Interesting begining. I can't actually get a grasp for your storyline, but I'm sure I'll see it as you write more.

When writing watch out for over using the name of a character, and remember that he, him, or several discriptive words such as; the puppet user, the unusually, quiet Iwa nin and the like, will often do better than over using the name Genko, or any other name.

Also remember to sometimes separate paragraphs, and to some extent sentences, when your focus shifts from one topic to another.

Example: (second paragraph) you go from writing about what Genko sees to what he was wearing. Those two sentences/paragraphs can be separated.

These are all suggestions, and seeing as how I suck badly at grammer I really should be giving advice, but I hope these words help you in your endevor. See ya!
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-- Creto Rophis : Thank you a LOT for the suggestions. I'm only a newbie here so it's good to have some advice from a really good writer. I'm only on chapter 10 in your series but i can't wait to see what happends next.