Reviews For Changing Destiny
Name: mia (Anonymous) · Date: 30/12/13 - 09:37 pm · For: Chapter 1
i need more!!!! this is soo cute!!!
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:43 pm · For: Chapter 6
O.o Lull before the storm. Uh-oh.
Rather short chapter, but it got what it needed to get across. I liked the KakaIru teasing X3 Kakashi x Iruka is such a cute couple. If you like them, you should try reading JBMcDragon's The Great Bathroom Mirror Escapes series. Title sounds ridiculously stupid, but they're great.
Anywho, advertising done, um... yeah.
Interested to see what Hiashi has in store for Neji and Shikamaru.
Props!
Loves and Kisses and Sand Castles for All! -Casild
Author's Response: LMAO! I've read them! They're fricken hilarious! I loved every one of them, really I did. n.n I think I've favorited at least one of them, but I can't remember now. *mad snuggles*
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:40 pm · For: Chapter 5
Aaaaw! What a great resolution. I can only imagine that Hiashi's going to do something drastic from here, however, since there are still a number of chapters left, I think. Hmm... I wonder what he'll do?
Anyhow... because I almost always mention characterization in my reviews... you're doing a great job of it now! Whoot, whoot! ^.^ I'm a very happy reader, now.
Oh, I guess I didn't mention before, but I like you're plot. I don't think I've seen any Neji x Shikamaru where Hiashi was beating Neji O.o a bit morbid, but original, at least ^.^'
Propage!
Loves and Kisses and Sand Castles for All! -Casild
Author's Response: I'm glad. It started out as a random drabble and evolved into a real story; I was quite happy with it, and I"m glad that people are responding well to it. n.n Thanks for the compliments, I'm blushing! *hugs*
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:29 pm · For: Chapter 4
Wow! Scary development!
No time to leave a lengthy review... I gotta get to the next chapter!!
Loves and Kisses and Sand Castles for All! -Casild
Author's Response: LMAO!! *huggles*
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:26 pm · For: Chapter 3
Fweee!! X3 so cute!
I admit, my heart stopped for a while when Temari showed up with kids calling Shikamaru daddy! I was like, "O.O NO, SHE DIDN'T!!" But then you went on with the gay thing and I was like... whew, okay then. I can handle that.
Talk about intense XD
Just thought I'd mention that the characterizations are gettin' much better X3 props props and more propage.
Loves and Kisses and Sand Castles for All! -Casild
Author's Response: Heh. Yeah. I've gotten mixed reviews about that; some people are all like, yay! and others were more ewww...and I don't know exactly where it came from, except to give Shika a little more depth. n.n I really wasn't trying to play to the TemShika fan base, but it kind of came out that way. Ah well. Thanks! n.n
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:19 pm · For: Chapter 2
Somebody needs to whack Hiashi with a broom! A really big one! It kind of surprised me that you revealed the reason Hiashi was beating up on Neji so quickly, but you did a great job of making it a plausible reason!
But... because I'm cynical and I can never say something good without mentioning something not-so-good, you're characterizations aren't quite there. Most of the time, they sound like Kiba or Hana. Then again, there were moments of brilliance when characterizations were spot on.
I think a little less cursing would do the trick. Kiba and Naruto (and sometimes Sakura and Ino) are really the only ones I see cursing on a regular basis. But then, interpretations of the characters are a person-by-person thing, so I guess I should stop being so annal-retentive about characterization... [sigh]
Um, all-in-all, though, pretty dang good! Props!
Loves and Kisses and Sand Castles for all! -Casild
Author's Response: LMAO. A big broom! I revealed it because it was important to the readers to understand what was going on; the original draft had it coming out later, but it was awkward and my test reader said he thought it was too confusing, so I brought it forward. As for the characterizations, yeah, I'll agree. I'd never really written a story about these kids (I tend towards the older shinobi of the leaf by preference) and I was trying to get a handle on things...*huggle*
Name: Archaic Aphorism (Signed) · Date: 28/12/07 - 06:08 pm · For: Chapter 1
I just saw that this was a response to my challenge the other day, so I thought I'd go ahead and check it out! My thoughts: thumbs up!
I wonder why Hiashi is working Neji so hard? Does he always train Neji like that, or was he mad at him? If he was mad, what for? O.o I'll have to keep reading.
My only complaint is the use of "Shika" instead of "Shikamaru". It's just a pet peeve of mine... but I guess it's too late now, ^.^' heh, you're already done with this part of the untitled Neji x Shikamaru series. If I think of a title, I'll tell you. Nothing so far, though.
Author's Response: lol thanks. I'm glad you're liking it. I know, but it's such a pain to type out Shikamaru all the time, and I'm lazy. *snickers* ah well. *hugs*
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:41 pm · For: Chapter 6
ShikaNeji is now in my favorite pairings list. Thanks to you. *bows* You are now my Godd.
*prays to her Godd*
Author's Response: LMAO. Your Godd loves you, Akenai. (Don't hit me with lightning, please, sorry god, sorry, I was just joking!) ANYWAY...*cough*. I love this pair. It just fits. Plus, it's sort of a given, considering (in my head) the other pairings have always been RukaKashi, ShinoKiba and NaruSasu. I mean, who else would Shika hook up with? I can't see him with Chouji (sorry, Chouji darling. Not because of your size, just because you're one of the few characters I just feel ends up being straight. GASP~). Lee? (SHUDDER NOOOO)So, there it is. n.n I wrote a SEQUEL to this, and I need a NAME for the Neji-Shika Series. n.n Help me out guys!
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:40 pm · For: Chapter 5
Bye Bye curse seal. No more torture for you, Neji-kun. Unless it's from Shikamaru... but you'd like it then, wouldn't you? yes, you would.
^^
Author's Response: Of course. LMAO. I left the lemons out of these stories, and it's nagging me. I want Shika/Neji LEMON. So I might write like a little one-shot side story just for that purpose. MMmmmmmmmMMMMmmmmMMmmMmmmm
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:37 pm · For: Chapter 4
HIASHI! LEAVE MY NEJI-KUN ALONE! I'LL SIC THE NAZIS ON YOU. *angry face*
I heart this story...
Author's Response: the Nazis? A little extreme, even for the Hyuuga...hmmm....
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:36 pm · For: Chapter 3
*twitch* ShikaTema children... those are gonna grow up to be some smart ass, intelligent little brats.. I can see it now.
Author's Response: yeash. Good thing our Ruka will be there to smack them around, ne?
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:35 pm · For: Chapter 2
Shika is smokin. Interpret that as you will.
x
n_n
It prolly wont work, but that was Neji i typed up there... just for you
Author's Response: Awww, thanks. It's beautiful. n.n And yes, he is smokin. ()o.o
Name: Hyuuga Akenai (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 03:34 pm · For: Chapter 1
Fuck you, Hiashi Hyuuga.
Go Shika! Take care of our Neji-kun!
Author's Response: Yeah, he's a jerk. Wait till you read the sequel. n.n
Name: Lunanekosuna (Anonymous) · Date: 17/10/07 - 09:06 pm · For: Chapter 1
Another good story. I love how you made shika loving and sweet and and i love that neji fight back in the end and confesses! Damn i'm starting to like shika alot . This is your fault now naru will have to punish me naru:hellya suna : how did you get in ? Naru: i 'm a ninja and i have a key . Suna: oh naru: u been a bad girl.now time for your punishment. Suna: ahhhhh! It tickles
Author's Response: n.n I deleted your other review cause it was a double. I think Shika's much, much hotter than Naruto. Don't kill me. I'm sorry, man. I'm SORRY! *ducks the fangurl onslaught.* I never said he wasn't hot! *Hides* Thank you for reviewing! It means a lot to me to get reviews. It means I don't suck. *runs away from screaming fangurls* heeeeeeeelllllppp!
Name: Sacryde (Signed) · Date: 17/10/07 - 07:33 pm · For: Chapter 6
First off, I'm angered that this hasn't gotten any reviews!! What's wrong with people nowadays?! Gosh....*ahem* Anyways, I loved it. The pairing is so peculiar that it actually works. And it works damn well, if I must say.
And I love how you let Shika have kids with Temari, even though they're not together. Cause I'm a total ShikaTem hag, so any indication of that pairing and I immediately like the story more than before. Of course, I thought it was going to be something like Shika was still with Temari, and they were married but he wanted Neji and OH THE DRAMA but I actually like the fact that you didn't do that. It was...sweeter.
And I felt so bad for Neji, too!! Damn Hiashi to hell for doing that to someone as sweet as Neji!
*cough* Anyways, this is getting too long. So yeah, amazing job, I quite loved it. 10 stars!!
Author's Response: Ah, thank you! I felt it was more in SHika's personality to ease it with Temari. He's gay, not a jerk. And he pretty much needs to have kids. Clan continuance and all that. Thank you for reviewing...I was starting to think about taking it down, cause no one was reviewing and it must suck. *SOOOOB* n.n Thank you, thank you thank you! *snuggle-cookies with extra chocolate!*