Reviews For He is not here..
Name: ForyourLove (Signed) · Date: 21/06/09 - 08:26 pm · For: Walking alone
I KNEW IT! I figured english wasn't your first language, I just didn't wanta assume too much.
I can help/beta you with anything you want : D I like being helpful!
Contact me anytime through my email ^^
Author's Response: I would love too :)rnWhen I finish my next story, you will be the first one to know and read :))
Name: IDK (Signed) · Date: 20/06/09 - 04:28 am · For: Walking alone
aww and i thought u were gonna make me cry *grins* good job *thumbs up*
~HimeIDK,
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Name: ForyourLove (Signed) · Date: 18/06/09 - 10:34 pm · For: Walking alone
Hmm, well for one you should get a beta. Lots of grammar mistakes and whatnot that make it odd to follow. :)
The story is so...bland. There really isnt' much to it. Just statements thrown together to tell people something thats happened. That doesn't make well for something you want people to enjoy.
There is no emotion, no pull to the story. Makes people stop reading in the middle (if even that far).
Also, there wasn't that much of a story here...you didn't really explain much...it would have been alright if you wrote it in a different style and not so dull but as is....nothing going on at all.
You seem to have potentional, just dont write like its a chore...thats how it comes off. Write something that makes you feel anything, something. Ya'know, have fun with it and if it makes you cry or laugh then it should other people.
Dont be afraid of what others will think just write, if you can't do that then you can't really be a writer.
I'm not trying to seem rude/mean! Please dont think that, just helpful.
If you want I'll help ya. I like talking to people and assisting them in anyway if I can!
I only review people I think aren't complete idiots and who can change for the better (writing wise).
:) Have a good day and please dont be insulted by anything I've said in here.
Author's Response: First of all, Thank you very much for your review!rnrnI'm glad that after reading my story you actually wrote something to me :)rnI deeply appreciate everything you said.rnrnYou are absolutely right! I really need a beta.... Right now I can't write without mistakes, because I'm still learning English. And I don't have any friends who would read my works.rnrnAbout the story.. Um.. It supposed to be plain and simple. I wanted to describe a day from the life of someone, who is waiting for the person they love. And I actually felt loneliness and pain while writing it. Guess, I'm not a writer if I can't make my readers feel what I feel.. I'll try better!rnrnAnd I don't think that review like yours can be considered as a mean thing. Moreover! I would like you to review my other stories, especially "Homeless".rnrnThank you very much again!rnrnJinxKirinrn