Reviews For We Kings Of Light And Darkness
Name: Purple Dinosaur (Signed) · Date: 03/07/13 - 10:37 pm · For: Chapter 1
Where to begin? Well, before I tell you anything, I'm sorry if I seem like a bitch. Well you have a lot of run on sentences, you don't seem to always use a set of quotation marks, hm...I know you said there was going to be OOC, but I don't think Naruto would be that happy to have a person who just killed a bunch of people come up to him. Naruto should at least be a little more scared. I can tell by your writing that you're a new writer, but I see potential. You just have to fix the grammar mistakes and your set. I'll follow this story to see how you progress as a writer.
Author's Response: Thanks for the Review! I haven't written much before so i will take your pointers to heart :D. Also about the Naruto thing, yea I completely understand lol, I need to write more action and reaction type stuff. PS. Everyone always say i have potential for writing so thanks for saying so XD and Thanks again for the advice :) Have a nice day!