Reviews For Hybrid
Name: girlhero576 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 11:48 pm · For: Chapter Seven: Here, Kitty Kitty
first, i'll beta for you if you need it. email: girlhero576@gmail.com
second, which way you do it just make sure you stay to true to the characters, like making them disgustingly wimpy.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'll see who else wants to beta, and then go from there. I don't know yet, but I'll e-mail you to let you know! I'll make sure to keep the characters themselves and not completely trash their personalities, because I know how much I hate it when people do that! Thanks so much! ~lemon
Name: game_over316 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 05:18 pm · For: Chapter Seven: Here, Kitty Kitty
yay new chapter! Liked it Yay!
I myself like narusasu because it's well different. Also, everyone else has sasunaru so I prefer something different
Author's Response: Thank you! It's nice to know that NaruSasu people are reading this to, I thought I was the only one here who liked NaruSasu :O I don't feel so alone now *sniff* Thanks for reading! ~lemon
Name: Sypno (Signed) · Date: 23/07/08 - 03:36 pm · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
Amazing NaruSasu. Please make Hybird NaruSasu. Pleeeeeease!!!!!
Author's Response: That is...ONE for NaruSasu! Ahaha. I don't know yet, but I'm pretty sure you'll know next chapter! I'm glad that you liked it! (I didn't think any NaruSasu people were out there...!) Chances are...it'll probably just stay the same as it has...but keep watching for it! *luv* ~lemon
Name: Noleta (Signed) · Date: 04/06/08 - 03:25 pm · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
Me: OMGOMG! I felt exactly the same, retarted little Sasuke!Doesn't he know Itachi wouldn't want that, and why the hell did he call the group eagle!!!!!!POOR NARU-CHAN!!!!!
Author's Response: So it IS 'Eagle'! I was so confused, there are different sites calling it different names :O I didn't know what to call it! -Ahem- YES! Sasuke needs to quit being a butt-head and just go back to Konoha...either that or just crawl in a hole until Naruto finds him. *laughs* Now THAT I would pay to see. Thanks for reviewing! ~lemon
Name: Sakuras_Assian (Signed) · Date: 04/06/08 - 09:47 am · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
i like it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it :] ~lemon
Name: Akura (Signed) · Date: 03/06/08 - 01:26 am · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
LMAO! Moaning walls...LOL! That was TOO funny! And about the A/N...you mean the newest chapter in Naruto, riiiiiiiight? Cause, like, I read it and I freaked out for, well, let's just say a very LONG time lol -^^-
But, anyways, I really enjoy this story!!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!! b29;^^b29;
Author's Response: Yeah, the new chapter made me so mad...but dying to see the next bit. YAY! I'm not the only one who freaked out! (and that makes me happy and feel less weird ^^;;;) Sasuke's such a prissy little thing sometimes...I hate him. ANYWAY! I'm so very glad that you enjoyed it! I'll TRY to redden myself and update more often! Thank you so much! ~lemon
Name: Frosty (Signed) · Date: 02/06/08 - 09:18 pm · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
I... acctually understood, like, ninty-five percent of that... Weirdness...
Anywho, yeah, the fox-expert, would-be-novalist, going-to-be-teacher-after-eight-more-years-of-school-and-then-some is back with another review! For you! YAYZ! ONWARD!
Corrections:
“Which did not only hurt his pride of being a man, yes, he considered himself a man, but it also hurt his neck as well.” I’d put a dash between ‘man’ and ‘yes’ and the second ‘man’ and ‘but’ if I were you, and… lolz. Poor Naru-chan!
“that didn’t smell completely doused with the fox’s scent” – Either say “that didn’t smell like the fox” or “that wasn’t completely doused with the fox’s scent” putting both it doesn’t make sense, doll.
‘Kami’ should always be capitalized.
“Naruto watched with mild amusement--and some fear-- at the flushed and irate Sasuke” – Either “Naruto watched the flushed and irate Sasuke with mild amusement and some fear” or “Naruto stared with mild amusement--and some fear--at the flushed and irate Sasuke” OR “Naruto watched with mild and amusement--and some fear--the flushed an irate Sasuke”
“It had to be bad if it made the stoic animal like that out of nowhere.” – this sentence is awkward, dear.
“He knocked into Sasuke’s chest, a growl resounded in his ear” – He knocked into Sasuke’s chest, and a growl resounded in his ear
“He couldn’t even think about he was doing and why” – He couldn’t even thing about what he was doing and why
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Comments:
Naruto’s four favorite things… Ramen, A hat bought by Iruka, Iruka, and Personal Space... and Sasuke... eventually...
‘“A submissive is usually a female.”
Iruka glared from the corner of his eye.’ – Lolz. Poor Iruka, though I don’t think he minds being uke when it’s just Kashi and him…
‘“Argh! It won’t. Go. Away!”
Sasuke ran around the room frantically, spraying everything in reach. ‘The whole room smells like that...that damn fox!’ he grabbed for his pillow and smothered it with air freshener.’ – So not like Sasuke… and yet I can see him doing this so very clearly… and *gasp* he killed the pillow! PILLOW MURDERER!
“This was probably his punishment for cursing in church when he went with Kakashi that one time when he was little. They were pouring water on him! What else was he supposed to do!” – Oh, Gods! Sasuke cursed during his baptism?
Heh… seems accurate enough…
Jiraiya’s job is just perfect! Couldn’t imagine something better for him… except perhaps running a strip club, but he’d probably die of repeated nosebleeds in the first week… nay… the first day!
“The carpet would be his new best friend.” – ‘So, guess what happened to me today, rug’ ‘…’ ‘No, that wasn’t it, in fact…’ = Sasuke’s new best friend and Sasuke having a conversation. If only it was a scratching post in the form of a log, for us NA fans out there, even if they ARE supposed to be rivals…
Great stuff, as always!
Gaara's Truely (Okay, not truely, as I also fangirl over L and Sasori but... SHH!)
So... uh...
Gaara's almost truely,
Frosty
Author's Response: *laughs* YES! The carpet shall keep him company forever more! Lmao. I'll have to use that scratching post idea sometime. As long as you don't mind, of course....I see this adapting into something in the near future.~~~ @.@ So many mistakes! I really have to get a beta, it would make you're life so much easier! But I do love you for always helping me! It's very, very much appreciated. Where do you find the time to help someone as lazy and inconsiderate as me??? I always take so long to update...and yet you always come back as helpful as ever! I do not deserve it...but I'll keep going so that I won't disappoint you even MORE than I already have. *bows* Even though I know it's not good enough...THANK YOU! For always reviewing and helping, the support is welcome, as well as the craziness that always makes me smile :] *love&hugs* ~lemon
Name: AphoriditeRose (Signed) · Date: 01/06/08 - 11:42 am · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
YEAH!
Lol XD
Haha, moaning walls. Gets me every time. XD! Lol.
Lmao, and you're insane. XD I understood none of the A/N at the end XD Lol.
Ah, well. Awesome story, awesome chapter. :] You're just an all round awesome story writing person. Lol ^^
Update soon! :]
Author's Response: *blinks* So much compliments! T^T and I don't deserve any of it! I'm so horrible when it comes to updates...and replies. I'm so glad that you took the time to review and...read that completely insane A/N. I'm sure it was confusing. Anyway, thanks so much for reading and reviewing! =] *love* ~lemon
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 30/05/08 - 07:43 pm · For: Chapter Six: Personal Space
omg your like hyper xD bom chica wow wow? XD dont worry we all love you
Author's Response: *scratches head* Ahaha, yeah I get like that when I'm on the internet too long. I love you too, and all the support ;] Thank you for reviewing! ~lemon
Name: Frosty (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 - 09:27 pm · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
Animal related corrections:
None! ‘Twas all good! I love how you did Hina-chan. Poor thing. She’s completely smitten by Naruto now, isn’t she? And I bet she’ll continue to be until it’s so blatantly obvious that he’s Sasuke’s that even SHE can’t ignore it, at which point she’ll be crushed and… Kiba? will build her back up… Poor thing, even when we’re being nice to her we cause her pain!
Grammar/Word related corrections:
“his soar bottom” – soar = sore
“Hyuga” – Hyuuga
“his arms over his chest and glared defiantly” – Sasuke isn’t the one being defiant here, Naruto is…
“jerked at he sound” – THE sound. Just a small typo.
“Blues eyes blinked for a moment, bewildered.” – Blue eyes
“couldn’t noticed” – couldn’t notice
“A second later he could hear Kakashi’s voice calling them down for dinner.” – A second later, he could hear Kakashi’s voice calling them down for dinner.
“his face scrunched as the unappealing dish was set in front of him.” – His face scrunched as the unappealing(unappetizing?) dish was set in front of him.
“continued to eats his dinner like a wolf.” – continued to eat his dinner like a wolf.
“Just try you’re best” – Just try your best
“One bit couldn’t be that revolting” – One bite couldn’t be that revolting
“how Sasuke seen him at the moment” – how Sasuke saw him at the moment.
Other:
“Naruto stared at the board, the teacher was writing something about etiquette and different terms of use for the spoon.” – OMG! It’s Catillion all over again! NOOOOO! *runs away screaming*
Awws! Hina-chan is SO KAWAII! *huggles her then starts having a sneezing fit, poofs up, and has the blood draining from face because I’m allergic*
“He already could smell the difference in it since Naruto’s coming. He didn‘t like it.” – SURE ya don’t, Sasuke-teme.
“Naruto winced as his neck was bitten harshly” – Lolz. Sasuke is vampire… And I’ve never been happier for him to be one. YAYZ! But… I want more! No, strike that… I /need/ more!
No Lee and Gai! NO! Throw Gaara-kun into this… make him a raccoon, of course. GaaLeeness! YAYZ! But… I don’t want him with Lee… he should me mine! NOES! *ish conflicted*
Very, very good chapter, and I can’t wait for the next one. That /is/ gonna be a REALLY embarrassing vet trip… Poor Naruto. Lucky, lucky us. Sasuke must be mortified, and totally kicking himself over getting so out of control… Not that it won’t be happening again, as I’m sure it will…
Gaara’s Truly,
Frosty (Red Fox and self-proclaimed biggest fan of this story)
Name: AphoriditeRose (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 - 12:54 pm · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
Lolsh at Kakashi. XD
What an awesome guy, lol. :]
Keep up teh awesome writing!!
^^
Lovesh x
Name: JustAnotherSoul (Signed) · Date: 05/05/08 - 04:25 am · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
Kiwi was just fine....
Ahahahaha!....penis.
...No.. *shudders*.... nooo...
Lee should never be paired with Gai...
Pair him up with Gaara! :D. Neji's fine too. But I like GaaLee better.
Wee! Sasuke marked the little ukkee....*right?*
Until then, Caio.
Name: DRAGONKINGHT (Signed) · Date: 04/05/08 - 07:10 pm · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
love to read more!
Name: emz_rose (Anonymous) · Date: 04/05/08 - 04:44 pm · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
NO NO NO, not Lee and Guy... together, in THAT way, no, no, no. But LOL all the way through this chapter, I wonder why everyone likes how Naruto smells.
Hoping for a next update soon, great chapter!
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 04/05/08 - 02:27 pm · For: Chapter Five: Naughty
AHHH PERFECT!
Name: DRAGONKINGHT (Signed) · Date: 02/05/08 - 03:55 pm · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
you need to update!!!!
Name: DRAGONKINGHT (Signed) · Date: 23/04/08 - 10:59 am · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
you think that sasunaru is the bast it will be funny to see naruto playing jokes on eveyone but his friends and foxes love to napping anywhare.
Name: emz_rose (Anonymous) · Date: 22/04/08 - 04:04 pm · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
I love it, how cute that Naruto found all these new little friends!! Yay! You did an wonderful job on this chapter, can see why it took you all day. Feel a bit sorry for Sasuke coz he has no friends :(
Author's Response: Heheh. Don't feel bad for him! He likes the solitude...I think. I'm glad that you liked it and understand ^^ That makes me very happy, along with the review! Thank you for reading! ~lemon
Name: Frosty (Signed) · Date: 21/04/08 - 05:37 pm · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
Great job! Few correction for ya…
Animal related:
Brown is not a very common color in huskies (I would know, huskies are my pet of choice, and my whole family goes along with it, so we never have less than three at a time), grey and black would probably be more likely to appear on Kiba than brown. If it’s more of a reddish brown (a light chestnut or something) that might be a bit more plausible, as red huskies are very desirable, right after the silver fur color which is most often seen in shows.
Other:
He threw himself onto Sasuke’s bed and opted on going back to sleep.
His tail started to wave on it’s own and his ears went flat.
that could do talk and do normal everyday things
strait for the car
whinned - whined
Oh, nothing Iruka dear. – Oh, (its) nothing, Iruka, dear.
It wasn’t one of Kakashi’s most enjoyable mornings if you chose to put it that way – It wasn’t one of Kakashi’s most enjoyable mornings, if you chose to put it that way
arms crossed and radiated pure bloodlust – arms crossed and radiating bloodlust (OR) arms crossed as he radiated pure bloodlust
But why. – But why?
Triumphal – triumphant sounds a bit better, in my opinion.
insect with a proud feline with him – insect with a proud feline like him
hima – him a
Inuzuka clan can where proudly – Inuzuka clan can wear proudly
Kiba laughed at he blonde – Kiba laughed at the blonde
Non-correction:
Lolz. That’s just like Kakashi, to be reading Icha Icha at a cemetery.
… and to not ask for directions. What is it with men and refusing to ask? It’s annoying! And stupid… *growl* Tomi was the same way when it was his week to drive on the road trip. Took us three extra days because of that!
Aw! They were sleeping on each other! And Sasuke actually let Naruto use him as a pillow. Dang. The way you described it… so kawaii! *huggles them both*
YES! The Uchiha eyebrow twitch! Gotta love it. I try and put it in everything I do at least once…
No! Naruto! DON’T GO IN TO THE GLOWING, PINK, FANGIRLY LIGHT! STAY IN THE DARKNESS WITH SASUKE! PLEASE, THE YAOI FANS BEG YOU!
You didn’t make Ino a pig. Why? It would’ve been funny… besides, Choji should be the butterfly. Red candy = wings and death! YES!
“HELLO MY YOUTHFUL COUNTERPARTS!” – AHHHH! RUN FOR YOUR LIVES! IT’S LEE! *dives under nearest desk*
“Lee… of the Rock breed?” – lolz
OMG! Having Lee be a squirrel is perfect! Just like in the Forest of Doom! (Anko: Forest of Death! *twitch* GET IT RIGHT!)
Oh, and it is now… Dattebayo, un! Yes, yes it is! In meh story (The Singing Conspiracy) we’re apparently in the English version, for Naruto says ‘Believe it!’ so I thwack him on the head and shout ‘IT’S DATTEBAYO!’ but, being the child of Deidara (and Itachi, and Naruto…) I have to add an ‘UN!’ So it’s now officially ‘DATTEBAYO, UN!’
As to the SasuNaru vrs. NaruSasu… SasuNaru. Easier to say, though I’m not completely sure that Sasuke would be seme… I mean, neither would submit to being Uke, ever, so… I dunno. Maybe it’s like…
NS
AA
RS
UU
Or something…
Author's Response: Ah! *claps hands* CHESTNUT! That's the color I was referring to! Ahaha...I think my brain died because I just couldn't get a name for the color I was thinking...But you solved the problem! *sigh* That's a relief...I can rest in peace now. But since Kiba's special (Oh yes, very special indeed) He's not going to have blue eyes like those other pretty dogs I see. He will be special and have his nice little brown eyes. But a reddish brown seems very pleasing to hear right now...Maybe I'll go with that... ^^;;; I'm so bad with decisions. .............I need to start writing more correctly! O.O Look at all the lovely little mistakes! XD They will be fixed! I appreciate the help so much! *hugs* You're so helpful to meeeee! T^T I'm unworthy...rnrnHaha, 'Dattebayo, un!'? I love it! XD I love keeping all of the characters of Naruto in...ya know...Character! It just seems so much better that way...I hate the English version of Naruto...It makes me want to shove scissors in my ears...Yet, I still watch it (I'm too loyal...)..... Men hate asking for directions....It's just one of the little mysteries in life that will never be solved. I think they need to go get their ego checked, because it's starting to get a little too big. Men and their pride...*mumble* As for the other characters...I couldn't make Ino a pig because...well...Can you imagine her with a pig nose? It would just make it too easy for Sakura! And sadly..I don't think Chouji will fit in the story ^^; Don't kill me! I love him too! And Lee as a squirrel.....It was all too perfect in my mind...AND IT'S SO CUTE! XD Of course, little Naru and Sasu are the cutest! AVOID THE LIGHT NARUTO! It's neon and girly! >.<...One of them has to be Uke first...and I have such an evil plot in my head right now...*evil laugh* Yeah, it would be something like that. They're just too proud! I'll make it work though! SasuNaru's winning so far! But it could change! Muwahahahaha! *cough* Thanks for all the help and reviewing! It's so wonderful to have such support! *loves* ~lemon
Name: JustAnotherSoul (Signed) · Date: 21/04/08 - 05:31 pm · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
AHHHHH~HAHAHA~~!!!!!
....Sasuke was purring!...ahhh I want to hear that. XDDD;;;
.....A SQUIRREEL!!!???... I knew it.. I soo knew it.. I must be a mind reader. X__X
........
Why is there XXLEMONXX written all over?...
I keep expecting a lemon. O__o;;
Ahh, I like SasuNaru better, Since Naruto seems like the submissive type, whereas Sasuke is...the seme type.
:D WRRRITEEE ANOTHER CHAPIEE SOOON~~!
Author's Response: I wanna hear Sasuke purr too...(tape recorder please!!) Naruto's lucky...(cute little bastard) O.o Maybe you CAN read minds! Because I've been thinking that for the entire story now...And so far it's stuck. What else would Lee be? A frog? Yeah, sure, like that woul--(Like you didn't think about it too!) =.=;;; Haha...'XXXLEMONXXX' is my own little scene breaker thing. Lines were getting a bit..Boring. And I hate sticking with things for too long! The lemons will come...Just you wait. And if not...Expect more kiwis! SASUNARU! It shall be done! (Unless...Somethin' changes...) I'll get the next bit up soon! Thankies! ~lemonrn
Name: AikoMatsuo (Signed) · Date: 20/04/08 - 07:50 am · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
Haygreat love it, and i like either SasuNaru ot NaruSasu. great love the part about naruto and sasuke in the car it was so cute. love this story, the only emoution i have not used is cry. in this story does naruto have a bad past, becuse it he dos you could do somthing like someone from his past comes and does something or you could have that he past hauts him. love AikoMatsuo X
1000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000/10
Author's Response: Lol. Looks like that'll be the only vote for NaruSasu! (hopefully that changes a bit) I'll try to make the story more...Depressing. If not for myself, than for you! :] I aim to please! (why does that sound so perverted...?) I'm glad that you're enjoying it up to this point and I'll try harder! Thank you! I appreciate it! ~lemon
Name: AphoriditeRose (Signed) · Date: 20/04/08 - 07:07 am · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
THANKYOU! XD
Lol. :) And SasuNaru. Naruto's loud and like's to be in control, but he's clearly Sasuke's uke. x] Lol.
*ducks under table* Don't kill me, NaruSasu fans! ;0
Lol. Yuu make me chuckle, I have to say, from your authors note, you are clearly off your wagon. XD I LOVE YOU! Lol. :P This storys mega awesomeness! It makes me aww, and chuckle, hasn't made me cry yet.. Lol. Update soon! BYE!
Author's Response: Haha, that's so true! Sometimes I don't think Naruto can even top a tomato. He's just that naive. *raises brow* Off my wagon, eh? That sentence couldn't be more true. x] I'll keep the entertainment commin'! As long as I get MY entertainment...in the form of little things we call reviews. Like this lovely one right here. Thanks so much for fulfilling my craving! My face is cracking! XD *loves* I'll work extra hard now! (yeah, sure) =.=; ...Thank you so much for reading, rating, and reviewing! ~lemon
Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 20/04/08 - 03:09 am · For: Chapter Four: Time for School!
LOVE IT NEED MORE*-*
Author's Response: Thanks! It's in progress! ^^; Just don't know how fast it'll be up...Thanks for reviewing! ~lemonrn
Name: firecat (Anonymous) · Date: 18/04/08 - 05:27 pm · For: Chapter Three: Ah! I smell a kiwi!
hahahaha! kiwi lol. I actually really like this story. its fun. I could just picture kakashi going 'oh shit sasuke is going to rape him' haha. well I can't wait till naru goes to school. and when he's finally mature *bam* sasuke will have a field day and they will finally know more about mates first hand. its to bad sasuke doesn't like the idea of breeding because I sense mpreg coming on. this story is fun. i think naru should get along really well with iruka. iruka is very caring and naru is just dying for affection and praise. poor thing loked up like that and almost put down.
Author's Response: Well, this certainly made me smile! And it made me think more...Mpreg huh? I think I like the sound of that...*grin* This could definitely be an idea in the making. -Ahem- I'm glad you like the easy-goingness of this story! I wanted to make a fun non-dramatized story like this for a while now! And it just makes me all warm and fuzzy inside knowing that people are enjoying it! Especially you! I love the whole relationship Iruka and Naruto have too! So I just had to put some of it in here! And with everything that happened to Naruto in this story...Iruka HAD to be in it to make it better.rnrnI'm happy you're enjoying it so far! Thanks for reading! ~lemon
Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 18/04/08 - 01:00 pm · For: Chapter Three: Ah! I smell a kiwi!
love to read more. is Iurka more nrauto owner then Kakashi?
Author's Response: Um...I'm not really sure...I guess you could call it a joint thing because I don't think Kakashi could handle another pet on his own. Ahaha, so yeah, Iruka is more his owner. Thanks for the question and review! ~lemon