Reviews For At the Same Sky
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 20/08/11 - 03:48 am · For: At the Same Sky Info & Intro
*sniffle* Silverwolf is right. This was sad. I can't believe you separated them like that. I can't wait until they meet again. They just have to if it's going to be a ShikaOc story. And yeah, a little depressing about little or no fighting, but I think the awesomeness of your story will cover that right up. This is awesome, by the way. I loved how you had Shikamaru all happy she was leaving because of the peace and quiet he'd get, but then he deflated when he heard she'd stay gone. I also like the white Tsubaki thing. It's awesome.
Author's Response: Aww, I'm glad you think it's so awesome. c: You're awesome! :D Thank you so much for the review. <3
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 05:46 pm · For: A le même ciel 01
Aww, it's so cute! She came back to Konoha! I can't wait until they see each other again!
You did a much better job on the elaboration. Everything was so much more descriptive, well done!
You've already shown great improvement between only two chapters. This story has great potential, it's already super adorable! I can't wait for more! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you! I sort of feel like I'm rushing the story a little bit though. But maybe that's just me.
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 02:15 pm · For: A le même ciel 01
Sweetness! Alright, reunions, I love em! I've written a few myself! Can't wait!
Author's Response: I love reunions too!rnI think they're a really important part of a story.
Name: theez (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 11:04 am · For: At the Same Sky Info & Intro
Okay, this story won't have any fights [Darn.] But, it makes up for it since Shikamaru's my third favorite Naruto character!!!!!!!! Yeah! ShikamaruX OC? Great idea! Hanako is a great OC, can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Aww, I'm sorry. Maybe in future chapters I'll have one. c: Whoo! Go Shikamaru. :D Thank you for the review, it means a lot!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/11 - 06:57 am · For: At the Same Sky Info & Intro
:'( That was... *sniffle* so sad!
This was overall very good. It was short, but it was pretty sweet.
I do want to say that the spacing could be fixed, just because the dialogue looks very smushed together. Just adding spaces between each person would be very helpful.
Also, more description would be very beneficial to your writing. This was mostly dialogue; to make your writing better, add elaboration on the person's actions.
But I do think this has potential as a very good cute story, and I do hope to see more. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thank you! c: I was wondering about that, I'll make sure to put spaces next time. For me adding details to a story is pretty hard for me which is bad because it's probably the most important part. But in the next chapter, I'll try to add more detail. Thank you so much for the review in such a short time, it means a lot to me! c: