Reviews For The Leaf and The Moon
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/07/13 - 05:24 pm · For: The Encounter
I'm very glad I decided to read this. The mermaid thing had thrown me off back when it was first published, but thankfully I'm opening myself up to more fanfictions. Which means I am lucky you updated again because I get to read this. Other than mistakes here and there this was great.
I really like Sayuri. As Eri said, she is so curious and naive. It's like reading about a child, yet she also holds a kindness to her. Eri is also a very interesting character. He's very strong and brave. I love the mer-people you have introduced us to so far. Yet you also added in some foreshadowing of bad pasts with humans for Eri. Could something have happened to make Sayuri's father not like her going to the surface as well?
So Kakashi was on the ship, huh? And since he only has one eye, this take place after the war and Obito's death. I wonder what kind of state of mind he'll be in. It can't be so bad if he would return the gift of the pearl with silver. He also was acting nice to Sayuri. At least until she was noticed and had to run.
A pirate attack, huh? Will they be a problem later on? I'm very glad Sayuri found Kakashi, and that Eri helped keep her safe as well as keep Kakashi alive. I don't know what I'd do (or the future Konoha) without him. How will this experience affect him, though?
I'm very eager to read more of this. Great chapter, Ontuva-chan.
Author's Response: YAY, A LONG REVIEW! ^^ (They make me melt inside. Thank you~)
Sayuri is a bit like a child and I want her to hold on to that innosence as long as she possibly can. And Eri is definitely coming back! (I already feel Eri-deprived and I know when he's coming back. XD) Both Eri and Sayuri's father have had bad experiences. I don't want to spoil, because I may incorporate them into the story and I'm not yet sure how I'm going to do that.
I think Kakashi is a kind of person who doesn't flinch when something unexpected (like a mermaid popping from sea) happens. Or maybe he is just too lazy to react like normal people would. :'D
Also, pirates will be back. And they will be a problem. Also, they like to sell mermaids. (I may have spoiled a bit. But still, I had to. XD)
Thank you very much for your AWESOME review Sasaui-chan! I'll go answer to rest of your reviews now. :)
Name: Rainbow Fire (Signed) · Date: 22/08/11 - 08:44 am · For: The Encounter
Oh, this was amazing! Everything, from the peaceful ocean to the shipwreck, was so vivid and elaborate, I loved it! You've already added such great life to Sayuri and Eri; they're so brilliantly described. And Kakashi and the bell, wow, I love the symbolization there; it's a great reference to the manga.
Oh wow, now I must move onto the next chapter! Excellent work with this!
Author's Response: Hello and sorry for not answering ;_; I'm a terrible person it seems. I usually read every review I get, but sometimes I just forget to answer to them. ;_;
But thank you for your sweet review! It's always nice to receive feedback (every kind) and I'm glad that you like my OC's as well as Kakashi. :D
I'll go and answer your other reviews now! But seriously - thank you for reading and reviewing!
Name: Kakashifan727 (Signed) · Date: 18/08/11 - 03:38 pm · For: The Encounter
Thought it was going to be LM ripoff, but glad it wasn't. Seems interesting...keep going with it. Have you heard of Ponyo? Kinda like LM but JPN.
Author's Response: A NEW REVIEWER! *happy dance*
rnrnWell, I basically got the idea from Little Mermaid (H.C. Andersen's version, not Disney's, although Sayuri's personality is a bit like Ariel's, I guess), but I didn't want to copy the story straight out from my story book and just change the character names. That would just be wrong.
rnAnd yeah, I've watched Ponyo! I didn't like it as much as I like the rest of Studio Ghibli's work, but still, it was a good movie. :D Can't remember much of it though...
rnHuge thanks to you for taking your time reading AND reviewing, it means a world to me. ^^
Name: Fantasy Madeline (Signed) · Date: 14/08/11 - 07:38 pm · For: The Encounter
I am intrigued with this story. Kakashi has, and always will be, one of my favorite characters. You take an original spin on a classic myth of fairy tales, and add your flare on it to make it fit the already great storyline of Naruto. With that, you add another world, and an explanation of that world itself. You add drama and a dash of mystery, which I love. Kid kakashi with his lightning reflexes was spot on, and I loved (what I assumed was) the bell. Please updated as soon as possible, I can not wait for your next chapter. Until then I wish you happy writing.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! (A NEW REVIEWER *bounces around happily*) Seriously speaking: thank you for taking your time to actually post a review (I know many readers who don't do it), it means a lot to me to actually hear from readers. :) If you haven't yet checked out inuyashas_only_1's "Learning to Run" I suggest to read it too. It's also a mermaid OC/Kakashi -story. I'm having a friendly "showdown" with Sarah-hime and gosh it's fun! :D
rnI'm actually really afraid of writing about Kakashi, because his my favourite character too and I don't know whether I can write him. You get what I mean? I fear that he'll be very OOC... But we'll see about that in the next chapter! Which I'll hopefully write soon. But yeah, it was the silver bell! I didn't want to write the word 'bell', because Sayuri wouldn't know what a bell was.
rnGlad to hear that you like this story so far (I kinda took a leap of faith with this one and I'm running wildly with clichés). I'm trying to write an update asap! But I must warn you that I'm a slow updater... ._.
Name: inuyashas_only_1 (Signed) · Date: 20/06/11 - 12:05 am · For: The Encounter
Of course, as I mentioned in the email, IT'S AWESOME!!! XD
I love the little chibi-Kakashi with his lightning reflexes and pretty hair and the bell (I'm guessing it's a bell...I mean I kept thinking of the bell test he gave to Team 7 in the beginning of the series, haha).
As mentioned, I looooove Eri and Sayuri is so freaking adorable. :3 I can not WAIT for more chapters so let me know each time you update, and keep going...I'm so psyched for this to get going and head in...well, whatever direction you've decided to take this in.
Kisses!
Sarah-hime
Author's Response: Whaat, I'm sure I responded to you! ;_; I HAVEN'T, I'm so sorry... ._.
rnAnd yep, you guessed right about the bell. It was the closest thing I could think Kakashi would actually give away for a pearl. And to Sayuri it's a big treasure!
rnAnd believe me, I haven't felt this good about a story in a very long time! I'm very excited to continue this (and have you as a reader, you are awesome!). :3
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/06/11 - 08:51 am · For: The Encounter
Wow! This was really good! It's different than what is normally found on this site. I really like this. Each sentence seemed to flow right into the next, it was amazing. I really liked this, it started out as innocent and fun, and then turned into an incoming disaster. It was a great first chapter. I will admit I saw a few grammar and spelling errors, but it was okay because I could still understand what I was reading *thumbs up* Keep up the good work with this, this seems really interesting, and I would really like to read more.
Author's Response: Oh thank you, thank you, thank you for reviewing! I was really afraid I wouldn't get them, because just like you said, this isn't what's normally found on this site. :) I wanted to try something different and I went with it! I'm glad my writing seemed to flow (as a Finnish person that's the best comment I can get! It's kind of hard to think something in Finnish and then translate it to English, not to mention to make it actually sound like something an English native would write and like to read.) I'm trying to spot the errors and correct them (I might not succeed as I'm really blind to my own mistakes XD). Glad to hear you still understood what I was trying to say! And thank you very much for your kind words! And supery thanks for reviewing! :3 *bows*