haha...
nice...

haha...
tht ws nice... :D
i loved this chapter too... =)
bt eh... she shouldn't hv laughed so much at sasuke... =_=
well... glad she finally found a job n bingley too... :D
i lol'd wen the ichiraku girl repeated grace's sentence bout hving wat naruto has... xDDD
awesome chappie

haha....
Tht ws superb....!! :D
I Simply lovd it.....
It really lookd realistic....
Lol at hw much she speaks..... :P
i wish all tht would actually happen to me..... :'(
awesome chapter....
Ibiki..... :P
hehe.... Naruto xD

Omg omg omg omg!!! XD HOLY CRAP THIS IS FUNNY!! *wheeze. Sputter. Cough. Deep breath!* Ok I can breathe again! Damn that was hilarious! X3 I Loved this chapter! I wouldn't want to be Ino though......LOL

NOOOOO!!! I Love this fic! lol, you are horrible for that!

OOHHHHHH!!! Grace DIES!! ZOMG!
That's some crazy shit right there!
LOL. Sasuke's a stupid asshole... I freakin' hate him! What a douche!
Anyway... Good thing there's a sequel!

……Grace has fallen….

I’m unsure how to respond. This story has seemed like a roller coaster, with all the misinterpretations, laughter, tears, and heart break. It was moving and captivating in a way that now it being at an end rendered me motionless and thoughtless, staring at my monitor’s screen with my mind ajar. I draw a blank in what to say and what speak of basically as I feel a numb sense fall upon me as I went and reread the ending; Grace has fallen.

The mere concept is basic and understandable to story but, it just seems odd. Frankly I find myself to being mad with this choice of words; odd. But, it seems fitting to me as means to figuring out what I should say.

I paused for a while to figure out what I should say to you as a reader and fellow humble writer as many say. I reflected on old reviews I’ve given to other writers and how short, to the point but, common they were. I see that as a writer and reader I’ve grown to go and search for more than just entertainment. I find it a saddening fact; my honor teacher I choose to blame childishly, for this awakening idea of showing more input than just critiquing what is wrong, what could be better, etc. To put more of an effort to reading between the lines so to speak and speak of how the story is as a story.

Now I figure you might find what I’ve written so far confusing and maddening along as being pointless to you for it does nothing to or for you; I happen to think this way and will try to explain my words along with what I’ve felt on this chapter and this story. I find it hard though trying to describe what I feel because it’s something that just doesn’t seem justified by the words I choose.

Now I usually don’t put this much thought into a review; before I started to do so I use to just congratulate what was good, say what I thought would be better and moved on. But with this awakened idea and the usual need to be a more intelligent person I will try my best to do so.

Now some things I find that made me continue to read this story was the ongoing problem; Grace and Sasuke not expressing to each other how they feel. I found it sometimes very annoying you painstakingly dense the girl was but, I come to accept; it was the best for the story. How the story unfolded from your words made it seem lively in a sense that more could and would happen. I’m not good at the whole describing and connecting the metaphors, foils, similes ordeal so I won’t go to the extent to try and sound like I do. My brain draws a blank to this.

Grace, I must say as I can say without making myself sound well…stupid in most ways is a good OCC. Her interaction with the story was very unique and heart wrenching. She made the story seem more dramatic and numbing but, realistic and amusing to read. Not ha-ha amusing though some parts were; the smile from the quirks and sillies that were made. I like your story because of this.

The chapter ending it made it seem complete in the sense of what has happened. Grace and Sasuke seemed right with one another then again not. Ending in tragedy seems to be a fad around here but, it’s a good one. The climax was shocking, horrifying, but…right. It seemed to work for Grace wouldn’t have survived being in the sound village; her image of innocence, youth, and childishness would’ve been destroyed so it’s only natural to assume that you would kill her to preserve it (you probably didn’t think of it like this though).

I rate your story with a 10 because it was magnificent in these senses and find what I’ve written seems to fit what I have to say. I do have though a slight change I’d like to voice only because it will nag me to no ends. Another quirk I picked up from my English honors teacher… I love her but; her teaching is so hard to understand at times. The ending sentence is what was slightly bugging me along with the spacing between scenes. You did it for some but, not all; not sure if that was intentionally. I feel would be better if you place it like this:

“Cradling her close to his chest, his eyes were unable to focus on anything but a blank space. He felt his world end he held her, feeling as her pulse slowly comes to a deafening halt. “

Now, I don’t mind if you don’t use it; I said what was bugging me and now my brain should leave me alone…Mah, as I come to a close, forgive the length of the review…had no idea it would go to 847 words, *laugh out loud**


CKL

so I just pretty much read the whol story. it took me awhile but im totally in love with it! i was so happy when Grace finally understood her feelings for Sasuke! You are such an amazing writer, i love all the detail and effort you put into it. I absolutly cannot wait for the next chapter! I will definatly be reading the next sequel. (:

Ohh boy....I don't if it's the cold or excitement but, I am shaking with suspense! I do hate that Sasuke couldn't wait to hear what Grace had to say. Plus how the hell does he think he is going to get away with drugging her when Grace comes to? I bet she is not going to be pleasant about it and Sasuke is going to be in deeper hot water than in the actual story. Kiddnapping royality, really? I can't wait to see what is going to happen next girl, you have totally rocked with this story!

I do like how Grace has finally accepted her feelings and gets that Sasuke likes her too. I do hope things don't go sour between them.... You know something....whre is Sasuke going to put Grace as he's stuck in the box thing? Along with how is he going to fight Naruto with her perhaps in the way? Questions that keep me reading!

Mah, and I digress. Any way keep up the good work and I can't wait to see the finale! Then the sequel! *Cheers*** Awesome stuff....

Wow... I can't even put into words how frustrating this chapter was.
I want to kill Sasuke and Grace just to get it over with... Is that wrong of me? lol
I already hate Sasuke as it is. hahahaha!
Anyway! Putting aside my hatred for a certain Uchiha, great chapter! Grace is up to her usual obliviousness! :]

OMG. FUNKYTOES. A MISUNDERSTANDING. NOT COOL.

I love your story! I think its amazingly written, and I know that if I got a review, I'd hope for it to be encouraging, so I thought I'd help you out. I'm sure you got plenty of reviews for this last chapter, and I can't wait for the next one...hopefully it starts where this chapter left off, and even though I have a hunch that Grace is going to be naive and run away or mention Naruto or something, I can't help but hope that it's semi-romatic or that she doesn't anger him... So yeah, I love your name, and I apologize for not reviewing before now. Please keep up the great work, and maybe you could give me some tips for some ideas I have, because I want to write a story, but I don't think it would work out... thanks, and please upade soon!

I really enjoyed this chapter, and I mean finally Sasuke gets the courage to tell her right!? lol anyway The whole baby carrier thing was odd and i didn't get it lol but i still loved it. Can't wait to read the next one