Reviews For Machination
Name: Satoyuki (Signed) · Date: 17/05/07 - 03:31 pm · For: Chapter Four Part Four
Very nice. That's an evil cliff hanger you threw out.
Author's Response: Just what I'm good at. ^^' Making you wait! Glad you enjoyed, SBP
Name: A Vampires Butterfly (Signed) · Date: 13/05/07 - 08:24 pm · For: Chapter Two Part Two
*blinks stupidly* Wow...the tension just totally got to me...My stupid sister just broke me out of the trance, but still this is so awesome! It just wraps itself around your mind till you can't think about anything else. Sorry if that sounded weird I am tired and even though I really really want to keep reading this I must go to bed and read more tomorrow. It is like forcing yourself to put down your favorite book at the best part. With much love, A Vampires Butterfly ^.^
Name: A Vampires Butterfly (Signed) · Date: 13/05/07 - 07:15 pm · For: Chapter Two Part One
This is so...I'm not sure just how to describe it...I love it...it is so well written and I wish I had better words to show how good it is and how much I like it. It is truly a diamond in a sea of stones. With much love, A Vampires Butterfly ^.^
Author's Response: Thank you very much! You make me want to update right now! Unfortunately, as it will entail in the last chapter, I can't... -.- but I will certainly let you know as soon as I do!
Name: A Vampires Butterfly (Signed) · Date: 13/05/07 - 06:34 pm · For: Chapter One Part Three
Wow...I have no idea how you can write like this. I know I can't. It all seems so planed and orderly, perfect and just well written. You obviously didn't write this on a hit of inspiration, no you probably have this story all planned out in your head you probably just need to get it typed up and posted. Sorry I just love analyzing people and reading about the authors through their stories. Wonderful job really! Your making me fall in love with Sasuke all over again, even Sakura is cool. With much love, A Vampires Butterfly ^.^
Author's Response: Thank you. I just contributed on a Round Robin on your story "New" in which I offered yet more advice... thank you very much for your review! And yes, as a matter of fact I do have it all planned out and completed, in fact. I am planning on writing a sequel, Invincible, in which will be even better than this one. ^^ Thank you again! SBP
Name: A Vampires Butterfly (Signed) · Date: 13/05/07 - 06:27 pm · For: Chapter One Part Two
Hehehe... I love this creative idea. Sasuke is hilarious! And a romantic cop. What more could you ask for? This idea is really an awesome one and I feel so bad for Naruto and from what I read in the summary this is going to get better and better. I'm off to read more! With much love, A Vampires Butterfly ^.^
Name: Akumu_Kage (Anonymous) · Date: 08/05/07 - 11:43 am · For: Chapter Four Part Two
Dumb ass there was a rag soaked in blood, you could have taken it with you!! You know with gaara's DNA!! To prove the blond is innoecent!!!*sighes and smacks author*
Author's Response: Uhh, you know, he's just trying to see if Gaara even exists... the rag could've been anything. He's not about to put it up for a DNA testing and anyway, he needs someone's to match it against. It wouldn't be Naruto's but he wouldn't know whose it was.
Name: YasuragiYakuzai (Anonymous) · Date: 06/05/07 - 02:13 am · For: Chapter Four Part Two
EEEP..i can't wait until you update this..^w^ Its awesome.Poor Sakura,but oh well.she was a whiney bitch in the anime..x] Good job though..^w^
Author's Response: Thank you. ^^ I'm writing the sequel now, it will be posted when Machination is complete, it's called Invincible so... stay tuned and thanks for reviewing! SBP
Name: Akumu_Kage (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/07 - 12:02 pm · For: Chapter Three Part Four
*Is horrifed and somehow exicted* You are sick!
Author's Response: U....mm... if you don't like it, you don't have to read it... or are you talking about the killing and not the yaoi? ^^ Thank you for reading, anyway... oO
Name: Akumu_Kage (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/07 - 11:37 am · For: Chapter Three Part Two
Naruto run!!! Prevy sasuke's on the way!!! (Poor Naruto when Gaara finds out!)
Name: Akumu_Kage (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/07 - 11:10 am · For: Chapter Two Part Four
*trying not to laugh...*Next?
Name: Akumu_Kage (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/07 - 08:10 am · For: Chapter Two Part One
Okay i read this much with out a word and now i'm very worried about you... *checks temp just to be safe.* next?
Name: Otahri (Signed) · Date: 28/04/07 - 09:32 am · For: Chapter Three Part Three
One thing I am gonna say about this fic that it is good. It has plot, and substance, but I think that you can actually expand it.
Give it more description and all. Make the surroundings seem more realistic.
Yeah, sure, you do have the basic narration needed for your readers to understand the current situation and stuffs like that, but I sort of felt that you...well, the way I would put it is that...I felt that the fic lacked feeling.
Like when it was with Sasuke and Sakura questioning Naruto. It could - should! - have been a very tense moment, where Naruto was on the edge, confused and don't really know what he should do. But I didn't get that kind of feeling at all as I read through.
But this fic of yours had several good points too. For one, I liked how Gaara was being so...forceful on Naruto, and I kind of...felt amused at how you portrayed Naruto as a timid fellow - so very different from his own self in the anime. But it was a refreshing one, because Naruto's appearance does remind me of a sweet, little child [holy...that blond kitsune really is going to kill me].
And Sasuke's and Sakura's interaction was good. Brilliant, really.
Not to mention that you knew your grounds well. It really came across as a scene from CSI and such, with you using all the professional jargons such as "rigor mortis" and stuffs.
I liked that. It showed that despite the lack of emotion, your fic had depth to it.
Keep it up, and perhaps...well, work on the emotion part. Good luck!
Name: Blood and Ink (Signed) · Date: 27/04/07 - 06:19 am · For: Chapter Three Part Three
This story just keep getting better and better.
Ooooh! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Name: Blood and Ink (Signed) · Date: 25/04/07 - 01:04 am · For: Chapter Three Part One
Wow. A very inpressive and intersting story. I can't wait to read more.
I would think that a story like this would be really difficult to write. Is it?
Author's Response: Umm, actually it kind of was. I just kept doggedly writing it and finally finished it. It took about a month to complete and is probably my third fic (out of dozens) that I've completed. But it was a lot of fun. Thank you for reviewing! SBP
Name: Snirp (Signed) · Date: 21/04/07 - 04:23 pm · For: Chapter Two Part One
I'm slightly amazed at the lack of reviews, however I must applaud you for your fabulous work. Your story is so well written and it definately makes me want to read more. I hope you update soon. I'm certainly looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you... So am I ><. I have updated, I hope you enjoy! Also I have added another story, Beneath the Cherry Blossoms. That one will take longer because it's not completed, unlike Machinations. Thank you for reviewing and enjoy the update!