Real name: ? Then what's the point of pennames?
Membership status: Member
Member since: 01/11/10
Website: http://themoonspack.webs.com/
Beta-reader: Yes
A lovely banner by my sister!
Hey, guys! What’s up? Somehow, you have managed to stumble upon my profile. I don’t know how you got here, but take a look around if you like!
Hmm, I guess this is the part where I start saying some stuff about myself, huh? Well, alright then, let’s get to it!
Penname: My official penname is silverwolf1213. However, I have acquired a plethora of names while on this fabulous site: SW1213, SilverWolf, Wolf-chan, Urufu-chan, Gin-cha, Silver, Silvy, Wolfy… There are probably some others, but you get the idea. You could honestly probably create any nickname for me and I would reply, so long as it is appropriate.
Birthday: December 13, haha, get it? The 1213 from my penname? Haha.
Age: 18, yikes…
Height: Exactly 5 ft, though 5 ft. 1 in. on a good day :)
Weight: Why did I even add this part?
Appearance: Eh... no, I don't want any stalkers, thank you very much.
Likes:
Swimming, in both a competitively and a leisurely sense. Running, since it’s a good way to think and relieve stress. Talking to friends, Sasaui Uchiha, DestinyGirl, and BattyBigSister being the main people from this site that I talk to. Reading novels, though I’m not exactly picky about what I’ll read, but that doesn’t mean I’ll like everything either. Writing, and I mean just in general because it helps me to release my emotions.
Dislikes:
People who are annoying / selfish / mean.
Personality:
I’m actually a pretty nice person. I’m always willing to make friends, so please don’t be afraid to talk to me. In real life, I’m relatively shy and quiet on the outside. On the inside, I’m one of the strangest people ever, and I’m not joking. I can be pretty defensive on some things; if you want to bash my work, my personality, my friends or family, or my way of life, then be prepared for some intense lashing from me. You’ve been warned.
Favorite Things:
Color: Red
Animal: Wolf
Food: Chinese
Sport: Swimming
Movies:
Pirates of the Caribbean
Avatar
And basically, anything Disney or anything sappy-romantic
Books:
The Hunger Games (series) by Suzanne Collins
The Mortal Instruments (series) by Cassandra Clare
The Infernal Devices (series) by Cassandra Clare
Twilight (series) by Stephenie Meyer
Harry Potter (series) by J.K. Rowling
Bands/Artists:
Lady GaGa
P!nk
Selena Gomez
The Script
The Fray
Bruno Mars
Beyoncé
Katy Perry
One Direction
Manga:
Naruto
One Piece
InuYasha
Yu-Gi-Oh!
Things about Naruto:
I'm a sucker for romance. My favorite Naruto couples are: NaruHina, ShikaTema, NejiTen, and SasuSaku.
I dislike Sasuke in Shippuden because he's just a jerk. Seriously, he needs to realize that Itachi wouldn't be dead if he didn't kill him (sorry if I spoiled the manga/anime for anyone). Stop being emo, do not kill Naruto, fall in love with Sakura already, and realize you have issues, man!
Kiba is my husband. Anyone who tries to steal him will feel the wrath of my fangs and claws! However, if you can write a good romance story, then all is forgiven… Not really. Kiba will still be mine, I just won't inflict physical damage.
As I'm sure many people do, I have my own theory on the ending of the Naruto series. I think the ending of the series will be how Naruto, still wanting peace and to save his friend, goes up against Sasuke, who refuses to accept such a happy world after what his brother went through. They will fight, and after a long battle (probably about ten chapters, I wouldn't be surprised), Naruto and Sasuke will summon the last of their chakra to use their signature moves, Rasengan and Chidori, and the last page of the last chapter of the series will be a clash and a bright light, so we will never know what happened....
Fanfiction:
I’ll read just about anything, though if the story doesn’t initially catch my eye, I’m sorry to say that I may just pass over it. However, if you ask me to read your story, I am always willing to give it a shot.
If you didn’t know, I am a fanfic writer. Look below to see my stories ;) I really appreciate it when people read my works, and I appreciate it even more so when people leave comments. Not because it boosts the read or review counts but because it lets me know whether people find my stories compelling to read. Feedback also lets me know what I’m doing right or wrong. I always accept constructive criticism. But I don’t like bashing or flaming because those methods of reviewing are not helpful whatsoever.
I will review anything I read, and I usually review each individual chapter, though that’s not always a promise. I review the stories I read because, as a writer, I know what it feels like to appreciate feedback from readers. When I leave comments, I always try to be considerate of the person writing the stories, which means that I try not to bash anyone. If a review I give comes out sounding nasty, please forgive me. I just try to review honestly so that I can help the writer.
I am a beta-reader, meaning that if you ever need an editor or someone to help with your story, I am willing to help. I have experience with editing people's works and sharing ideas to help progress the story. So if you ever need help, please feel free to ask!
My TONFA Story
Well, I honestly didn't know what fanfiction was until 2009. My friend had introduced me to Harry Potter fanfiction on harrpotterfanfiction.com, and I fell in love with the entire concept of original ideas incorporated into the normal plotline of an already-existing universe. I was hooked on Harry Potter fanfics for nearly a year. During this time, I began writing alternate universes of my own that followed the Naruto plotline. Only when I look back on it now do I realize how unoriginal and immature my ideas actually were back then, but that's a story for another day. Anyway, one fine summer's day in 2010, I realized that if there were sites for Harry Potter fanfics, then there had to be something for Naruto.
Lo and behold, I was correct. After using the wonderful Google, I found a website of Naruto fanfics that I liked: TONFA The Original Naruto Fanfic Archive.
I remember reading several stories from the Top Tens, and since this was before the Anonymous reviews were brought back, I never left any comments. I only joined in November 2010 after my mom and sister encouraged me to publish my ideas here to see if anyone liked them or could give me advice on how to improve in my writing.
My first publication on the Internet ever was Their Stories, a series of background stories for original characters that I had planned to center my entire fanfic writing career on. Only after reading other stories by other people and new ideas blossoming in my head did I realize how bad my original universe actually was. I always think about taking Their Stories down, but then I always decide to leave it up as a comparison between how I once used to write and how I write now. It's such an improvement, and I really hope I continue to get better.
Since then, I have made several friends on this site, and there are even some people from here who I talk to on other sites as well. Overall, I'm really glad I joined this site.
Links:
FanFiction.Net: http://www.fanfiction.net/~silverwolf1213
Blogger: http://silverwolf1213.blogspot.com
DeviantArt: http://silverwolf1213.deviantart.com
Website: http://themoonspack.webs.com/
COMPLETED STORIES:
Three Days
He spent three days in the hospital, dying a slow and painful death. It wasn't merciful, and it wasn't kind. All anyone could do was watch him wither away until someone pulled the plug.
*Based on true events, a tribute to my deceased grandfather*
CURRENTLY WORKING ON:
A Tale Best Told Dead
The Suiheisen are a crew of rogues who plunder the land and seas. The Blue Tiger of the Mist, the captain of these bandits, is about to show the unsuspecting Leaf ninja that no one should ever underestimate a deadly pirate with a deep vendetta and a dark past.
*Hoist the Colors series*
The Reincarnation of a Legend
Suki Kurohoshi is the next Guardian, the legendary sacred protector. Her duty is to keep the world at peace. But how is she supposed to do that when people are constantly revealing their hatred towards her for something that she did not do?
*Destiny is Calling series, NaruOC*
The White Rose
Kiba Inuzuka has just been sent to the real world, where the world of Naruto is only a manga. Adrianna Sun has just stumbled upon the fictional character, and now she must find a way to keep her life in order while also trying to get Kiba back home.
*Response to challenge, 'Let's Be Original', KibaOC*
Rekindle the Lost Flame
Madara Uchiha has ruled the world for 100 years after he defeated the Five Great Shinobi Nations in the Fourth Great Ninja War. Now a new band of heroes must somehow defeat the last remaining ninja and break the tsukuyomi that has brainwashed the world for a century.
*Response to challenge, 'Joint Stories!'*
Mission of Matrimony
Shikamaru and Temari, who have been friends for eleven years now, are ordered by Tsunade and Gaara to be married to keep the Leaf-Sand treaty alive. How will the two be able to stand being married to one another?
*ShikaTema*
CURRENTLY REVISING:
Freshman Year
The Naruto gang and an original character of mine head to Konoha High for their first year of high school. And they realize that high school is not all that it is cracked up to be. Sirius of Harry Potter and Zuko of Avatar are included in this because I like them :D
*Due to lack of inspiration and possible dysfunctional ideas, I need to revise this*
Their Stories
In a dangerous world filled with shinobi, everyone has a story, and all of them are connected in some way, whether they realize it or not.
*I am hoping to make a series out of this*
ABANDONED:
Pirates of the Mist
*Due to lack of motivation, this will no longer be updated - check out the rewrite A Tale Best Told Dead*
Rated: U
[Reviews - 1]~~~~~~~~~~~~
The survivors from all around the world have gathered in the only safe place left:a long-forgotten island. There is a bridge that is heavily guarded. They cannot yet afford to lose the connection to main land. The surviving kages have joined together. Kiba Inuzuka, Naruto Uzamaki, and Mizukage-in-training Keiko are a team brought together to fight the zombies. The world is dangerous for Survivors--can they survive long enough to find a cure?
Category: General Fiction > Timeskip, OC-centric
Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, General, Sci-Fi, Supernatural, Tragedy
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: No | Word count: 312 | Read count: 1313 [Report This]
Published: 12/03/11 | Updated: 12/03/11
Date: 12/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning of the End
Ooh, this sounds interesting. Zombies and Naruto... I think it makes for a good combination. I can't wait for whatever is coming up next. I can already tell this is going to be good. I hope to see an update soon!
Rated: 12/12A
[Reviews - 2]Non-naruto fic.
Category: Non-Naruto Fiction
Characters: None
Genres: Dark
Warnings: Dark
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: No | Word count: 700 | Read count: 1711 [Report This]
Published: 14/03/11 | Updated: 14/03/11
Date: 15/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Holy snap! What is up with these two girls?! First, I was thinking Amanda is so much like Naruto (even though I know this is non-Naruto) because she is so much like a prankster. And then Ashley has this amazingly weird power that makes me a little scared. These two girls have a lot of bad stuff going on for them, and I can't wait to see what the plot has in store for them. Update soon because I'd like to know what happens to these poor girls!
Author's Response: ahhh thanks, it makes me so happy when i get reviewed. i will update super soon for yu. =)\r\n
Rated: U
[Reviews - 6]Now to buy more pudding....
Enjoy the crack fic ^-^
Category: OC-centric, MadFic > Parody, General Fiction > Naruto, MadFic > Script Fic
Characters: All
Genres: Parody
Warnings: OOC
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 372 | Read count: 1839 [Report This]
Published: 16/03/11 | Updated: 16/03/11
Date: 17/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chunin Fail
*Snicker* Wow, I never thought of that. You're a very creative author, you know that? I like your stories, they really make me laugh. Nice work on this.
But, just so you know, I think cheating deducted two points. Not that it makes a lot of difference to this, the story is still awesome anyway.
Author's Response: 0.o It did?\r\nThank you by the way. I\'m glad I can make you laugh!
Rated: U
[Reviews - 35]Now with furry animals, the Akatsuki embark on the one mission S-ranked criminals might not be able to handle: eachother in chat rooms.
In response to AkatsukiLemonLover23 's challenge.
Category: MadFic > Parody, MadFic > Script Fic, MadFic > Other
Characters: Akatsuki
Genres: Parody
Warnings: None
Challenges: , MAKE A KATSUKI CHATROOM
Challenge: , MAKE A KATSUKI CHATROOM
Series: None
Chapters: 11 | Completed: No | Word count: 6610 | Read count: 14287 [Report This]
Published: 19/03/11 | Updated: 09/10/11
Date: 04/09/11 Title: Chapter 10: Aw poop.
Omg, you're back! Yay! And with another hilarious chapter, as always! Nice work!
Haha, I love how Itachi had no idea what everyone was talking about when they were badmouthing Sasuke. It is true, Sasuke is not too bright if he's killing the last of the clan and he wants to revive it.
Haha, nice job, Glomp-chan! You continue to entertain me with your great writing. Keep up the awesome work!
Oh, and I hope this review is enough to help pay for Tobi's medical bills... poor guy...
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Urufu chan ^-^\r\nI appreciated it just as much as Tobi and Kakuzu\r\n\r\n(although Deidara groaning and complaining that we had Tobi\'s arms surgically reatached)\r\n\r\nIt\'s good being back.. now my master plan... muahaha!!
Date: 29/05/11 Title: Chapter 5: Spaztastic Chapter 5
Oh, how Tobi continues to annoy Deidari, gotta love it. And yeah, what is up with the name of the chatroom?
Haha, Hidan and Kakuzu totally need marriage counseling. Definitely.
Nice job! This is definitely a favorite, I always end up laughing. Thank you so much for making me smile with your stories!
Author's Response: Thank YOU for making me smile with your reviews ^-^\r\nI\'m always happy to know I can make someone laugh or smile.... and especially glad to know that people give you odd looks when you\'re at the wrong place- just kidding XD\r\nSeriously though, they\'ve been together how long and they have yet to talk about their problems? Tsh, men.\r\nThanks Urufu chan ^-^
Date: 02/07/11 Title: Chapter 8: Post Drama?
Um... I think you posted this on the wrong story. That post-dramatic stress is getting to you.... ;) But this was still an awesome chapter! I loved it! Great job!
Author's Response: oops!! Fail!! Okay, fixed it!! Thanks Urufu chan.\r\n\r\np.s. Just wondering, do you know what my nickname for you means?!
Date: 16/06/11 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Haha, even when the last bit of that was about your next update, I still loved it! Again, I love the characters' portrayals just because they are so much fun. And it was awesome for you to join in on the chat! Haha, nice touch. Good luck with your exams, Glomp! Perhaps I'll telepathically send you my smarts, since today was the last of school for me...hehe. Once again, good luck and keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I got straight A\'s thanks to your telepathic epicness, thank you for the help XD
Date: 19/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Numero Uno
Awesome as a sand nin, definitely! I love your writing! The entire thing was very realistic in terms of personalities. And it was just plain humorous. Tobi's last line made me fall out of my seat in laughter. And then the little bit with Shikamaru was priceless, I am so glad you put that in! I love your writing, and I can't wait to read more. Another chat room would be cool if you're up to it!
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'ll have to think on what I\'ll revolve the next chat on then! ^-^ thanks for the review!
Date: 03/07/11 Title: Chapter 9: Hidan Would Be Excepted Unless You Were Retarded
Wow. I commend you. It's a great moral, and even through all of your crazy fun in this story, your point was amazingly displayed. Well done. Good work.
Oh, and Urufu means wolf, right? If it doesn't, I'm gonna have to go burn that online dictionary/translator... how I'll burn something on the internet, I don't know, but I'll figure it out eventually....
Author's Response: Thanks for that, I\'m really glad I made my point :)\r\nHomophobes make about as much sense as- nope. Scratch that: they make no fricken sense.\r\n\r\nOh, and you probably used the same online dictionary as me then, because, as far as I\'m aware, Urufu means wolf... though I guess it could be the lyrics to \"burn baby burn\" if that\'s what you thought it was.....
Date: 25/04/11 Title: Chapter 4: Zetsu's Sides Think Alike
Aw! Poor, poor Zetsu! That was so sad :(
Excellent job well done! I really love this story. Volunteer work to ruin lives sounded just like Pein in a strange way. I cannot think of any ideas for you right now cuz it is 6:30 in the morning right now and my brain does not function properly right now. But if I ever do get an idea, I will make a beeline right over here! But please don't stop this story! I really really enjoy it because I love your hilarious ideas! Keep up the great work with your writing.
Author's Response: I love challenging myself to keep the characters in character. I really liked how Pein came out in this one, thanks! I\'ll definitely do my best to continue the story, ideas are just hard to come by ^-^
Date: 27/03/11 Title: Chapter 2: Normal friends, Hidden Plots, And Fails
Yes! I love these chat rooms! You're amazingly good at them. This was even funnier than the first one! Please keep up the good work! More would be awesome!
Author's Response: I wonder if Deidara actually found Dora123? \"Danger danger Will Robinson!\"\r\nGiant tidal wave on internet glomp! Thank you for your review!! They make me even more habitually happy than my usual self!!
Date: 10/10/11 Title: Chapter 11: The Show Closer
D: I don't believe this! Glomp-chan, I can't believe you're leaving! XP Oh... I'll miss you so much... I know this stuff happens, but still, it was nice having you around while it lasted... *sigh* Anyway... best of luck to you, Glomp-chan. Hopefully, we'll see you soon.
Date: 05/04/11 Title: Chapter 3: Konan Hates Fan Girls
So when I read the Itachi/Sasori fan girl part, I was just like 'OMG I knew it!' And then it turns out they were actually fan girls....
Another amazing and hilarious web chat to add to the already awesome collection! If you have more ideas, please share! I love reading your hilarious writings! They make me smile so much :)
Author's Response: \'I like so TOTally like just sort of YAH!\' Wait... what?! Um... not at you, my brain just stopped working for whatever reason... possibly because I see ninja\'s in Webkinz and on the bus with me.... yah..... I\'m glad that I can make you happy (and not end up in a padded room...) ^-^ (yet)
Rated: PG
[Reviews - 3]Category: General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Sasuke and Sakura
Characters: Kakashi Hatake, Naruto Uzumaki, Pair NaruHina, Pair SasuSaku, Sakura Haruno, Sasuke Uchiha
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, General
Warnings: Drabble
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 20 | Completed: No | Word count: 41648 | Read count: 22778 [Report This]
Published: 22/03/11 | Updated: 23/03/11
Date: 26/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Hmm.... there are quite a few spelling errors. It's also somewhat hard to read because of the lack of spacing. It would be nice if all of this was fixed.
However, I will say that you have a cute intro to what could only be an even cuter story. I will continue to read, mainly because I love NaruHina fluff!
Rated: 18
[Reviews - 9]WARNING-GRAPHC LEMONS I own nothing but my own character.
Category: OC-centric, Het Romance > Angst
Characters: Kabuto Yakushi
Genres: Romance
Warnings: Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 44 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 42225 | Read count: 17563 [Report This]
Published: 22/03/11 | Updated: 05/04/11
Date: 24/03/11 Title: Chapter 1: Character Info
I'm sorry but I cannot read this story. I do not read graphic lemon stories or anything of intense sexual nature (by the way, you should put graphic lemon as a genre in the summary). But I'm reviewing to tell you that your story is posted as a round robin. That means other people can add to your story. If you don't want that, I suggest you quickly change it before someone posts a chapter to this story.
Date: 05/04/11 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 43: Living
So, after I left that review advising you to change the round robin thing, I felt bad. I felt bad because I had disregarded this story only because of my discomfort in graphic lemons. So I gave this story a chance, and I've been reading it like crazy (except for the graphic lemons, obviously).
And here I thought this story was just going to be about sex, sex, and more sex. And it wasn't. In the beginning, there was a lot of it (thanks for the warnings, by the way; helped me a lot) but there was such a good plot to join it.
I'm very glad I decided to read this. Everything was so well-written. The plot was great, the characters were not as OOC as I had thought, and the romance was just freaking adorable!
This story evoked so many emotions, it was ridiculous. Anger, happiness, sadness, I felt everything. The story, the twists, the fluff, the romance, it all just compiled into an amazing story. I'm so disappointed it's over.
This was an incredible story, unique and interesting. You're a very talented author, and I look forward to checking out any other stories you decide to post! Keep the amazing work with your writing! I'd give this story a rating of 10, but TONFA has replaced it with a thumbs up/down. So of course, I'm just going to hit 'like' button as many times as I can until I break it ;D
Author's Response: Thanx 4 giving me another chance. :)\r\nAnd thanx 4 the great review.\r\nI\'m planning on a Gaara one next, or a Deidara. Probably do both eventually. LOL.\r\nAnd thanx 4 liking how I write, I am planning on becoming an author one day.\r\nI\'m reallt glad that you enjoyed it. :)
Rated: U
[Reviews - 32]Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU, General Fiction > Naruto, OC-centric
Characters: All
Genres: Drama
Warnings: AU
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 16 | Completed: No | Word count: 14487 | Read count: 18699 [Report This]
Published: 24/03/11 | Updated: 23/04/12
Date: 24/06/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2
Aww, you're welcome for the review. I'm glad that review was able to make you so happy :D
Ooh, the plot is showing even more now. I actually felt bad about the people having to be split up into genin teams they obviously wouldn't enjoy.
Amanda's dialogue is truly frightening, and she's not even saying anything really that scary. Just the way she speaks, and you show that so well. Every ounce of detail and description you show truly illustrates the story so well. I'm really enjoying this. It's so unique and so dark, I like it a lot! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think like this story a lot, mainly because it allows me to illustrate my writing style. I usually do write dark fantasy, and in this I really can show where my strengths lie. Thanks so much!\r\n\r\nI try to write her lines in a dark and mature fashion, like something you would not expect a teenage girl to say. I am really glad it is frightening, I can not wait to hear your opinion on the rest of the story, which I have to go write. I expect updates later today. Thanks!
Date: 24/06/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3
Yay! Another one! Wow, you're really working hard on your stories. Good for you :D
Once again, excellent work! The pain that Neji felt was very evident and described very well. The surroundings were also elaborated very nicely, not just dully explaining 'this was here...' and 'that was over there...' It actually had a nice flow to it.
It was also nice to see how the fold acts without Amanda around. It was a little expected but still pretty funny to see how everyone was so chill.
Nice job! I look forward to more, this is definitely going very well! Keep up the great work with your stories!
Author's Response: Yep, I have been finishng school, and to make up for my being basically M.I.A on this site, you get mega fast updates! \r\n\r\nThanks! Yea, well, who wouldn\'t be more serious with super creepy girl hanging around you like a hawk? Thanks for the review!
Date: 26/06/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4
Aw, you're going to be thirteen? How exciting, you'll be a teenager! Happy early birthday!
And as a birthday present, some more praise is in order!
Once again, your improvement has astounded me. The dark style you used to write with has greatly improved, making even an enjoyable feast seem dangerous and threatening. Your character is very well-developed as the scary and dangerous girl you make her out to be. I commend you on this amazing dark writing style; it has impressed me more than it did 5 months ago when you first started. Great work, and I hope to see you continue to be amazing!
Author's Response: Aww..thanks so much. You have been with me on my stories for the last five months, and I appreciate it so much! Thanks, i really love my writing style now. Thanks so much for your support. =D
Date: 02/10/11 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 9
XD A Witch of Darkness, that's rich. A lovely way to end such a chapter.
Well, now we know Danzou is creeping on Amanda...or I sure hope it's Danzou, otherwise, Sai is just being a creeper XP
Anyway, the plot has thickened, and now everything is heating up. Personal training sessions, an angry Amanda, and ANBU spying on the coven, this is definitely getting good! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Lol, yes. Danzo is creeping on Amanda. ROOT is going to be a key concept in this story! =D I will try to update soon!
Date: 31/07/11 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 7
Yup, it's official.
I'm scared of Amanda's true power.
This was so dark that it had me on the edge of my seat. And I know I said this, but your writing has seriously improved. You describe the little things, hinting here and there at the dark atmosphere and the fear in the room.
I forgot to mention this before, but I kind of like how you describe things through Neji's point of view. He's the newest member, and the dark tension affects him more because he's not as used to it. I like that idea.
Great work, this was amazing. Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: ee! Thanks so much for your review. They always make me so incredibly happy. I am glad I wrote the fear and atmosphere well! I try my best. Now I have to face eighth grade, but I still will update as often as possible. Thanks so much! I\'ll update soon!\r\n
Date: 30/09/11 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 8
Haha, Neji, how naive, thinking Amanda-sama needs help. Pfft, how innocent XD
When Amanda walked in, I wanted to laugh and hide in a corner at the same time. I can never imagine that angry, so it's both comical and frightening. However, when she yelled 'Nine minutes' from the top of the stairs, I had to laugh. She's definitely not too happy ;) The Hokage is going to be in for a huge terror now.
Great work, Fantasy Madeline! This chapter was both dark, as usual, and relatively funny. It makes me eager to read more and see how the Hokage reacts to Amanda's fury. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks for reviewing! I thought the whole \'I\'m splattered with ink and ready to murder someone\' was a comical look on Amanda as well. She was pretty annoyed, and you will see why next chapter. I hope to update soon! XDd
Date: 12/06/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1
Brilliant. Just brilliant.
Seriously, I have read everything you have posted on this site from the beginning, so I have seen your writing style. And this chapter, this amazing chapter, really illustrated your development as a writer. It still has that dark aura that you use, but it also has a more intoxicating and sophisticated sort of feeling. It's elaborate and thrilling, and I loved it all.
Well done on such an astounding improvement. I look forward to seeing how your writing progresses with this story. Keep up the great work with your writing and your other stories.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am so so ridiculously happy that you liked that chapter. One of the reasons I was away from this site, was that I was practicing writing styles. I am so glad you think I have improved, and I am ready to work on this story again! thanks so much, you made me so so so happy.
Date: 03/07/11 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5
Hokage-san? Hokage-san... holy crap... Yeah, I blanched when I read that.
I have to agree with the Hokage; Amanda has some very formal way of speaking. But I liked it; definitely adds to the dark style of the story.
I think the Hokage was very in character. He wasn't completely dumbfounded by Amanda, only enough that he would be a bit bewildered and surprised.
Wow, awesome job with this chapter. I liked it. It was nice to see Amanda in a different setting yet still hold her scary and powerful aura over others. Especially the Hokage... poor old man....
Author's Response: I am so happy i did a good job of making the Hokage in character. I wanted to make Amanda a believable dark character, without making her all \'I will kill your children and feast on the blood of puppies\'. So, I am happy that both her and the hokage were in character. Hokage-san. Yea. I looked at it from this perspective. You are used to growing up your whole life happily obeying your leader who you respect. Then, you meet someone else \'important\'. You wouldn\'t have as much respect for them. \r\n\r\nThanks so much for reading and reviewing!!! =D
Date: 30/12/11 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 12
So... much... beautiful... insight.
This was really amazing. I love how it changed from Itami to Amanda's flashbacks. It provided great transition. And the actual content of this chapter was definitely amazing. This story truly has taken a wonderful turn with some great twists, I really love it.
Great work, Fantasy Madeline! This fic is definitely shaping to be a fantastic story. Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Yay!!! I wasn\'t sure how it was going to turn out, but I\'m pleased with this chapter. Giving some nice moments for the horror to soon follow.....kukukuku...