Reviews For Once upon a time was known as Kazama Arashi
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:43 am · For: Chapter 8
Da Da Da Daaaaaaaaaaaa! *Dramatic pause* Next time on As the Leaf Village Turns "Sasuke has a mental breakdown on how Naruto is Yondaime...or Yondaime is Naruto....?!......Arrrrgggggg....NOW I'm confused.....shadow_haseo is hurt due to confusion *bang* shadow_haseo has fainted. "Curse you pokemon^^!!!"
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:40 am · For: Chapter 7
HEHE^^...perfect....not just because u beat up Ero-sannin....okay maybe a little...okay A LOT.....shut up^^
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:36 am · For: Chapter 6
nice chappie^^
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:36 am · For: Chapter 5
Wow^^ You have a lot of outside dialogue right here.
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:35 am · For: Chapter 4
Even better^^ You have the longer chapters....check. The balance of inner and outer dialogue...check. The matching of the character's personalities...check. And some conflict when needed....check.
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:33 am · For: Chapter 3
Much better than the first two chapters^^ The dialogue can get a bit confusing but that part can't be helped...needs a little more dialogue outside of Kyuubi otherwise its going to make Naruto look too OC. Remember, you're trying to make Yondaime act as Naruto would if he survived.
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:30 am · For: Chapter 2
This is starting to sound like a documentary or something. These are good and all but it needs more content. Sounds like u rushed these parts so that u can get to the conflicts later on. Don't rush your fanfics.....the people can wait for the next chapters so don't feel worried if you left them on a cliffhanger or two^^
Name: shadow_haseo (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 07:28 am · For: Chapter 1
It's alright. It could use a little more content because it's the chapter that determines whether to bother reading on or not. It would make a good prologue but not enough for a first chapter.
Name: Swords_and_Bandages (Signed) · Date: 02/08/07 - 01:11 am · For: Chapter 8
Ah...
Very funny. Very nice storytelling. I'd like to see more, but I don't know if you're still writing this. If you are, please update soon!
Name: HochiminShii (Signed) · Date: 23/05/07 - 11:12 pm · For: Chapter 8
great so far i ant wait for the whole thing to be done
Author's Response: thanks, i'll try to finish someday, hopefully that day will be soon
Name: takahiro (Anonymous) · Date: 04/03/07 - 03:49 pm · For: Chapter 7
OMG, naruto's dad is such a perv.
more lemon is still needed.
YAY for lemon!
Author's Response: um... it's not suppose to be a lemon or anything, but still thank you fro reading, i guess i need to work on that then... um well thanks for reveiwing too! ^ ^