This... was the best intro characters ever... There was just so much juxtaposition between the characters that it was beautiful.
It was so sad and sweet at the same time when Shin left his mother to go on an adventure. It was a great way to show his outgoing personality, it was amazing.
And then you went and threw this sadistic little fourteen-year-old out there, scaring the crap out of me. I mean, she tried to kill her father! How scary...
It was a wonderful blend of opposite characters, and you really made it work to your advantage. It was a fantastic chapter, and it shows your great writing ability. Nice job! Now I must read more!
Author's Response: Wow, I've gotten a lot of positive feedback for this chapter. I'm glad it impressed you. Shin's little scene with his mom was very touching, and I enjoyed that part. Writing Karasu was a challenge, as I don't usually write dark characters like her. But I'm glad she came out so well. The best part, of course, was putting Shin and Karasu together. Hehe, I'm so evil. Thank you so much for the positive feedback, it is really making my day :D
Interesting intro to these characters. I was honestly waiting for a flood or something, considering there was an avalanche in the last chapter, but I guess this story isn't completely centered around natural disasters :P
Anyway, I think Amaya's personality was very funny, and her encounter with Masuyo just had me laughing the entire time. And Yuu's intro seemed a little mysterious at first, and then we get to see a little insight into his family life, which I really liked.
Overall, nice work with the characters. I can't wait to see how you handle the others :)
Author's Response: Haha, well, I'm sorry if I disappointed you with no flood. But I'm glad the scene between Amaya and Masuyo had you laughing. I was laughing when I wrote that scene myself XD I'm glad the look into Yuu's home life interested you, as I spent a while trying to decide how I wanted him to turn out. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! You rock!
Wow. That's so sad. I didn't see it coming, as an avalanche was honestly the last thing I was thinking of. But it was unexpected, and the way you wrote it was amazingly descriptive. It played out like a movie scene in my head. Well done.
Author's Response: Well, I'm glad I caught you off guard :D Wow, a movie scene, huh? That's such a great compliment! I try to keep my writing as descriptive and intersting as possible, so I'm glad it's working out so far. Thank you so much for giving my story the time of day! It really means a lot!
From what I've seen, it kind of looks like you have the most characters in any of the joint stories. Unless I counted wrong, but between the good guys and bad guys, you have quite the group of submissions.
It is interesting to see how this will turn out, and the plot even sounds really interesting and different. I look forward to reading.
Author's Response: Yeah, I do have quite the group of characters. I'm worried about messing everyone up.... I do hope you enjoy this though!
Wow! The last of the heroes and the start of the other bad guys! It's so cool! There were so many characters in this one, and it was awesome! Good job, sis! Keep up the good work with this great story, you're doing an amazing job with all the characters, and the idea is really cool!
Author's Response: Yeah, it was a great relief to finish all the intros for the good guys. Now I have bad guys left... Wow, thank you so much for the support! I really appreciate it! Thanks a lot!
Oh man, that dude was so mean! I wanted to kick his butt for hurting them!
Meanie pants...
And the bad guys were so cool! Madara's kids are that old?! Well, it was still awesome, hahaha!
Author's Response: Haha, yes, he certainly was a meanie pants. Hey, you never know who Madara's kids could be or how old they are ;) I'm happy you liked it! Thanks for reading!
Aw, Shin and his mom are so cute! What a nice family.
And Karasu is scary! I mean, I saw the review about her description, but you made her super scary!
Haha, flying pink fairy :) Wow, she killed that pig for fun... she's so evil! Poor pig...
Nice job! This is the best chapter so far!
Author's Response: Yeah, Shin and his mom are really sweet. And Karasu was actually really fun to write about. She was different, which I kind of liked. Wow, everyone seemed to like the flying pink fairy. Maybe I'll bring her in again ;) I agree; poor pig... I wonder who else Karasu will torture.... Yay! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Wow! Amaya is so fun, I couldn't stop laughing! Yuu is really cool too. I wonder what will happen in the Leaf Village for them. Hehe... That will be fun :D
Author's Response: Yeah, Amaya and Yuu were fun to write about. Well, they're headed to the Leaf for a peace treaty meeting... Ha, I wonder how that will turn out :P Thanks for reading!
It was so sad! I can't believe something so horrible happened so early in the story! I'm scared to see what else happens.
Keep up the good work, sis!
Author's Response: I know! I'm surprised I made something so tragic come in for the first chapter too. Thanks for reading, it means a lot! :D
Whoaa, still as good as ever! It took me a few days to finally get read this piece, since I'm away from home and I can't be at the computer as much as I would like to be (forgive me if I have some errors in my English, I've had a long drinks since it's Midsummer's Day). ^^"
Still, I very much like your characters! I've noticed (at least when I write) that creating many OC's with different personalities is quite hard, but you've succeeded in it very well (although your readers have given you the basic ideas to work with, but you've given them life ^^). I also liked the feeling in this chapter very much! It started as a wanting to feel needed and special, and ended in the malicious feelings Megumi was feeling. Very good contrast! :) Can't wait for the next chapter! ^^
Author's Response: Whoo! I'm glad to here you liked this new chapter! It's also really awesome to hear that my readers appreciate the work that goes into writing the characters. I'm so happy you liked the way this chapter was written and how the characters were introduced. Thank you so much for your kind words! It really is appreciated! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Great chapter! I sorta had to refresh my memory about the story but it was a great chapter.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked it! Haha, don't worry about refreshing your memory, I do it all the time, especially with my own stories sometimes O_O Well anyways, thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm happy you enjoyed it!
My character! My character! Yay, I'm so excited she has been introduced. You did a great job with her, I mean creating her sad history of being the middle child. There was a great emotion in the chapter.
At the end of the chapter opens it right up, I think. It's gonna be great when all the characters meet.
Keep going you are doing a wonderful job.
Author's Response: *exhales deeply* Oh my goodness, what a huge relief. I feel like a huge weight has been lifted off my shoulders. Well, part of the weight, I'm still waiting for enchanted_ninja_girl and Star of the Sky to give me their feedback. But I'm glad you like the way I portrayed your character. And I think the characters will be meeting during the next chapter. I still have some villains to introduce here and there. But anyways, thank you so much for the support and thank you very much for your feedback! It's really appreciated, thanks a bunch!
Congratulations on 70 reviews! I forgot to say that in the last review, but that's just plain fantastic! I'm so pleased for you and TONFA can be so slow for reviews sometimes, so that just shows you what an amazing achievement that really is. I am so proud of you, cuz you totally deserve it.
Last call for romance too, huh? Much as I find that exciting (I like romance in stories), I don't think that really affects me, does it? Unless you teamed me up with Madara or someone (that was a joke - I doubt he's into ugly deformed bat-like obese ladies. I could fangirl him though I suppose. That'd be entertaining... We'd be like the new Sasuke and Karin - only worse - or worse still going down the Madara line I could end up as someone's mother. That would be horrible for everyone involved. Could you imagine having me as a Mum? I hope I neglect them for my rodents. I really do.)... or alternatively you got me to sexually harass the young men (now that I could almost see happening. Especially the perv.). Urgh... I think I need to get my mind off this entire train of thought before I either hopelessly confuse or just plain scare you with random suggestions. I'm way too good at that. My brain is a bit like a Pandora's box for stupid ideas at times...
Those were all more or less my poor attempts at humour by the way, but feel free to steal ideas you think might work. My brain is on loan at the moment. Not that you'd want it.Lets see, I love the fact that we're starting to get more & more of the plot coming through now. I also quite like the fact that the evil side is getting the first move. I mean, apart from anything else they're my side, right? Yay! Go Team Madara! *ahem* No, seriously, I like it because it's actually feels quite original. I mean they not only seem to know what's happening, but also who is involved and just seem to throughly have the upper hand here. It really makes me wonder how on earth Team Return-Of-The-Ninja (for lack of a better term) are going to even survive. I mean, they don't even know what's going on!
The Kazuki and Rin scene came across well. It was just the right amount of gross and callus cruelty to remind me of Orochimaru and Kabuto. The tigers were a nice touch too. I wonder if Rin picked them as experimental subjects on purpose because she doesn't like Kazuki so much...? Kazuki was a first class perv, but with just the right amount extra depth to make him more than a mere perv character too. I knew you'd do a first rate job and you did. You just need to believe in yourself. I liked Rin's reactions to him too. She just did not care about anything but her bloodthirsty science. I'm sure we'll be seeing more gruesome experiments from her later, but I was quite intrigued by the fact that Kazuki felt the need to have his cat 'grow' before he met someone he last saw at the age of 12. She made that much of an impression on him, huh?
Megumi's scene on the other hand was a great feeder back into the plot and was reminiscent of the ultimate scene from the last chapter. It's a great base stat for developments in the next installment and it's really kept the tension going for them. I cant wait.Kaoru seems like a lovely, sweet girl. She does actually remind me a bit of Gaara too (I know he's her ancestor), especially when she's with her siblings. She also provides an interesting throwback to Chapter 3, I think, with the whole parent-child dynamics going on again. She's smack bang in the middle there too, isn't she? Bless her heart.
Apart from anything else I'm impressed you managed to think of yet another unique and original way to introduce a character. Surely you must be running out of ideas by now? O_O Suna sounded as beautiful as always in your descriptions by the way.
As did the forest! That was really pretty - especially by the river. Kaoru and Yuna give off quite an interesting dynamic. (I wonder if Yuna lists Temari as an ancestor. If she did, her strange friendship with Kaoru would make a lot of sense). You described the dialogue really nicely and it really displayed both their personalities to great effect. It was really a great piece of writing. I looovveeedd it!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for saying that I deserve 70 reviews. Sometimes I don't think so, but it's nice to know that others think so. Hmm... I might just have to make your character a sexual harassment offender. That actually sounds pretty good, I like it! Haha, you say Team Madara, meanwhile eight other people on this site are obviously rooting for Team Return-Of-The-Ninja. I actually purposely made the one tube hold the Tiger Blood, just because I thought it would be ironic and slightly humorous. Whoo... I never thought I'd say this, but I'm glad I got the perverted attitude right. I suppose you're right in the fact that I need to believe in myself. And yeah, Kazuki and Rin have a... strange relationship. I'm so glad to hear that you liked all the other characters as well! It was a little difficult to come up with a background for Kaoru, but I'm glad to hear that you think it worked. I'm still waiting to hear from cvhoneybee about that O_O Hmm, interesting insight to Yuna and Temari... eh, we'll read more deeply into ancestries when the characters learn about them as well. Thank you so much for the amazing feedback, it is more appreciated than you could ever imagine. Thank you so much for the awesome support too! You're definitely an incredible person!
I am so late reviewing this, I know. First I was exhausted, then I had computer trouble for ages, then the new chapter of SWB was being a pain - until I gave up and did GLF instead - and now I am on a high from finishing a story, so I figured I'd get round to some of the reviews I've been owing people all week (& for months in some cases). Yours being top of the list, because it always is.
Oh by the way - you were worried about the hospital thing? Don't be. As I said, it's not life threatening or very serious, just a real nuisance to be honest, which reminds me... I have hospital stuff to be getting on with. I am sooo going to be yelled at during my next appointment. Serves me right really.
Much more importantly: congratulations on finishing your exams! Yay! I'm sure you did really well as I know how smart you are. It's a bit of shame you can't have more of a relaxing summer. Be sure to get some 'you'-time in there. It's really important to have some time to recharge those batteries, as that will improve your concentration and help you learn better when school starts up again. We can wait for updates - if barely, cuz we love your stories - while you have some much needed fun.Right then... What do I say? Err... 'Wow!' would be a good start. Wow! That's a great chapter. It was. One of the reasons I did not review immediately - other than being tired out of my miniscule mind - was the fact I'd simply run out of praise to give you without repeating myself. You know how you've said that I inspire you to work hard at your writing? You officially inspire me now. Seriously, I read this and actually felt ashamed of some of my recent updates and didn't feel better until went back to attack Chapter 7 with renewed vigor.
I love Riku and his Mum. They are so Naruto-like. It looks like he at least left something behind for Hinata before Madara presumably extracted the kyuubi and killed him. The first part was just full of this Naruto-like exuberance that is so like the early part of the Naruto series and suddenly you just twist that all around and - bang - there's this darker, nastier twist as Kohana and Riku react to the sight of blood. They suddenly both grow darker in character with it, which is something Naruto never does and that makes them unique and different from him; making them more than just the Naruto-clone and his 'girlfriend'. Really cool.
It also feeds extremely nicely into the Madara scene and finally we get to see where this is all going and, boy, does this look like an exciting plot. I cannot wait! And I get to - presumably - be a spy. An old lady in a shop sounds perfect for that (although if you have other ideas - by all means do as you like. It's your story and I can't wait to see what you come up with). =oDBy the way, you sounded a bit confused by my profile submission, so I thought I'd add when I say 'shop' feel free to interpret that to any type of commercial enterprise you find fitting. If you need something like a tea house or whatever where people tend to spend a bit more time - by all means. I'm happy to just trust you completely as I know you're an amazing author so you'll just pick out something that'll really suit your story. Feel free to make fun of my character and give me lots (and lots =0) ) of disgusting habits too. I won't mind. Whatever you think works. Just make sure I don't have to sit somewhere with a draft, okay? I'm an old lady after all - and chilly winds are murder on old joints. (Actually I think I mentioned 50ish in the profile, but tbh I was just giving an example age cuz I wasn't sure what would work for you. 70 is fine. 80 is fine. 110 (without the age jutsu) is fine. 50 odd, and a whimpy moaner who acts older than she is, is fine. 24 and a real winging whiny complainer who acts like an old lady even though she isn't is fine. Whatever you feel works. Please don't restrict yourself to anything I said, if you're having difficulty with it.)
(By the way, if you've already started and I'm just confusing you now. Then just ignore me and carry on. As I said, I trust you and it is still your story and your plot, so whatever you feel works is fine with me).
Author's Response: Oh gosh, well, I'm glad to hear that your hospital stuff isn't too serious. I was highly worried. I hope you get better, what ever it is! And thanks for all the support you have given me, in writing and in, well, life. Once I get around to the updates I have planned, I think I'll do just what you said and take a nice relaxing break. Huh, I bet anyone who reads that sentence will hunt me down to squeeze some more updates out of me O_O And wow, I don't even know what else to say to your review of the story except THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! I really can't come up with anything better to say after seeing the part where you said that I inspire you. Seriously, even when you say that you can't give me any more praise, your next reviews always get better and better. Hmm, about your profile submission, I actually think I know who you'll be when the time comes. Your submission actually came at a very convenient time when I was formulating ideas, I just didn't realize it at the time until after thinking it over. Trust me, you'll know who you are when you're introduced ;) Thank you so much for everything you have ever said about my story, and thank you even more for... well, just being there to encourage me. It's very motivating and, for lack of a better word, inspiring. I can't say anything more except thank you.
So, that's everyone, right? Or did I miss someone when checking? Oh well, to your story. I absolutely loved it. I can still barely think of anything but wow. I can't believe you're so amazing. All of these characters are fantastic. They're so good its like they're your own ocs. I can't wait for another update. I'm in love with your story.
Author's Response: That's all of the heroes. I still have a few villains left to bring in. In total, that's approximately 15 characters >_< Well, I do enjoy writing about them, so it's no big deal. I'm so relieved and grateful to read your review. Thank you so much for the positive feedback. I'm very happy to hear that I'm writing the characters well, obviously that is a huge challenge. Not to mention terrifying when I await the reviews of the characters' owners. But thank you so much for the great support. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, it really makes my day!
Oh... I also forgot to mention, Megumi can be disobident. Whenever she meets Madara, try to come up with smart comebacks or phrases like'Sure.. lets go with that' or give her lots of aditude, that would portray the character I had in mind. Also... Inazuma is supposed to be a girl. Try to put a soft side in Madara... that would be surpising. Keep up the good work!
lilmissmindy
Author's Response: *facepalm* Sorry! I'll get right on those changes. Please don't hate me >_<
Oh gosh, it's official now! This story is going to be one of my favourites. :D There's no way this story could be bad!
The OCs are intriguing, the plot is unique and your writing skills are awesome! I can't wait for the future ninjas to meet each other at Konoha! (At least hopefully they'll meet XD)
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Seriously, every time I see the phrase, 'It's official', I nearly have a heartattack. In my mind, that expression always brings bad news. But it was such great news! Wow, I'm honored to have made it onto your favorites list. I'm really happy that you enjoy this story that much! I'm glad you think the OCs are intriguing, but that honor goes to the other members of this wonderful site who came up with the characters. I just write them :D But I'm still flattered that you like the plot and my writing skills. Seriously, what a confidence booster! The future ninjas will meet in Konoha in due time, just you wait! Thank you so much for your support! You're a great reader and awesome reviewer! Thanks again for such wonderful feedback!
Omigosh, Amaya's teacher reminded me of my Swedish's teacher. She was exactly the same! Huuuuge flashback. Only difference is that her hair was the color of grayish brown XD
I really like your writing style! And the dialogue seems natural. The next chapter waits! ^_^
Author's Response: Wow, that's crazy! And here I thought I was describing the stereotypical teacher that is usually doesn't exist in real life @_@ But I'm so glad to hear that you like my writing style! I hope you continue to enjoy this story! Thanks for reading and thanks a ton for reviewing!
Wow, very unique idea! I must say I'm intrigued and will definitely read more. ^^
I decided to read your story after reading cvhoneybee's Sacred Relics and I just fell in love with the idea of readers giving you OCs! The idea is great! And it's a challenge to a writer, which means you have to have skills in order to make a believable, enjoyable and generally good story. I'll let you know how you succeeded after I've read the rest chapters. ^^ Now, looking very good and promising! :)
Author's Response: Oh haha, yay! I'm glad you decided to read this! I'm actually the first on to bring joint stories to TONFA... After I stole it from inuyasha-fiction.com :D But I'm glad to hear that you like the concept. I will agree that this type of thing challenges a writer's ability to create a story, which adds to the effect of the fic. I hope you continue to enjoy this story! Thanks so much for reading this and thanks even more for leaving your thoughts! I appreciate your feedback greatly!
Wow, I love this chapter! Mostly because my character is in it.... But I love how Madara has two different types of eyes. Keep up the good work
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked it so much! And I'm going to assume that you liked the way I portrayed your character :D Yeah, in the more recent Naruto manga chapters, Madara acquired the Rinnegan to go along with the Sharingan. Whoops... I just spoiled it for people who aren't up to date. Well anyways, thank you so much for reading! I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks so much for sharing your feedback as well!
Everyone's characters are amazing, this is going so great. You write so well =D
I bet when my character comes in I will be bouncing off the walls.
The first part of this chapter was so good, can't wait for more, keep writing and don't make me wait forever! LOL Jk I make people wait for my stuff too, so I can't really say anything haha.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much for the praise! I'm glad you like it thus far. And guess what? I'll let you in on a little secret. Your character is up next. We'll just have to wait and see if you bounce off the walls :D I'll try not to make you wait forever, I'll get to work on the next chapter right now! Thank you so much for reading and thanks even more for reviewing! Your feedback is greatly appreciated!
Now you've done it. I'm officially out of things to say. I had to read it twice and I'm still struggling for the right words. In a good way. I'm just lost for praise I haven't already given you. Just the first sentence got me. I was still slightly distracted when I started, you know checking on the cat, smiling at something else I just thought of and then - bam! You had my attention. Both times. It was a very powerful intro and really poetic... and then you end it with a slight joke at the close of the second paragraph and it's just.. like.. whoah! awesome mix of emotions. That whole first section was very touching and sweet and just sort of filled with the love between Shin and his mother. I felt really exhilarated and excited at the prospect of this young man setting out into the world for the first time; doing something no one in his clan has wanted to do before - and then you juxtaposition it with this the darkness of this murderous little psychopath. I know you didn't create the characters, but the way you fed one scene into the other was just brilliant. From the strong love and tenderness of this boy with his Mum, we go to a girl who'd try to kill her own father. From a journey based on the joy discovery and seeing new things, we go to one filled with desire to end life and taste blood. As soon as we hit that scene I was just struck with the sudden drama of the mood change. It was brilliant.... and then you go and mix them. We start with Shin and his joy of discovering the natural beauty around him (and water that does not rain) and without warning we're thrown straight into Karasu taking something natural and killing it, filling the beautiful surroundings with the stench of blood and guts. These two make for an amazing juxtaposition in disciplines and the way you've played them off against each other was brilliant. It was a really classic set-up and so nicely done - I'm ever so slightly in love with it. Awesome chapter. Really awesome. Wow...
Actually I just realized something, Karasu must be pretty awesome at throwing things if she can get a kitchen knife on target. Normally throwing knifes are specially weighted, so that's a pretty impressive skill(, but an entirely believable one in a Naruto fic. Did you do it on purpose or was it just an oversight, cuz I really cannot tell...) She'd be unstoppable with a real weapon, I'm sure...
Anyway, I now have to decide whether I want to continue on to Chapter 4 or re-read this chapter again. It's a tough choice...
Author's Response: Oh jeez, when you said you had to read it twice, I freaked out because I thought my writing had gone downhill in the span of one chapter. And then I read the rest of this marvellously long review, and once again, you leave me in tears of happiness and with a huge smile on my face. I'm so glad you loved my mix of the opposite personalities and perspectives. They were both equally enjoyable to write individually, but the real fun for me personally was mixing them together. And I am very glad that you enjoyed the characters alone as well as together. And actually, the thing with the kitchen knives was actually planned, I'm so glad someone picked up on that. I was foreshadowing to hint at the fact that Karasu would, indeed, be quite a threat with a real weapon. Wow, I'm so thrilled that you were so impressed with this chapter. It is such a confidence booster, thank you so much for enjoying this. I hope you continue to enjoy, and thanks again for such amazing support! I really do appreciate every thought and piece of insight you share with me.
Awesome! As I said, you've really come on so much. This really works so well. I can tell you've gained a lot of confidence in your writing too and that's made it all much more fluid and really allowed you to let loose. This is fantastic. I thought you were really talented before; I now think you'll probably turn out to be a better writer than me if I'm honest.
The dialogue came out catchy and interesting (by which I don't just mean Amaya - who is sassy by nature (and very well written, as were all the characters), but actually the way you wrote it. You got a nice feel of the nature of the conversation and its participants and their reactions to one another - but without becoming bogged down in detail which I am prone too) and you could feel the action and environment of the characters as they did and said things. There was a strong overall 'mood' in the chapter. Just that slight feeling behind the scenes that adds an extra flavour to everything... that little bit of extra depth... and it was just... It was amazing. Let's just leave it at that. I think you're brilliant. Never stop writing, okay? Promise? Even when you no longer write fanfiction, just write... something... You've got so much talent you can share with the world. It'd be a loss to everyone if you stopped.
Author's Response: *cries tears of joy* And here I thought all of your previous reviews were encouraging. This was by far the best review I have ever received. To know that I have thoroughly impressed such a talented writer such as yourself makes me feel very motivated and inspired. Honestly, I've been having a very difficult year, and when I start writing, it feels like a release of stress and an escape for me to feel at home. I'm so.... ugh, I don't even know, happy? Excited? Glad? Thrilled? Well, whatever the word is, it won't let me stop smiling. And for you, BattyBigSister, I will write always. Thank you very much for encouraging me to continue writing. I will always give it my best, thank you for your inspiring words.
How did I miss this? Actually... much to my shame... quite easily probably. I've been in & out of hospital recently (nothing serious, so don't worry) and whatever energy I've got left is always spent on SWB... so... I miss a lot of things... And now I get to feel ashamed for it. =0( Bad Batgirl. Although this does work out quite nicely in another sense. There was going to be a little surprise for my best reviewers in Chapter 7 of SWB... This helps me plot.. I mean.. plan.. I mean..Anyway, I know I'm way too late for the main characters, but I figured I might submit a profile anyway, as I would probably choose to be a villain to begin with. That or I'd really love to be a fat old lady in a shop somewhere, who's hard of hearing and constantly gets the orders wrong... I could even be both, who knows...
Name (first, last): Don't really mind. I could be Koumori nee-san or Batto nee-san if you like. I suppose toppyoushimonai nee-san or kure-ji- nee-san (crazy: the other meaning of batty) don't really have much of a ring to them.
If you'd rather have a proper name, you can always name me after one of my SWB characters, but if it's Ren or Naomi I beg you not to use 'Seishin' as the surname. It reminds me too much of all the writing I've got to do. Iriai sounds better, or even something like Iriai no Naomi (Naomi of the Sunset) might work well...
Gender: Don't mind. If you're short on boys, I'll be a boy...
Animal Partner: I'll give you three guesses. That's right. I'd like a pet hamster, please, or a bat... If it's smarter than me that would be funny.
Ancestor: Not fussed.
Village: Anywhere with good food. Oh, can I be a vegetarian? I'm vegetarian in real life so...
Age: Don't mind. Don't care. I'm 24 irl, if that helps, but I'll quite happily be fifty odd.... Especially if I could have revolting habits...
Personality: Don't mind. I don't mind being stupid or insane though...
Appearance: Hmmm... I'd like to be quite fat or with some horrible facial disfigurement, please. Everyone always goes for thin and beautiful, so I'd like to be different.
Unlocked Kekkei Genkai or Special Abilities: Your call really. I don't mind, but if you have to give me one (if I am a villain, then I suppose I'll need some) then something involving rodents would be nice. I think it was in Inuyasha were one character had a pot out of which he could summon endless rats. Something similar to that would be cool. Maybe I could summon bats and get them to bombard my opponents (with poop - no? Maybe I've just spent too much time cleaning out my pets)... or do something involving echo-location... You know, some kind of radar to find my enemies before I swoop down on them to attack. Hmm.. bat-like features could even be my disfigurement - to match the abilities you know. I think I'd look great with a bat-like snout. Anyway your call. I'd be happy with whatever.
If I'm just a fat old lady in a shop then I'll be also quite happy just talking to my pet hamster and thinking it can understand me...
Author's Response: *sweatdrop* You are so... easygoing. But I'll make it work, no worries! Hmm, you will be a villain and the old lady in the shop. You will have bat-like abilities, as you requested, and I'll most likely give you the pet hamster. *sweatdrop again* Hmm, yeah, we'll just have to see where this goes.... Wait, you've been in the hospital?! Oh my gosh, I hope you feel better. And I look forward to the upcoming surprise in SWB for chapter 7. :D And yeah, I'll work on your character, she'll be awesome, don't worry!
Wow! That was really exciting. I can tell how hard you worked on this and it's come out really well. The description was beautiful and everything in the story just seemed to flow nicely together. Your characters are really engaging and you really feel their emotions and sensations as you move through the scene. Great, great work! I'm really quite proud of you. This was even more awesome than normal!
Author's Response: *chokes slightly* R-Really? I'm really excited to see that you are reading this story as well. Wow, I'm happy to hear my hard work is shown during this chapter. I'm glad the description came out well for this chapter; it's always a challenge to make the story sound natural. I'm also glad the characters interested you and captured your attention. *jumps with joy* You're proud of me?! Oh my gosh, I'm so happy right now. Seriously, earning your praise is a real accomplishment, you really have no idea how flattering it is to hear such approval from a great writer. Thank you very much for your kind words, they really inspire me. Thank you so much for reading, and I hope you continue to enjoy this story.