First off, I repeat what I said about the spacing. Also, your spelling is off. Your grammar in terms of dialogue is off as well; you're not using quotes to show who is speaking, it looks like you're using commas. Just clean that up a bit.

Now, for the chapter... I liked it. To make Shikamaru of all people lose his mind...it's a sad bit of irony as a result of the war, but it is very believable. I liked how you portrayed him: confused, wild, angry, his normal lazy and quiet personality completely gone.

Nice job. Keep up the good work with this story.

Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback! And your critique!! rnAbout the spacing, I have this nasty habit of pressing shift+enter... I don't know why, and I kind of like it. In fact, double-spacing tends to confuse me, most of the time. And the spelling/grammar - maybe I should have mentioned somewhere that English is not my first language and I don't have anyone to betaread the text. These first chapters I wrote a month ago, after I had not made active use of this foreign language for quite some time. I do believe (at least I hope) that it's getting better as the story progresses. (Anyway, I'll check the last and coming chapters again. To be frank, I didn't before I uploaded them here, as it has been a while since I finished them. So thanks for pointing it out!)rnThe quotes that look like commas are quotes, I simply forgot to tell openoffice to use the ones common in English instad of the ones used in German and when I realised this was too lazy to correct it. I thought it would be obvious (obviously, as I am used to these quotes...), but if this really is so confusing I'll change it.rnrnAgain, thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate it!