Reviews For Shi-Hua Shock
Name: DropDeadThenDance (Signed) · Date: 28/05/12 - 01:11 am · For: A Quiet Girl in a Loud City
You know, I find it really hilarious that this story popped up right after I decided to take my own Legend of Korra fic down, although mine had no serious thought put into it XD
Anyway, this was a very interesting opening and I found that it had some good points, but I think you may have overdone it with the description of her clothing. Try to break it up a little because it's a run on and it kind of draws away from the quality this could have.
Other than that, this sounds like the opening of a new show, you know? Like, a side angel of what The Legend of Korra would be like from another person's perspective. Very interesting.
I liked this very much, but I do think it was really short. The only other thing that bothered me was that Shizuka is a Japanese name, where as the Avatar universe is based mainly in Chinese related culture.
Again, very interesting, and I will be popping back in for more :D
3D signing out!
Author's Response: Believe me when I say that I thought your story was still up when I posted this until I scrolled down and saw it missing. Anyway, thank you for review. Luckily I've only done two chapters so I can still edit things without causing major confusion. P.s. THANK YOU for pointing her name out...i honestly feel a bit like a dummy for naming her that. *face palm* Again thanks and I hope you keep reading once I fix things. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/05/12 - 11:40 am · For: A Quiet Girl in a Loud City
Wow, so many Legend of Korra fanfics...
Hmm... I don't know how much I like this as a prologue. I liked how you kinda set up the history part of it. It helped with creating the setting. But once you started talking about Shizuka, I got a little bored. You talked more about her appearance than who she actually is, which didn't make it interesting to learn about her. Obviously, we'll learn more about her as the story proceeds, but since this is a prologue, you have to make it interesting enough to catch the readers' attention. It could have been better but I'll keep reading because I do like your writing and your stories :)
Author's Response: I know there are so many. Haha I questioned myself about adding to the collection but obviously I found the answer. I understand what you mean by the way. Given I wrote this at around 11-midnight, I missed a lot of stuff to put in and I didn't realize it was so... short. :P But I uploaded anyway because in my tired mind it was good enough (mistake) and for input. So thank you very much, I am fixing up the chapter right now. And I'm glad you will continue reading. :)
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/05/12 - 08:11 am · For: A Quiet Girl in a Loud City
Haha. It seems as if Legend of Korra fics are just popping up. I'm planning on writing one, DropDeadThenDance wrote on but then deleted it, and JubileeOfPuppies was talking to me about one. So yeah! New Legend of Korra craze!
This was an interesting start, though it reminds me that I really need to get to reading your other story. Anyway, I can't wait to read more. I am really interested in seeing how she affects the Avatar world seeing as she's going to shock all of Republic City. Shizuka seems like an interesting character. I hope to see about her in the near future. Great job, TeamWorkIsKey!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, for reading! And don't worry, you have time to catch up on the other story since it doesn't seem like I'll be uploading for a bit. :P