Now that this story is changing drastically toward Sakura's point of view, this is getting better. Everything seems realistic thus far in this change of events. You did change some of the dialogue (for all the characters), which is both good and bad I suppose. Be careful on what everyone says, because if it's different than in the manga, it will most likely have an effect on the story. That goes especially for Sakura, though just as much for Naruto and Sasuke.

Anyway, this was a nicely written chapter. Keep up the good work.