Reviews For They're Not Gonna Get Us
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 28/07/08 - 08:56 am · For: Conflictions
yeah....much much better.^^ Don't worry, I already read A Vampire's Butterfly story about how people don't review correctly. 1-I like Yaoi so don't worry about that^^ 2-I actually put something constructive crticism in my reviews (however little^^) 3-I like sasunaru so no problems there either. My review for this chapter is that it's pretty much fine. I didn't see ANY grammatical errors or punctuation errors. Good job^^
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 28/07/08 - 08:48 am · For: Taking a Stand
uh-oh, this is getting good now...you better finish this fanfic because all of the good ones are starting to cut off halfway. As for this chapter, it's better. Though, I still think you need a page break for POV changes.
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 28/07/08 - 08:38 am · For: Safety For Now
Nice...it could be a little longer..but I think it's just perfect at this length too. It's hard for me to find any errors worth noting. Maybe...put a page break to symbolize POV change and maybe a dialogue key. People who are new to TONFA may not know the difference between 'thought' and "Voice". Other than that, you seem fine.
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 28/07/08 - 08:32 am · For: Becoming Fugitives
Hey....that was pretty good. It could use a little treaking in the content. Also, maybe you could include a prologue about how Naruto ended up leaving because it seems like he left after the 2.5 year skip to Shippuden but I can't tell.
Name: Jm_Rules_Rocks (Anonymous) · Date: 21/02/07 - 02:16 am · For: Conflictions
That's brillant! I love the title, I just was listening to it when I came across this.