Reviews For Weddings,Bets,and Charades
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 27/04/07 - 07:37 pm · For: Chapter 8: YAY! *swoon*
YAY!! *hands you a cookie* That was such a nice little ending, at first I thought I was falling behind on my sensei duties with how many new chappies there were but I was wrong. Anyways, I loved the ending and how you did it, and I really hope that some of my advice helped you. Also I still can't believe I was the only one who reviewed it. Anyways, great job and keep on writing more, I can see you getting much better at this!! ^_^
Author's Response: *chews on cookie* YAY!!! I got a cookie for writing! And , I really wonder if you're the only person who even read it...It's okay , but I'm kinda sorry for proclaiming you my sensei without permission!! Hmm...bad idea for Kisame to get eated up right there..
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 27/04/07 - 07:32 pm · For: Chapter 7: Remind me again...
*laughs a bit* very well written, and actually different from what you said, kinda funny!! Now I have the warm and fuzzies from it...my student doing so good on her own!! *feels eyes begin to water.*
Author's Response: oddly enough , this feels like a Lee+Gai moment... wow , that was a loooong time ago..
Author's Response: oddly enough , this feels like a Lee+Gai moment... wow , that was a loooong time ago..
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 27/04/07 - 07:28 pm · For: Chapter 6: Preparing
its not bad grammer, just mediocre grammer. Anyways, this chapter was interesting to say the least, and I could follow it very well, good job!! Although watch out for going into script style by putting action in these things: ** and an actual story. All in all I say good job!
Author's Response: filler chapter..? TT.TT
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 16/04/07 - 04:05 pm · For: Chapter 4:BEHOLD FLUFFINESS!!!
Well this was a good attempt at Fluff, and no I didn't confuse it for a rape scene...although..bah..I have to make this short, so can't give much advice right now..and yes real name I don't mind
Author's Response: although what?thankies!In my opinion,I still got a long way to go!advice?fire away!your reviews keep me alive.Id maybe get morge if i wrote more...thx!
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 05/04/07 - 05:03 pm · For: Chapter 3:Rising Suspicion
Okay..so this chapter was a bit longer and very consistant!! GREAT JOB!!! As for advice..at the moment I don't have any, but I might have some for next chapter..keep it up..you are getting better!
Author's Response: Eep!!another one!!happy as a little schoolgirl!then again,i am one..im exited about the next chapter, and it would come sooner if only i didnt have writers block..i blame myself for that.and for walking in on my cousin..eugh!thx for reviewing!>o<; amaikomoriuta
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 - 05:48 pm · For: Chapter 2:Lesson no.1:Table Manners
*giggles* this chapter was really good..short and sweet..anyways, all I have to say is that with each chapter you should get in everything you want to happen in that moment, don't seperate one scene into a million chapters. I made that same mistake with my first ever fic..and I got a review that told me I should hurry up with the fic..(my chapterly advice I guess..and I am putting it on my faves!!)
I really think that you have potential hun..that is why I am helping you out..
Name: uzamaki_fluff (Signed) · Date: 03/04/07 - 06:29 pm · For: Chapter 1:A Little Bet Never Hurt Anyone
hmm...the story idea is excellent, but I have to say one thing..use good punctuation, and inbtween sentances put at least two spaces. To put it kindly it was kind of a headache to read...I hope you understand..because it would make it much readable for the other readers to come across it.
Other than that..like I said this is a really good idea for a story and a good start. Of course I am a HinaKiba fan..
Author's Response: thanks for the advice!i really appreciate it.even if it was half an insult!!
Author's Response: ack , you're right!it really is kinda choppy...phooey.but thanks again!i was planning on adding to this chapter , but i guess not.potential?thanks!eep!(hides in corner)