Yes! It is much better! This chapter was much better in respect to flare. There was no spot in which it was dry, you definitely took my advice, and it paid off.

Hmm, I agree, I think it should just be The Butterfly Effect. Unless you have a whole series of novels planned in which you change something from the manga, then it would make sense to have Uchiha Itachi in the name, but other than that, The Butterfly Effect is catchy all on its own :)

I really like the twists you threw in here. This story definitely has a nice pace to it, and you're tying up all the loose ends that the manga never explained in detail. So far, everything seems to be falling into place. I really like where this is going.

You're only issue now is grammar, and even then, I can't pinpoint any recurring mistakes. Just mostly commas or tense uses (which I think I mentioned in another story, but it's definitely much better than before). Even your mistakes are minor to the point of not even being able to notice them.

Great job on this! I look forward to seeing more of this, I really love where this story is going. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks for concurring. From here on it'll be just "The Butterfly Effect" :) rnrnGrammar LOL! You're right. I sometimes get this feeling that I'm being superfluous with my punctuation marks. I add commas depending on how I pause when I read aloud. I pause a lot. semi-colons are trickier. When I'm done, I hope I get to edit back from the beginning. Thanks!rnrn