Reviews For His Guardian Ninja
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 01:34 pm · For: Chapter 21
o_o It seems TONFA has messed up or something, because there is no chapter 21... I mean, I can see the page, where the story-text would supposedly be, but there's not text! T_T
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 01:20 pm · For: Chapter 17
!! How can you seriously write chapters as awesome as this?? I'm mesmerized!
Oh, now I understand why Sasuke was able to sense Kakashi, because of the Sharingan! Gosh, I should've known... *feels like an idiot*
And Sakura got the curse! I didn't see that one coming at all! And I like this story even more because of it! It's nice to know you don't take the "safe" route and just copy everything straight.
I knew something bad was going to happen to Kakashi, since he and Naruto had such a cute moment back in the Wawe-arc (in the forest). T_T I hope Naruto will get his Guardian Angel back. Soon!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 01:12 pm · For: Chapter 16
"The huge Chunin had his arms folded across his chest, the black trench coat almost dragging onto the floor."
*Jonin
Blah chapter? I think not! It built excitement towards the next one! I can't wait to see what you will do with the Forest of Death -part. (And I'm seriously waiting for Gai to pop out at some point. XD)
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 12:45 pm · For: Chapter 9
If this is getting any better (as you are promising) I'll will fall off from my chair because of the excitement you are bringing! This is one the best Narutofics I've read! :) Seriously! (And it puzzles me that you don't have "many" reviews, because your story definitely deserves them! But then again, the users of TONFA are quite lazy to review, which is a shame. x_x )
I don't think your version of the characters are Godmodded! And I actually like the fact that Sakura is doing something (illusions, genjutsu) in stead of standing, whining and everything else she does in the manga/anime before Tsunade starts to teach her. I like your version of Sakura better than the original!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 12:36 pm · For: Chapter 8
“Bridge builder...Your life is up! I, the Demon of the Mist, Zabuza Momchi, will kill you today.”
*Momochi
(If I annoy you with my corrections, please tell me and I'll stop doing it :) )
But seriously, omg! I envy you! You write very well and you handle the action scenes with perfection! I don't know many writers who can do that (most people either make them too messy and I can't figure out what's going on or too bland and it seems like nothing's going on). You describe them very well. *thumbs up*
Zabuza is going to have a hard time fighting a guardian angel version of Kakashi. :DD Can't wait to read more!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 12:28 pm · For: Chapter 7
"Her chakra was still quite weak compared to hers" I guess 'hers' part should be 'his'? :)
It left me a little bit puzzled that Sasuke could sense Kakashi's presense, but Sakura couldn't. I mean, she should have a lot of spiritual energy (since she is a woman) and I understood she is good at genjutsu. So it was a bit suprising she couldn't sense him.
I liked the philosophical part! I never quite understood why no one in Naruto-series seemed to actually stop and think that they are killing people all the time. But then again they are raised to kill, so maybe that's why...
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 12:03 pm · For: Chapter 5
For some reason the font size in this chapter was unusually big. o_o I tried to set it smaller, but it didn't work. x_x
I really like where you are going with this story! Its idea and plot is original and you describe the characters very well! In my opinion they are not OOC. Very well written chapter! I liked that you didn't just copy the manga/anime, but made things a bit different. :)
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 08:16 am · For: Chapter 1
I really much like your idea for this story, it's definitely different than all the other Naruto-based stories I've read!
Your writing is fluent and I didn't notice any mistakes (then again I'm actually quite bad at noticing them ^^").
It might take me some time to read the rest of the chapters (I'm glad there are so many of them, I can't wait to read them!), but I'll be sure to post a review to tell you what I thought. Right now, it looks pretty promising story!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 13/06/11 - 04:07 am · For: Chapter 26
Imps? Didn't see that one coming, but highly original, I'll give you that. Their battle was pretty intense, I wonder if we will see them again? And what shall happen to the miko? Orochimaru continues to be sadistic and evil, and I can only wonder what will happen to the priestess. Nice work with this chapter, I look forward to seeing what happens next. Keep up the good work with this story, I really enjoy it thus far!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/05/11 - 10:40 am · For: Chapter 25
Awwwwwww!!!!!!!!
This was so adorable. Father and son, how cute!
Your extent to detail in this was great. You really described their relationship very well. I really liked this, it was very cute. Good work, I can't wait for more!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/05/11 - 05:41 pm · For: Chapter 24
Aw, that is so sad! Gosh, I really hope Kakashi gets out of there soon. You wrote the cage scene really well, really describing screams and horrors there very well. It sent chills. I loved the description, it was so elaborate and spooky, and it worked so well. Same thing with the Kabuto scene. He is so cruel and evil, but the scene was so well-written.
Nice intro to Team 10. It was very typical of them to be hiding. I can't help feeling that their appearance is a bit of foreshadowing? Or maybe I am just overthinking things.
Anyways, nice job with this. Can't wait for the next one. Keep up the great work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/05/11 - 07:35 am · For: Chapter 23
Very nice. The little bit at the end with Kabuto gave me the chills; he's just so creepy.
The scene with Sasuke and Sakura was kind of touching. It was a breakthrough for both of them. It was great character development for both, and it also leads to an even better plot.
Good job with this chapter, and I look forward to seeing what you put up next, whenever that may be. Keep up the great work with your writing!
Author's Response: Thx. And don't worry; more info on the summon will be shown bit by bit. But if you've played any of the games, it should be no surprise by now; and yes, it IS an important character in the story and different from other summoning animals in many respects. Though Kakashi's ninken will make appearances here and there, too. You've been so great with the reviews dude (it's ambiguous mind you.), thanks a bunch!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/05/11 - 11:20 am · For: Chapter 22
Ooh, this was really good. At last, Sakura has been defeated, for now at least. That was an epic battle between Team 8 and Sakura. It was so intense, I loved it! And now Kakashi knows about Akatsuki. I wonder how he is going to get back to Naruto and save the world and stuff. That should be fun XD And now we slightly learn something about Naruto's strange summon. What's weird is that Kiba doesn't know anything about it, and what's up with the weird markings?! I can't wait to learn more about this wolf!
This was really good. I continue to be amazed with each passing chapter because this story just gets better and better. Excellent work with this chappie, it was brilliantly written and fantastically elaborate and descriptive. Keep up the good work with this story!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/04/11 - 08:16 pm · For: Chapter 21
Whoo! You're back! This was really good. Very suspenseful. I wonder what's up with the little summon pup. And Sasuke had a breakthrough! He finally realized that teamwork is important! And the whole thing with Sakura waking up was very chilling. I liked how you introduced the other characters, getting them involved and worried about the situation. I can't wait to see what happens to Sakura. This story is really good. You're a great author, and I can't wait to see what you come up with for the next chapter. Keep up the good work with this!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 25/02/11 - 03:13 pm · For: Chapter 20
I liked the OC! She was a great addition to the plot, and this chapter was very good. The little description about Orochimaru's experiments were well-written, and the whole thing with Kakashi being free is great! I'm so glad I know what's happening with Kakashi now. Good job on this! I can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Seriously? Thank God...Usually when I end up putting in an OC it ruins the fic. Hopefully she won't.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/02/11 - 01:21 pm · For: Chapter 19
Hooray! These two chapters were so good! I love action, and your fight scenes were very well-written. Great job! Kabuto was quite scary in the end, but it worked well, so good job. I still want to know where Kakashi is! Ugh! I can't wait for him to show up again. I eagerly await the next update! Thanks for posting this, and I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Yeah, you might not see him for a while...as the Kabuto scene is priority and also I need time to figure out how I'm going to handle what I'm going to do; as I want it to be shocking but not too obvious.
Name: Naruke45 (Signed) · Date: 01/02/11 - 10:16 am · For: Chapter 4
So far, I really enjoy this fix. Though I see barely any reviews on it :( That would make me discouraged, yet you are still writing. I really respect that and want you to know that so far, this is an amazing fic.
Author's Response: Well, that's only on here. FF.net I've got almost fifty...while my others....not so much. Still I just write it because I feel like continu9ing it; hence why the rest of my fics are abandoned for now. I was actually able to keep up with this idea, which is surprising. Usually I think out a ch or two fort a fic and then don't know where to go, though for this I've mainly used the canon for it, which makes me a little angry at myself. But I'll do better with the later chapters.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/01/11 - 12:10 pm · For: Chapter 17
Oh my goodness! This chapter was freaking awesome! Everything seemed to flow really well, and what a twist! Sakura getting the curse mark? Never heard of that one before! Very original and very unique!
Now I have so many questions that I wish could be answered right now! Is Orochimaru going to take interest in Sakura?! Is Sakura going to live?! Is she going to go to Orochimaru or is Sasuke still going to leave the village?! What's going to happen to Kakashi! Ah! So many unanswered questions! Now I need to wait for an update, and I'm dying from the suspense! Thank you so much for posting this, and I hope you find time to update soon!
Author's Response: Well, I'm definitely gonna say not I'm killing her off, as she's an essential part of Team 7 in my fic at least. I wish she could be the same in canon, but alas....sexist Kishi. *ahem* That's all I'm saying for now, no more spoilers. Char deaths may or may not come later, but mostly during the Part 2 saga where I will be making most of the major changes.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/01/11 - 07:15 pm · For: Chapter 15
Whoo! I just finished reading the last twelve chapters. So much happened! Well, it was twelve chapters, after all...
This is truly an amazing story. It's so original, and you are actually diverging from the main plot a bit. I like the changes you make, and the interactions of the characters is very well-written. I just love this story in general, and I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: I'll try. School and my birthday have taken up most of my time this weekend. Hopefully I'll have something out in the next week or two.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/11/10 - 08:07 pm · For: Chapter 3
Yay! I love how this story is developing! Your writing is incredible and I love the idea and the plot. Please update soon because I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: I have lots more on Ff.net. Need to start updating on there too actually, hehe....