBZ's review.It is very original,so don't let that get you down in the dumps just because you got one bad review.It is a really good and original story.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hmm, her criticism (or his) is ok with me, I guess, because it shows me her (or his) point of view. Thanks for saying it's original, though, because I 'was' getting worried about whether it wasn't. Thank you very much! :)
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 04/08/09 - 10:26 am · For: Chapter 2: Sasuke's Worry
There is nothing original about this story so far. What makes this any different than all the other Uchiha relative fics? Murdered parents, Uchiha relative, the lengths you go through just to point out how much she resembles Sasuke, and the usual hospital scene.
Try something other than having your OC end up in a hospital. Just because everyone else has theirs wake up to "Where am I? White walls...blah blah, oh wow I'm in the hospital" doesn't mean you have to.
I can't picture Sasuke in the last paragraphs, just a bunch of ooc fluff.
Author's Response: hmm, I suppose you have a point. I won't change the chapter, though (sorry) but please read on ahead and tell me whether the rest of the story is any better. Thank you for reviewing! :) P.s, I was wondering, what does ooc mean? I now what Oc means, but what does ooc mean?
Name: Kurokiku (Signed) · Date: 22/07/09 - 09:46 pm · For: Chapter 2: Sasuke's Worry
It's really strange. Is it possible to have sad warm-and-fuzzies? Because I think that's what this story gives me lol. I like it though. I hope Kokoro doesn't grow up as sad as Sasuke does, though. I'd like it if her personality were more optimistic even despite what happened, you know? It would make for a nice contrast. Keep up the good work! My only criticism is that your chapters are too short. I always want a bit more!
~Kiku~
Author's Response: Yeah, I guess it has sad warm-and fuzzies. I'm sort of trying to build up a sort of pity Kokoro and Sasuke, I guess I'm trying to make the reader understand what they're going through. Kokoro is going to be exactly that, optimistic! :) She'll be happy, and sort of hold Sasuke up, you know? Thanks for reviewing. It really helps! I'll try and make the next chapter longer. I'm glad you like the story so far! =)
Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 22/07/09 - 11:26 am · For: Chapter 2: Sasuke's Worry
Wow,that was great.I liked the way you wrote that,Rowanrose.It was awesome!Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Thanks! :) rnI will! :)rnYour reviews are really encouraging!