Reviews For Obsolete
Name: Anonymous (Signed) · Date: 07/10/14 - 09:47 pm · For: Chapter 1
I read this story a while back and checked to see if you had updated. Since you haven't, I guess I'll give you some bottled motivation. Firstly, this has me guessing and wondering what's gong to happen next. There's so many questions! For example, why is Naruto considered a criminal etc. I have my own hunch, but it's probably wrong. Another thing, I don't know if you're planning to do an original character and Naruto pairing, or a pairing at all, but if you did, you'd be making me so happy. There's so very few fics like that. It's your story though. Make it how ever you want. I'll be looking out for the next chapter!
Name: Guest (Signed) · Date: 07/10/14 - 09:41 pm · For: Chapter 2
Finally! I haven't been able to review for the longest he use apparently this site thinks I'm a robot. It kills me because I wasn't to leave review so badly, and I know that a review would probably motivate you but I couldn't. Anyways, I really loved your story. I like the detective feel of it. Now, don't leave us hanging! Update when you can(:
Name: TeamWorkIsKey (Signed) · Date: 22/07/14 - 08:50 am · For: Chapter 2
Another interesting chapter, I just say. You had me fooled though. I thought his request would be something big, like adventurous, not RAMEN! XD That was pretty funny. I'm very curious with what's really going on. Especially at the end where the question: "What went you telling me?" Was asked. Seriously what is going on here?! I'm anxious to find out. Hope you update soon!
Author's Response: That was the idea...... He didn't ask for anything big because he knows Rei isn't nearly important or powerful enough to comply. Moreover he hasn't had his ramen fix in a while so there was that too. As for your questions.... The reveal will take some time but would be worth it. That I promise. Thanks for the review
Name: mst88 (Signed) · Date: 20/07/14 - 08:24 am · For: Chapter 1
Interesting concept, I look forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Look forward to writing more. Thanks.
Name: TeamWorkIsKey (Signed) · Date: 14/07/14 - 08:48 am · For: Chapter 1
Well this is... Something else... Nonetheless I really like it so far. It's very descriptive and grabbed my attention the entire time. I couldn't stop reading, and I'm currently at work. XP whoops. Rei is a really good character and very well developed. I'm excited to read more about her. I was shocked when I read that Naruto is in jail. I want to know what he did! And what he wants! Hope you update soon! Ill be waiting for it! Good job with this introduction. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Hope to hear more from you
Name: Lady Sun (Signed) · Date: 14/07/14 - 03:11 am · For: Chapter 1
Oh, my God, Naruto as a prisoner. I've no clue what to say about that 'cause that is awesome. I really didn't expect it. But GAH, cliffhangers!!
As to the problems I found. They were mainly the use of comas before the name of the character being addressed in the sentence. And some felt a little run-on but I'm no sure as I'm not a coma wizard XD. Umm, oh! The changes in scenes kind of threw me off here and there since I'm used to them being divided, but that's all. The story has correct spelling from what I read.
Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I will look into the issues you have highlighted and see if they need to be fixed. Until next time