OH MAN!!! Tenten's spilled her shocking secret to Lilah, Naruto, and KIba!!! I wonder what's gonna happen next. I'm so excited!
Also, the thing about Tenten staring at Aiden, and then closing her eyes, then opening them to find him staring at her was sweet. And was it she who instigated the kiss, or him?
I'm beyond psyched for the next chapter and our lovely prince Aiden to come to the rescue!!!!

Author's Response: haha thank you very much. and it was Aiden who initiated the kiss, not her. though she didnt really mind it that much...heh heh heh...

Hey, I have a question: werewolves like Naruto...are they like normal werewolves (I can't believe I just said 'normal' werewolves...) and turn on the full moon, or his awesome and can, like, wolf out whenever he wants? (Wolf out...that's kind of a cool term...)

Author's Response: the werewolves can transform whenever they want to. Just imagine the twilight werewolves and you\'ll get the idea. my werewolves are just so much cooler though...well...because they\'re MINE!!! :D

YESSSSS!!!! I loved this chapter. I have to say this was my favorite, probably because Tenten was keeping score. Ah, that was so funny! I started just shaking with laughter. Oh, you are too good, Crimson Lily. You are too good.
Well, in answer to your question about Tenten and Aiden: are they moving too fast? Well, to be honest, I thought about it. I really did. And, my answer is: in my opinion, you're doing just fine. I mean, YOU might think you're moving too fast, but that's because you're the author. Personally, I end up thinking I'm moving too slow. But it's only because you don't see your story from the perspective others do, being the author. You're also the one writing it, not reading it, and thus, your sense of time is off-balanced. Because it takes much longer to write than to read, no?
So, in light of all that, I congratulate you-- you're moving along just fine. And also, keeping Tenten's personality at the same level-- her snappiness and cool sarcasm-- combined with her newfound desire is good too. I would've hated you so terribly much if you had started making her all sappy. I would've stopped reading. >:)
Anyway. Elias is gonna kidnap Tenten?! Wow, that's intense. And Prince Aiden is gonna save her, right? Right?
And then, bringing up Neji. Ah, i hated that, but at the same time, I immensely enjoyed the fact that she is falling out of love with Neji and falling in love with Aiden. Even though I love NejiTen. But whatever-- it's your story. Things go the way YOU want them to go, no?
Well, anyway. I am so psyched to read the next chapter.
No, I didn't do that right...
I AM SO PSYCHED TO READ THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
There-- that conveys my emotions much better. :D
Also... *blushes and looks away* ...Nice touch, adding the stuff Tenten and Aiden were doing. I mean, it was kinda...awesome. No joke. I may be a pervert, but it was awesome. Like, adding that in every once in a while, I'm ashamed to say, keeps people's interest.
Okay. That's all.
Kisses,
Sarah-hime

These were done well; I did enjoy reading them. The verses pack a punch without being overly showy, and there's not a pressure to be a Shakespeare sonnet, instead opting for the "speech of simplicity", as I like to call it, or getting the meaning across with the fewest words for the greatest impact. I think you've done well, and I look forward to reading more soon. (I was never a very good poet; it was always my weak point in writing.)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I agree with the simplicity thing totally! I tend to start my poems from an feeling or a symbolism and form the poem around one line or in the case of I am Hated, I just tried to write a line for each and have them flow together.