Reviews For Reflections of the Past, Illusions of the Future
Name: Wharehouse (Signed) · Date: 01/08/08 - 05:04 am · For: Prolouge Part 1
Good story and very enjoyable to read. You seem to have a fair grip on a good story line and are presenting it well, I look forward to your future chapters.
However, your general spelling and grammar seem kind of... well weak. Not that this is something horrible but it does take a bit away from reading when every line or two there are some fairly obvious grammatical errors. I'm not saying that so you will feel bad, more so I'm hoping you'll begin to see them and be able to fix them gradually.
Thanks for the great story and I hope to see more chapters soon... for both your stories. If you'd like help correcting these I'd also be more than willing.
Good luck,
Wharehouse
Author's Response: Oh, yeah. I kinda forgot about TONFA for alittle while and when i remembered, i quickly posted my 'pre-beta' chapters on accident. I'll change them as soon as i have the time. Thanks for bringing that to light.
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/07/08 - 06:18 pm · For: Fox
great story! please keep going.
Quite - not quite there yet
Quiet - it was still and quiet
Name: Akuma Enkou (Anonymous) · Date: 11/04/08 - 03:29 pm · For: Take Down
... so fucking good, u must update, i am hooked, (And if you like NaruHina FF, then read were in love)
Author's Response: I've been following "Were In Love' since its first update.
Name: shattered_words (Signed) · Date: 09/04/08 - 01:48 pm · For: Prolouge Part 2
Another good chapter. Once more there are still some grammer mistakes that were made, but they're not that noticeable and hardly muddle the story line. My favorite line: "Or because of the fact that he's been trapped inside of a cramped cage for seventeen years, which meant even the idea of watching dust settle on an old table would excited him." It made me giggle, heh Also, the relationship he has with the Kyuubi, although not possible, is pretty interesting to read. It was really interesting to read this story, and the thing that had me cracking up the most was Kabuto's letter. Not because Naruto and Hinata are in danger of being decimated, but because of what Kabuto puts. 'PS: That means it's going to explode... PPS: Oh, and congratulations on Hokaga' I almost fell out of my chair laughing. I definitely look forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thank you, I know I have some grammar problems, but I'm getting better. If you can get past chapters 3 and 4, then it gets abit better. I swear.
Name: shattered_words (Signed) · Date: 09/04/08 - 01:38 pm · For: Prolouge Part 1
The story line seems pretty good so far, and although some mistakes in grammer were made it's still pretty good. Keep writing and improving your skills.
PS: I love the NaruHina pairing. They're so cute together! n.n
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 08/04/08 - 08:33 pm · For: Take Down
awesome story update more ^-^
Author's Response: I will soon ;)
Name: Dag (Signed) · Date: 08/04/08 - 02:30 pm · For: Prolouge Part 1
I've just read the first chapter and so far this story is really really good!
Author's Response: HAZZUH!!! I've got my first review from TONFA! If your still interested after the next few chapters, then I guess I'll keep posting here. Like I said, my main site is FF.net. Check out the story Herin that I'm writing as a kind of secondary fic. If you can't find it here, then check FF.net under the same user name as here.