Reviews For Okashii
Name: Dag (Signed) · Date: 29/08/08 - 12:14 pm · For: Saisho
Hi, I just had a look at the first chapter, and although I appreciate what you are trying to do (and you're obviously skilled with language), I feel that this story is too... wordy. I know that descriptions are an integral part of writing, but it is possible to OVER describe, which is what I think you've done here. I find myself having to read a sentence over again because there was too much detail to take in the first time around. Words should add meaning, not obscure it. Still, your writing is beautiful and you should definitely continue. I hope I don't sound like I'm being mean or over-critical. Afterall, I wouldn't bother reviewing if your story was pants :p lol. Tis just my opinion. But you have my utmost respect. We need more writers like you who really make the effort.
Author's Response: XD Yes, people have told me that my stories are too "wordy" and I'm trying to tone it down a bit. I hope it's getting better. =.= rnI understand what you mean, I'll try my best!! :] I accept your comment for what you're trying to say, because as a reviewer and reader, I can understand better as to what the community wants. X) Thank you for taking the time to review!!
Name: AikoMatsuo (Signed) · Date: 14/08/08 - 01:11 am · For: Merodi
Hay greatm, keep it up, im really getting into this.
love AikoMatsuo xoxoxo
Author's Response: ^.^ Thanks for taking the time to review!! It's good to know someone's getting into the story.