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Title: Cursed Saint by Sasaui Uchiha
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 114]
Summary: The smallest acts of kindness can spark the greatest flames. In a village such as Konoha where the Will of Fire means so much, all flames are important.

It was such a simple act of kindness that changed his entire life around. Once it was evident he had the Will of Fire, though, a life he could never imagine began.

Ryu Sarutobi was the "adopted grandson" of Hiruzen Sarutobi. All people knew of him was he appeared out of nowhere with the Hokage's words backing him. As well as who they saw him become.

He was a boy with a strange worry over a yin-yang ring he wore. He was a boy who gave his everything to protect the village. He was a boy who had a fire raging within him. He was a boy with a great light that could pierce the darkness. All people had to do was look.

But he was also a boy who was cursed.

And that curse would do anything to devour his light.
Category: General Fiction > Naruto, General Fiction > Pre-Series, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden
Characters: All, OC, Pair OCSaku
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: AU, Death, OOC
Challenges: , The Ultimate OC Challenge
Challenge: , The Ultimate OC Challenge
Series: Cursed
Chapters: 18 | Completed: No | Word count: 106653 | Read count: 23512 [Report This]
Published: 20/09/10 | Updated: 07/08/15


Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 01/01/12 Title: Chapter 7: Promise of a Lifetime

Wow, I'd been meaning to read your stuff for a long time, I'm sorry I never got the chance to. I just finished reading this and Tainted Guardian, which I need to go back to and leave a review because I was reading these at the same time XD

Anyway, I really like your writing! There's a lot of great description in everything you write: fights, emotions, people, surroundings, just everything!

And your imagination is freaking genius! I really like your story ideas, it makes me want to whack myself for not reading your stuff sooner.

Great job, Sasaui-san! I hope to see more of your stuff soon!

Author's Response: Wow. I have got to say, it really surprised me when I saw you had reviewed me. I\'m really used to seeing you reviewing Silverwolf\'s stuff, so I recognized your name the second I saw it. It was actually a nice surprise to see someone who liked Silverwolf finding myself worthy to read compared to hers.\r\n\r\nI\'m glad that you enjoyed reading it. I try to stay descriptive, even if I never thought I did as good a job as you think I have. Wow. I\'m seriously surprised by how you see my imagination. All my family says it (but that\'s just it, they\'re my family), but I\'m not used to hearing others say anything about my imagination. Usually if anything Silverwolf when we\'re discussing either my self esteem or whose writing is better, but I\'m glad that you see my imagination as \"freaking genius\". Oh, please don\'t whack yourself. I\'d feel bad. As for more of my stuff, you\'ll see more of Cursed Saint hopefully by the end of this month because I have another update for it planned.



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 07/03/12 Title: Chapter 9: Zero to Hero

This was so awesome! This intense mission that just started already seems so epic! I can't wait to see where this is going! Eee! I am so excited just thinking about it!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it so much, Red Mist. As for where this is going, you'll find out whenever I get back to this. It will most definitely be fun.



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 21/01/12 Title: Chapter 8: Right Before Your Eyes

:D I'm all flustered and whatnot because you mentioned me. You're quite welcome, Sasaui-chan, for reading your stories. You are a very talented writer.

And this chapter was just as amazing as I thought it would be! I really loved the hide-and-seek idea for training. Asuma must enjoy intense child games XD

I love how they were able to work together though. It just seemed so natural for them, despite the arguing and everything they went through.

Great job, Sasaui-chan! It was an amazingly long and wonderful chapter! Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: You totally deserved it. Any new person who finds this story interesting enough to read deserves to be mentioned in here. And since you did, you are most definitely worthy.\r\n\r\nWait, you thought it would be interesting before you even read it? I\'m so glad that you have high enough expectations for it already. Though it makes me afraid that I\'ll just make those expectations crumble down. I thought the hide-and-seek thing was fun. Silverwolf just told me a man hunt like thing, so I kinda twisted it into this.\r\n\r\nI thought it would be natural for them in the end. After all, the three clans have always been close. Then they just had to figure out how to tie Ryu into it all.\r\n\r\nI\'m glad that you liked it, Red Mist. I hope I can continue to meet your expectations!



Title: The Reincarnation of a Legend by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 141]
Summary:


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She was running away.

Finally.

Finally, Suki Kurohoshi was running away from her village. The six-year-old was finally able to escape from her terrible life.

She was going to run as far as her legs could carry her. She was going to abandon a home that was never a home to begin with. She was going to leave behind villagers who hated her for a reason that she did not know of.

Yes, run away. That would solve all of her problems. In a perfect world, running away would be the answer to everything.

Unfortunately, this isn't a perfect world. And running away won't solve every problem.

You can run away from home, and you can run away from people you grew up with. But now Suki is going to realize that the one thing that no one can run away from... is destiny.


Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto, Het Romance > Fluff, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Minor AU
Characters: All, OC, Pair OCNaru
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, General, Humor, Romance, Spiritual
Warnings: AU, OOC
Challenge: None
Series: Destiny is Calling
Chapters: 14 | Completed: No | Word count: 79859 | Read count: 26636 [Report This]
Published: 27/11/10 | Updated: 17/01/12


Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 11: For the First Time

Oh my gosh, I just wanted to tell you that this is my favorite work-in-progress story ever. This is one of the first stories I read on here, from way before I joined, and I love every chapter, it's always better than the last. I really like this story, and I hope you update soon! Keep up the awesome work SilverWolf!

Author's Response: Aww, I\'m so flattered ^_^ It\'s so nice to hear such wonderful praise, even though I don\'t think I deserve it. But I\'m happy to hear that you like this story so much. That is such great news to hear. Thank you for the great review, and I hope you continue to enjoy this!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 25/11/11 Title: Chapter 12: Apologize

YES! My all time fave fic is updated! And with an awesome chapter at that!

I absolutely love the OCs, even if a couple of them aren't yours. That just means the people who created them are awesome as well, and you wrote them with equal awesomeness ;D

There was some real sadness in this with Suki, I felt really bad for her. I sure hope she can make friends with her new teammates. Though that Haruki fellow seems kinda mean :P

Deno and Kakashi as friends is really cool. It would be quite awkward if he failed Hatake-san's daughter though XP

Great chapter, SilverWolf-san! I loved this, and I'm so excited to hear that there will be another update! Yayz! Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: :D This is your favorite fic?! That makes me feel so good right now! I\'m glad you like the OCs because... well, you\'re kind of stuck with reading them now ;) Yes, the people who made the OCs are very awesome, especially their writing. I suggest you go read their stories to go get a feel of what their amazing abilities really are. Haha, yeah, Haruki is kind of mean, which might hinder Suki\'s attempt at making friends, but Michiko is nicer :) Hehe, one can only imagine how awkward Deno and Kakashi\'s friendship would be if Suki fails. But we\'ll get to that in the next chapter ;D Thank you so much for the awesome review, I\'m really happy that you like this story so much! There will be an update soonish, stay tuned! Thank you so much for reading and thanks even more for reviewing! You\'re incredible!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 17/12/11 Title: Chapter 13: I'll Make a Man Out of You

I was honestly worried you might fail Suki and her team! It certainly seemed that way toward the end, when Deno almost seemed disappointed! You're so evil for making me think that!

And you're still evil for making such a sad ending, when things were finally looking up for Suki! The reminder of losing Naruto makes even me sad. It's just so depressing...

I loved the survival exam! It was so original and fun. I loved getting to see everyone's abilities and personality throughout the chapter, it was all portrayed really well.

Great job, Silverwolf-san! This was amazing! I was so happy to see a new chapter (and a long one at that) so soon! Thanks for updating, keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: Haha, no, I\'m really not that mean... Well, maybe I am, but that would seriously be counterproductive. Failing her would probably set the entire story back by a good ten chapters :P Oh, I\'m sorry for making it so sad... I guess I instinctively had to add in some sad things to torture Suki... Gosh, I am evil... Yes! I\'m so happy to hear that another person likes the survival exam! That\'s so great to hear! I was honestly very worried no one would like it. I\'m happy you liked how I portrayed the characters and abilities, I also loved illustrating the OCs throughout this chapter. Thank you so much for such positive feedback! I\'m really happy you enjoyed this chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it! You\'re awesome!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 21/01/12 Title: Chapter 14: Her Diamonds

Oh my gosh, amazing plot developments! Cool! This new mission (or field trip, I don't know what to call it :P ) is so awesome, I can't wait to see what happens to Suki when she gets to Kagayaku! It's going to be so epic!

Aww, Kakashi makes such a nice daddy. He really cares so much for his daughter, it's so sweet! And Deno's friendship to Kakashi is really cool. Though now I wonder how he's going to keep his promise to protect Suki when he's going to a village with killers waiting for her O_o

Great chapter, Silverwolf-san! This was fantastic to read! Keep up the fabulous work!

Author's Response: Yay! I\'m glad you like the plot developments! Haha, yes, it is considered a mission. The Hokage said he would list it as a mission issued by Konohagakure. And don\'t worry, it will be very epic and dramatic :D Yeah, I love Daddy Kakashi; seeing how much he cares for Suki is one of my favorite parts of writing this story. And Deno is also fun to write about; thanks again to Sasaui Uchiha :) It was meant to be ironic that he promised Kakashi he would protect Suki while they walk off unknowingly to a village with a few murderers waiting for them. Hehe... Thanks so much for the lovely review, Red Mist! I appreciate it!



Title: Pirates of the Mist by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 102]
Summary:
ABANDONED: DUE TO LACK OF MOTIVATION, THIS WILL NO LONGER BE UPDATED - LOOK AT THE REWRITE A TALE BEST TOLD DEAD.




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"When you try to escape the past, it always finds a way to come back to haunt you."

The Blue Tiger of the Mist has always tried to escape that awful history. Now suddenly, things that were meant to be left behind keep on reappearing.

Instead of being surrounded by the pirates of The Midnight Thief, shinobi of Konohagakure have taken their place. Memories and secrets from the past are returning, pushing for the heart. The snake man is once again on the hunt, searching for his prey. Leaving the crew to go to Konoha is suddenly bringing everything forward.

Will it be enough to crack the legendary captain of the renowned Blue Pirates?


Category: OC-centric, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Crossovers, General Fiction > Naruto Shippuuden, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Naruto and Hinata
Characters: OC, Orochimaru, Sasuke Uchiha, Team Asuma, Team Gai, Team Kakashi, Team Kuranai, Tsunade
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: AU, OOC
Challenge: None
Series: Hoist the Colors
Chapters: 13 | Completed: No | Word count: 77958 | Read count: 32735 [Report This]
Published: 18/12/10 | Updated: 14/04/12


Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Blue Pirates

:D A story about pirates? Coolio! I'm already excited to read more! Great imagination, this seems really well done already. Now I'm going to read more! Nice job so far!

Author's Response: Hehe, I\'m glad you like the beginning so far. I\'m happy that this has captured your interest. I hope you continue to enjoy this. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 05/10/11 Title: Chapter 8: Secrets

Gosh, I stayed up all night reading this. I would have reviewed earlier, but then I passed out... :/

But anyway, I really love this story! It's so cool! The entire theme of pirates was so awesome, and I enjoyed every moment of this! I hope you update this story soon, it's so amazing!

Author's Response: Aww, I\'m so honored that you stayed up so late to read my story :D Thank you very much for doing so. I\'m really glad you enjoyed this. I hope this story continues to please you. Thanks for the wonderful review! I appreciate the support a lot!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 09/11/11 Title: Chapter 9: Circus

XD This was so awesome! I don't know how you think your battles can suck, they're so amazing! Way better than anything I could ever hope to write (then again, I'm not a writer, lol).

Anyway, this chapter was written so well, you've definitely improved since the beginning of this story. There's a lot more description and intense dialogue than there was in the start of this fic.

I really love Kasumi, she's shaping to be one of the best OCs I've ever read. She's not a Mary-Sue, which is amazing since I thought her being so tough and everything would completely make her a Sue. I'm very glad to know I am wrong; I really love her complicated personality.

I'm also really liking Masaru. I kinda hope he's the romance with Kasumi, I think they'd be adorable together. But anyway, I like how you're developing Masaru, he's becoming quite likable.

Side note: during this entire chapter, I imagined Masaru with a British accent, just like the Pirates of the Caribbean characters :P

Right, anyway, after all that rambling, I just wanted to say that this was a freaking incredible chapter. I can't wait to read more about the pirates and their pasts, this definitely was a nice setup for that. Can't wait for more, keep up the awesome work SilverWolf-san!

Author's Response: Yay! This was such a nice review! Thank you so much!

I am really happy that you liked the fights. I don\'t know, I just never think they come out the way I want. And the taijutsu-only fight was a pain in the butt especially, but I didn\'t know a way around it - I couldn\'t let Kasumi use her kekkei genkai so early in the reformation process, that\'s just unrealistic. So I\'m glad you thought the battles came out nicely in this chapter.

Yeah, I went back and read the first few chapters of this fic and nearly had a heart attack at how awful I was. I can tell I\'ve improved as well, but I still have a long ways to go in writing :P

I\'m so happy you like Kasumi. My goal is to make everyone fall in love with her :D But it\'s a bit hard not to make her a Mary-Sue because she\'s supposed to an amazingly strong S-class criminal. I feel like I\'m wrong to show that she has weaknesses, but I don\'t want her to be perfect either. Ugh, I hate these conflicting feelings... But yeah, her complicated attitude is something that I\'ve grown to love as well; I try to add a lot more depth to her so that the readers see her as something different than what they initially thought.

Haha, I\'m glad you like Masaru as well. I personally can\'t tell if I like him more or Kasumi more XP As for romance... eh, you\'ll find out later ;)

Heehee, Pirates of the Caribbean XD Best movies ever!

I\'m so happy that you liked this chapter. Thank you very much for taking the time to review, it really means a lot. This review made my day. Thanks again for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 27/12/11 Title: Chapter 10: Over My Head

This chapter was bloody brilliant!

Seriously, considering you didn't plan the scene with Kasumi out, it came out amazingly well. I loved how she broke into Tsunade's office only to find a file about herself. That's so crazy! And I can't believe it freaked her out so much.

Whoa, she's the one who killed her family and friends? That's like another Itachi! That's fricking insane! I didn't see that coming, honestly.

And wow, the Blue Pirates are pretty cocky, aren't they? It seems Masaru and Osamu are the only ones who aren't full of themselves. They also have some awful pasts... I know that all the Blue Pirates have terrible pasts (I read the bingo book), but just hearing those two talk about their own is really sad. My heart goes out to them, and they're the bad guys!

The argument between Masaru and the crew was intense. I love the idea of the Original Nine, it makes me wonder what more there is to learn about them. But the fact that they were all arguing with each other adds more depth to them all.

The cliffhanger was definitely mean; I was so looking forward to reading more about Kasumi and Masaru's pasts. Ugh, now I have to wait!

Great chapter, Silverwolf-san! I absolutely cannot wait for more! Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: Really? It came out nicely? That\'s good to hear. I wasn\'t even going to give her a scene, but some readers said they wanted to see what she would do when she was out of her cell. So I figured I\'d write about it :P I\'m glad to know it came out well ^_^ Hehe, yeah, she is suspected of killing her family and friends. We\'ll be going more into depth about that little fact later on ;) Haha, yes, it seems to be a trend for the members of the crew to be rather cocky, huh? I guess Kasumi\'s personality has rubbed off on them. Yeah, each Blue Pirate has a sad background... heh, of course they do. They\'re my OCs, I have to find some way of being mean to them XD Oh, there is quite a bit to learn about the Original Nine, but you\'ll just have to wait and see ;D I had a great amount of fun writing about Masaru when he was talking to Osamu and when he was arguing with his crewmates. I\'m glad you enjoyed it as well :D Heehee, I\'m sorry for the mean cliffhanger, but it was such a perfect place to end it ;) Hopefully, you won\'t have to wait too long. I\'m hoping to get the next chapter out before next year... haha, I love that joke XD Anyway, thank you so much for such a nice review! I\'m glad you liked this. Thanks for reading and reviewing! You\'re awesome!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 01/01/12 Title: Chapter 11: How To Save A Life

Wow... Oh my god...

Now that is what I call plot insight.

Seriously, I cannot believe we learned so much about Kasumi. I mean, I just, I can't believe she tried to kill herself. That's so crazy...

I'm really glad this was told through Masaru's point of view, I think it makes the entire event more realistic. He didn't know all the details at this point, he just wanted to help her. It makes it so much more effective.

I'm also glad things seemed to work out between the pirates. That's good to hear :)

Great chapter, Silverwolf-san! This was a fantastic chapter! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Heehee, I\'m glad you like it! Yes, she did try to take her own life. She was in a very unstable state in that time. I\'m happy that you liked it in Masaru\'s POV; he is the one telling the story, so I tried to make sure that I didn\'t accidentally throw in some of Kasumi\'s thoughts or anything. But I\'m glad you enjoyed seeing things through his perspective. Yeah, the Blue Pirates made up; I don\'t know if I could stand having them be mad at each other for so long. Thanks so much for the awesome feedback! I\'m glad you liked this chapter! Thanks a bunch for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it! You\'re awesome!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 15/02/12 Title: Chapter 12: You Can't Take Me

O.O You... You want to execute Kasumi? But... But why? Oh no, I hope Masaru and the other pirates make it to Konoha in time to save her from her execution and before Orochimaru gets there...

I really liked Kasumi's development in this! We keep learning new things about her, making it so much more fun to read about her. It's so cool! I'm loving this turn of events, great creativity!

Author's Response: It\'s not that I want to execute Kasumi, per se... That\'s just how the story kinda ended up... I\'m sorry I upset you so much :( I hope the Blue Pirates can make it in time to save her too, I haven\'t decided what to do with that yet... ;) I\'m glad you liked Kasumi\'s development; we are seeing some new changes in her and some things about her hidden past. I am especially happy to hear that you think it\'s cool to learn these things, it makes me think I\'m doing a good job :) Thanks so much for the review, Aka-chan, you\'re awesome!



Title: Mission of Matrimony by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 17]
Summary:
Mission of Matrimony

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Shikamaru and Temari have been good friends ever since they first met in the Chuunin Exams. And their friendship strengthened during the Sasuke Retrieval Mission and the Fourth Shinobi War. Now, as young adults, they consider themselves as friends.

Nothing more.

But what happens when the Hokage and Kazekage issue a marriage between the Leaf and the Sand? Can Shikamaru and Temari learn to deal with each other as husband and wife?

One thing's for sure. Whoever said friends can't be a couple... was completely right.


Category: General Fiction > Post-Naruto, Het Romance > Top Six Pairs > Shikamaru and Temari
Characters: Chouji Akimichi, Gaara, Ino Yamanaka, Kankurou, Naruto Uzumaki, Pair ShikaTema, Sakura Haruno, Tsunade
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: OOC, Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 4012 | Read count: 3927 [Report This]
Published: 11/03/11 | Updated: 02/10/11


Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 04/10/11 Title: Chapter 2: Single Ladies (Put A Ring On It)

Lol, this is so fun! I love the idea, it seems so original. And it's so hilarious to see Shikamaru and Temari acting so reluctant. It's so funny XD

I did look at the doujinshi after you mentioned it though. It's really cute, but yours seems to be taking a more comic route. It's only two chapters in, so I guess I can't really tell. Will this be like the doujinshi? Just wondering.

Author's Response: Oh, well, as I said, I saw a few pictures on the internet that showed this idea, so it\'s not technically mine. But this won\'t follow the doujinshi, don\'t worry. I\'ve got my own stuff planned for this ;) But I\'m glad you liked this! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review, I really appreciate it! You rock!



Title: The White Rose by silverwolf1213
Rated: 15 Liked [Reviews - 47]
Summary:


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Just another classic 'person ends up in the Naruto universe' story?

Nope.

This time, someone from the Naruto universe is visiting the real world. The modern world. In the 21st century. In high school.

First, you have a fictional character trying to adjust to real life scenarios. And he discovers that the ninja life was a lot easier than dealing with real world people. Second, you have a high school girl who is just trying to get through the stress and pain that her everyday life brings.

If they weren't even supposed to be in the same world together, how can they possibly make things work?


Category: OC-centric, Het Romance > Fluff, Alternate Universe & Crossovers > Real World
Characters: Kiba Inuzuka, OC
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: AU, OOC, Sexual Themes
Challenges: , Let's Be Original
Challenge: , Let's Be Original
Series: None
Chapters: 5 | Completed: No | Word count: 28693 | Read count: 7683 [Report This]
Published: 11/03/11 | Updated: 18/11/11


Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 05/10/11 Title: Chapter 4: Upside Down

Lol, this is so hilarious! I love how you write Kiba in the real world, it's just so funny. And thank god, Adrianna isn't a Mary Sue or a fangirl. You're doing perfectly with her. And Alicia is adorable; I like the fact that you've included a sibling to be in on the secret. It makes for an even funnier read XD

Haha, keep up the awesome work with your stories!

Author's Response: Haha, I\'m glad you liked it! I\'m really happy to hear that you like Adrianna; I\'m always worried I\'ll make her too unlikable to the readers. Haha, Alicia is quite the catch, let\'s just say ;) Heehee, I\'m glad you like this so much! Thank you very much for the support you show my stories! I appreciate it so much!



Reviewer: Red Mist Signed Liked
Date: 20/11/11 Title: Chapter 5: Sunday Morning

Lol, I love Kiba's reaction to going to school. I feel that way too, so I feel for him XP

I hope this isn't the end of mischievous Alicia. I quite like that about her. Though Kiba bonding with the OCs is really nice. I feel like it adds a lot more depth to the story. I'm assuming Kiba and Adrianna will end up together, but Kiba actually taking the time to talk to other people is really nice. It's a good change of pace, and that goes for the teen romance too. Thank you so much for not having them instantly fall in love, I really like this fun and childish relationship they have going on.

Which brings me to the pool scene. I should have seen it coming, but didn't, which makes it that much better! I loved the comedy!

Great job on this chapter, this was really a fun chapter! I can't wait to see Kiba in school and check on our other Naruto friends :D Keep up the fabulous work!

Author's Response: Hehe, you\'re the first to mention Kiba going to school. I have big things planned for that, don\'t you worry one bit ;) No, mischievous Alicia will not disappear. Most likely only her blackmailing trait will dimmer down. The Kiba and Alicia bonding was really nice for me to write, I feel like it showed more into their personalities. Oh please, as if I could pull off having Adrianna and Kiba instantly falling in love. That just would not work out. I also enjoy the childish relationship those two have though, I think it makes the story more fun to get into. Don\'t worry, there will be great intensity with the Naruto gang and especially some interesting things for Kiba\'s first day of high school. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! Thanks again!