Reviews For Reality Check
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/07/12 - 11:25 am · For: Chapter 6 - So Much Goddamn Talent
Back off, Kazou. No flirting with Masumi-chan (at least I'm guessing it's flirting since DDTD said it was. I can't tell most of the time XD)!
But I did like the added things at the bottom. It's what I was talking about before, but it seems you forget at times not everyone has your extensive knowledge of Japanese things.
I enjoyed this chapter and getting more insight on Masumi-chan's interesting mind. I always find it fun because in ways it's similar to mine, and in others it's unique.
With the entire Mariko thing, I found it very interesting and a very nice addition. I can understand Zabuza's point in not teaching her, yet I agree with Masumi on why it shouldn't matter. No two people are alike, no matter how many things may be similar about them. Especially outward appearance similarities. And thank you so much, Haku, for giving us her age XD.
This was another amazing and fun chapter, even if it was a bit more serious (Masumi's thoughts are just always fun). Great job, Niji-chan.
Author's Response: It was definitely flirting. He's a young teen. What else do you expect? Not that he has any chance with Masumi. XD Ah, yes, as I said before, I try to get end notes in on the cultural stuff, but I sometimes forget. I'm a go back and fix the jo one once I get home since I'm at the library right now. Do I know too much about Japanese culture? Hmmmm. Maybe. X3 You share aspects of your mind with Masumi? O_o You mean she's not a total space alien? XP I'm glad you took my coloring of Zabuza's past well. Little is known about it, so I figured I could do what I wanted with it as long as it wasn't too radical. And I wanted this because I want Masumi to have to teach herself swordsmanship. See ya next time! Out, Niji-chan TAT
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/07/12 - 08:18 am · For: Chapter 5 - Lacking Senses
Zabuza, if you aren't nicer to Masumi-chan, you'll have to deal with Ryu!
Ryu: I am NOT showing him that ability, Sasaui......
*sigh* Whatever, but Zabuza does need to be nicer.
I really liked this chapter. It went more in-depth with her emotions than the others, and it made me think of a scene I am thinking of for Final Wish. It was my favorite scene so far, seeing as it's the deepest we've seen into Masumi. I really enjoyed it, especially seeing as I liked her train of thought.
I also liked the fact she couldn't feel her chakra. It's different (I think - I've read very few "girl falls into the Naruroverse" stories XD). It also made a lot of sense.
Her random thing with the lollipops was very amusing. I enjoyed it, especially since I've always enjoyed stories where one character seems to have lollipops seeing as it's just funny they'd have so many. Speaking of, why does she have so many?
Author's Response: Awwww, you care about Masumi! Though Ryu should be more willing. X3 Don't mind Zabuza, though, Sasa-chan. Masumi rather enjoys her bantering and arguing with Zabuza. XP This is basically the introductory chapter for the more in-depth insights into Masumi's mind. As the story progresses, we get more and more of this. After all, this was my original intention with RC, but I felt that it would be better to ease into it a bit more, like they do with manga. The story gets serious once it's been established. Masumi has a, uh... interesting train of thought process. I hope you'll continue to like it in the future. Nah, the chakra thing's definitely different, as far as I can tell. I felt like it would add a good twist, though, and make her slightly less Mary-Sue. I enjoy taking overly done and or cliche setups and making them different, interesting, showing the world that cliches can still be good. Masumi happened to have bought the lollipops just before falling into the Narutoverse, but she does always carry a large number of them around. There will be days where she goes without eating any, but then she might go through 10 in a few hours. Masumi's lollipop habit was picked up from myself. I always have lollipops on hand. XP Thank ya for the review. Out, Niji-chan TAT
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/07/12 - 07:49 am · For: Chapter 4 - Eat, Sleep, and, Yes, Go to the Bathroom
Okay, Zabuza, even I know size doesn't matter. It just means you have to adapt your style rather than being unable. You're the sword master - you should know this.
I really found this interesting. I don't know why, but I laughed when you added the part of going to the bathroom. I just found it hilarious.
I know what Masumi means about hurting people she knows. It's strange, but I'm more willing to hit (though not as hard as I can) my friends than strangers. Strange, but true.
Ahh. Don't worry, Haku. I'll give you a hug *hugs Haku* Masumi-chan, cheer up Haku!
Just a little thing I thought you could do is add in the meanings of some of the Japanese words and terms you use, because it would make it easier for the reader rather than looking them up. I had to look up a jo. I know what a bo is, so at first I thought you had messed up until I looked it up and saw that a jo was a smaller bo.
Anyway, great chapter, Niji-chan.
P.S. Of course I'd want to be your friend. It's your weirdness that makes you so awesome.
Author's Response: Of course, there is a real reason behind Zabuza's reluctance, which I think you've already read by the time I'm answering this. :) I think maybe it's easier when you know them because you can know how they're likely to react, and there's a trust between you two maybe? I don't know, but it's definitely a whole lot easier when you know them. (Masumi: Why do I have to cheer him up? Tch.) Ah, put in meanings, yeah. I think I usually do put some in the chapter notes, though I sometimes forget, but maybe I should try describing the stuff better in the actual story. I'll keep that in mind, Sasa-chan. Thanks. And also thanks for the lovely review. I was amazed when I came on today and had THREE reviews from you! Out, Niji-chan TAT
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/07/12 - 01:41 pm · For: Chapter 3 - Following Zabuza's Schedule, Whether my Body Likes it or Not
Sheesh. I just remembered I'm behind in 1/2 Prince. I need to get caught up.
I really like Masumi (I'm sticking with this name since I'm used to it =P). She's really fun and seems like someone I would be friends with. I love seeing her annoy Zabuza. It's so funny. As for meditating, we do it at the start and end of Karate, only doing three inhales and exhales, and by the first inhale I'm distracted. My mind can only stop thinking in a few things - mostly fighting. I van understand why Masumi would find it so hard.
You kept Zabuza very well in character, and I'm curious about who whispered the pathetic thing. Hm....... Guess I'll just have to read. As for your training excercises...... I don't have to learn them, I have no own training machine, and he hurts.
Author's Response: I'm currently behind on the manhua, sadly. *insert sad face here* But I follow the online translation of the novel which is at about the same spot, maybe a little farther, so I still get my 1/2 Prince fix. Well, except that there are only a few chapters left of the series. *insert another sad face here* It's fine to use Masumi. Rather, it might get confusing if you use Audriana because Masumi refers to me as Audriana. XP (Masumi: You said you'd like to be friends with me last time, too. Are you serious? My weirdness doesn't sway you AT ALL? *is in awe and shock*) Whenever I try to meditate, I never get farther than four because as soon as I reach four I go on the whole death rant. When I was writing that scene I actually "meditated" myself to decide what to write. And doing a mantra other than the counting doesn't work for me either. I'm just not patient enough. Ah, but I think Masumi's training might be more difficult. Perhaps I should post her training regime on the forums for you to see? :3 Anywho, thanks for the review. Out, Niji-chan TAT
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 23/07/12 - 01:16 pm · For: Chapter 2 - Who's the Girl?
I don't know why, but I laughed when she started looking at the differences in her body. I just found it strangely hilarious.
I feel like Audriana and I would be friends. She's reacting kinda similar to how I would. That may just be because I am not afraid of anyone but my brother, though. Wow....... I never thought about if I were to fall into the Naruto world, but it's an entertaining thought!
Anyway, I really am starting to think DDTD has me hooked on Zabuza, because now I actually look forward to seeing him. His banter with Audrianna/Masumi was fun to read, and I laughed especially hard at the end.
The bonding between Masumi and Haku is kinda cute. I've always been a fan of him, so I'm glad to see him in this story, too. Yeah for Haku!
This was a fun chapter and an especially fun read. I am so glad I've finally gotten a chance to read this.
Author's Response: Strangely hilarious, nee? Fun! Ah, but seriously, we're so used to looking at anime all the time, but don't you think it would be really weird to be living it and seeing yourself in anime form? Did you hear that, Masumi? Sasa-chan wants to be your friend! (Audriana/Masumi: Really, Sasa-chan? You're not thrown off by my strangeness? O_o) Ah, I seem to recall you saying Haku was a favorite of yours. He's a favorite of mine, too, since he's just so adorable, so of course I really wanted to form a good sibling like relationship with he and Masumi. I'm glad you enjoy the banter with Zabuza as well seeing as those are my favorite parts our of EVERYTHING to write. :3 Thanks for the read and review, Sasa-chan. Out, Niji-chan TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 21/07/12 - 03:22 am · For: Chapter 16 - That Was All I Needed
Tche, my anguish being amusing. XD Exactly MY point! There's nothing wrong with calling them elderly if they're old since it means the same thing! And there's no difference between dead and passed on is there? ...-_- Miya-chi, immediately after hearing of a loved one's devise you'd commit murder? A messenger is a messenger I say! XD I'm stubborn too because it's fun sometimes to be. XD Yessss... gosh, yess dread. We shouldn't play the spelling game in messages or it would be grammar nazi overkill. T_T I like him quite a bit. I thought he was twelve when you first told me about him though. PDA? public affection? Oh, if it does that, then I will display quite a bit more. XD You're welcome, I enjoy making them. ^_^
16
Ah. Masumi has a crush on Masaru, I should have seen that one! It came like a curveball though.. Tche. So wait, what exactly is a crush? An intense feeling of like for someone? And do they really come easily?
Those are deep questions I doubt any fanfiction has asked before. In my opinion, it may be an alternate dimension from my own, but the Lord is still the Lord of all. He has created everything, and if this dimension exists, it's because He created it, and if I am there, it's because He sent me there. So...
Miya-chi - i can't believe I actually caught another mistake. *cries* Uh, it's here "There was a small clatter as wood his wood."
That was a nice prayer. *nods*
I have realized that Masumi-chan is a perfectionist.
Conversation without the awkwardness of having to converse. I need to find out how to do that, yes.
Haha, Shibata wanted a bento too, yes? And "Looks like I'll be preparing enough for three in the mornings." sounds extremely newly wed'ish. the irony! XD
Masumi is a scarily pessimistic person as far as our world goes. O_O Ah, but she's missing it. you only crave the food when you miss the place.
But Miya-chiiiii. *wails* I know people do that, accept the okay and walk away, but sometimes wouldn't they do that for the other person? Perhaps they would be afraid to pry into what could be a sitiuation they didn't want to talk about. When someone asks, "are you ok" the person recieving the answer has a decision; divulge or not. After that, any more questioning would feel like, to the questioner, being nosy and prying.... *reads on* wait, i think you already know all this.... -_-
Author's Response: No! Because they want to be "elderly" to avoid the term "old"! >:O Only if they they used a term like "passed away" or "passed on" or "not with us anymore". If they simply used the word 'dead', I wouldn't. ;) Wait. You thought Masaru was TWELVE!? *is in complete shock* Do I EVER write twelve-year-olds? For future reference, I only write children or late teens/adults, NOT preteens. =_= Mm. Arigato again for your stands. Now onto 16! Yes, you should have seen it coming. :3 Yup. Crushes, an admiration of, affection for, overly conscious attitude around a certain guy. A crush. I've always been a more boy crazy girl than most. I am easily drawn to guys, but I leave it at that. The romantic affection quickly passes for me. This might actually be a result of the time when I was trying to cut off any kind of emotion or emotional attachment to people. *shrugs* Ah, of course no one bothers to ask those questions in fanfictions. It makes everything too complicated, too difficult to write. Better to just avoid them. But Masumi's story is a serious one, and it demands the questions be asked. But I do agree with you on that. The Lord still clearly created that other dimension if it does exist, and if one was sent there it was because he had a reason for it. And I do think that being from this world I'd still follow the afterlife of this world. But I wanted to get people thinking on this, and Masumi is not as self-assured as I am, thus the intense questioning. Oh my goodness! My grammar is really bad lately! How could I make a spelling mistake two chapters in a row!? Oh, I hope there are none in ch 17. T_T Thank you. I worked hard on that prayer. And you've only JUST NOW realized Masumi's perfectionism? Her meticulous clothing choices, her being careful about her reactions and way of wording things, her THREE WATCHES and always labeling the EXACT time hadn't given it away already? So what exactly did bring you to this conclusion then? XP Uh, keep reading RC then! Masumi has many convos/situations like that I think! It's really a very comfortable thing once you get used to it! Yeah! Yes, she's missing it just a bit. After all, it is where she grew up. Yes, yes. I know these things about the okay, but as you stated earlier already, Masumi is a very pessimistic person (though she likes to think of herself as realistic), which partially comes from experience. And even she realizes this to an extent, but the truth of the matter is that more often than not, it's not the latter of the situations. It's just a sad truth. Anyway, thanks for the review and your thoughts. Out, Miya-chi TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 21/07/12 - 12:31 am · For: Chapter 15 - Immediate Pleasure or Lasting Affection?
Darn. I read this chapter and wrote a review and left it on the Notepad forgetting to post it. Darndarndarndarndarn.
Masumi-chan! You can't blame people for using those euphemisms, they're a way of coping, of making things gentler. Perhaps someone calling another person elderly is trying to speak to that person in a respectful way, or maybe that person doesn't like being called old. And when they use euphemisms to refer to their lost ones, arent't they like coping mechanisms? Everyone knows their dead, they do themselves. But it's easier to say passed away or passed on, and don't all the words mean the same thing in the end?
I like Masaru. XD Oh, and you misspelled a word. *grins teasingly* "Had this been a moth earlier" . XD
Oh, I can imagine him growing up with a dad like that. FUN
Woman slave! Will you be my woman slave Miya-chi? *realizes what it sounds like*...-_- I shall now slowly leave. Yes.
Oh. *drools over shops contents* WANT.
Ahh, i can see how Masaru has softened enough to actually banter with Masumi at the end of the first workday! Evil Masumi, leaving the sigh on Open!
-_- Seiichi-san, you naughty naughty boy! Stop teasing Masumi!
Oh. They do? I sincerely did not know that. I always thought it was a more modest concern in Japan.... -A- At least before the modern age?
Yeah. I also think dating can affect the rest of your life - a breakup can leave one heartbroken enough to do badly at school. T_T
It hurts Masumi-chan. I... I mean, I haven't had as many chances to go out there as you have (XD), but I know, and I also know as you do that it's worth it. So buck up! You're not alone! XD
Author's Response: lol That is somehow really entertaining. And so you. X3 We can blame them! Says me and Masumi. And that's my point! If they're old, they're old. Just accept it already! And if anyone ever tries to tell me that a loved one of mine "passed away", I will make them "pass away". Ah, but just so's you's know's, I'm very stubborn on this matter, and you will not be able to change my mind no matter what. *shrugs* Moth.... Must fix it immediately. =_= (disappears for a bit* Hmmmm. It was wrong online but correct on my notepad document. Puzzling.... You have this absolute dread feeling, right? That was how I felt the first time I realized what other people thought it sounded like. T_T But at least everyone knows me and knows what I mean, mm. Ah! Spelling mistake! You typed sigh instead of sign. XP Anyway, I'm glad you like Masaru. I personally quite love him. He's one of my favorites, though I think I've already said this before? Ah, I think long ago Japan/Asia in general may have been more modest, but then again so was Europe and America more modest back then. They focus more on the traditional thing to do. You just do this because it is how things are done. There's not as much of this right and wrong that we have in the West. Although, they are more modest publicly wise. They don't do PDA at ALL. It's just not done, ya know? A couple even having one little kiss in public is quite daring. But as long as it's behind closed doors and not being talked about by every person in the community, they don't really mind so much. It comforts me muchly to see your public display of support against dating. When nkbz read this chapter, there was quite the contradiction in our opinions. But it led to some good discussions, so I'm happy I put this in the chapter. XD Thank you for the lovely review. I always enjoy them. Out, Miya-chi TAT
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 15/07/12 - 07:26 pm · For: Chapter 16 - That Was All I Needed
I'm glad to see you've found your motivation to write again. And this was a really well written chapter, so you've made an impressive comeback.
You're adding more insight to Masumi's character. It really shows us a lot about her thoughts and opinions of people. It's a good way of showing her character.
Now that you're back in writing, I'm looking forward to more. Great work, Mimi-chan.
Author's Response: Thank you for the well wishes, Wolfy-chan! I was gone at camp all week, and didn't have time to write chapter 20 as I had hoped, so I may not update for a few more days since it's my rule not to post another chapter until I write another one. That way I always have a buffer and time to edit my stuff. I am slowly trying to make RC more serious, so look forward to a lot more of her thoughts in the future. I'll continue to work hard. Out, Mimi-chan TAT
Name: person (Anonymous) · Date: 10/07/12 - 07:29 pm · For: Chapter 16 - That Was All I Needed
awww where naruto?! but good work i m loving it. i cant stop reading....i blame u case my butt hurts now from sitting to long
Author's Response: Oooowh! A new reviewer! Did you just sit down and read all 16 chapters at once or something? That's so exciting! Well, I'm happy to tell you that I review weekly usually and occasionally twice a week. Actually, Naruto will make an appearance in an upcoming chapter, though it may not be enough to satisfy you. XD My goal in writing is to reach people and make them feel something, whether that is simply entertainment or something more, so I'm always really happy to get a new reader or reviewer because it means I've reached another person. I will continue to work hard, and thank you for the review. Out, Masumi-san TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 08/07/12 - 04:09 pm · For: Chapter 14 - I Was Not a Slave, Okay?
WHOA!! YOU UPDATED, WHOOAAA! Fun!
Tsk, but now im looking forward to when the play chap is coming. XD Darn... and i din't even notice them.... T_T Cuz you're scary! *nods* yepp, i stayed up until six and then slept at seven. :P Oh, good explanation, sank you! I didn't know that about tatami mats. An inch makes such a difference! *nods earnestly, grinning* Yes, guinea pig thingie!
Bwahaha, you did that to me too once, on Seeking Life! XD I DID! Ah, but you're gone, so i'll have to tell you later. T_T It's small, so you could either fix it or not. XP
14:
Ah! The acquanitce thing! I see that this was where Lindsey/Riley were going to show up. XD
Hat shop... Hat uniform... i wonder...
SKIP BEAT REFERENCE!!! Oh, and when they say things can't be worse...
OH, the image if the Third placing his hands together in a villianish manner - HILARIOUS! XD
Owwww, blackout. T_T
Mwah, i wonder how on earth you got kanji to work...
Uhmmmm, Miya-chi meets a Gintama lookalikd! O_O I need to meet this guy... ah.. Masaru,Masura, sounds -AH! Lightbulb moment! ITS MASARU! The guy you were talking about, i remember him! FUN!
OMC, he saw though her act. XD
I stared like an idiot with my mouth open at her uniform... bright orange jumpsuit...tan belt...poop hat... OMC
Waking up early is an amazing thing! Yes!
Peanut OUT!
Mwah,,, funnnn chapter. XD
Author's Response: Of course the inch makes a huge difference! *rolls eyes* Well, I'm glad I taught you something new with the tatami mats measurements. XD We just combine our conversations on everything without heed of the confusion we may or may not cause others. :3 Yes, the acquaintance thing was purposely put in there as a bit of foreshadowing or just plain irony to the appearance of Riley and Jedo, though now there's not as much point in it. *shrugs* Can't you just picture the hokage doing that and totally being all suspicious and whatnot? XP Blackout, hai. It will appear again. Make note of its appearances, nee? ;) Ah, ah, how did I get the kanji to work? Well, I can't actually type it with the keyboard and computer I have, but I can copy and paste, so that's how I did it. :D Oh, wow, your thoughts as you worked through who Masaru was were very entertaining for me. Look forward to seeing more of him, yeah? He shows up quite a bit. You like the uniform? I had fun designing it, though it took me FOREVER to finally decide on the hat. :3 Anywho, thank ya for the review! Out, Miya-chi TAT
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 08/07/12 - 11:54 am · For: Chapter 16 - That Was All I Needed
Gross
Author's Response: Gross? In what way was it gross, Shi-nii? O_o Was it too emotional for you? *is using a teasing voice* Anyway, thanks for the review as short as it was. XP Out, Masumi-san TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 04/07/12 - 11:04 pm · For: Chapter 13 - We're All Siblings Here, and That Includes You
Wan, i need to tell you something! Ah, i'll tell you at FFW...
REIKO-CHANNNN!!!
SEIIICHI-SANNNN!!!
Oho, seiichi-san was smart enough to avoid the "How old do i look" question!
Oh! Their mom!
RYOTA-KUNNNNNNNNN!
Ahh, the ending is slightly awkward. T_T I kind of understand that they laughed that she hadn't noticed that she'd been carrying her duffel around, but it still became awkward because of the abrupt ending?
Author's Response: Dude, I just finished responding to your other review, and I'm telling you, this was not here when I started responding to the other one! LOL *stares at Peanut's very first sentence/comment* You just HAD to tell me on the review that you were going to talk to me about something on FFW? That is so you. *rolls eyes* Of course! Cuz Seiichi's a genius! Didn't you know? XP *rereads the ending to see what Peanut means* Ah, I think I know what you mean. T_T I wonder if I should fix it.... Well, you seemed to enjoy finally seeing these guys in the actual story. XD Thank ya as always. Out, Miya-chi
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 04/07/12 - 06:33 am · For: Chapter 12 - BANZAI! Why?
10:Good rules! XD *stares at screen at Miya-chi's editing process* I'm... so ashamed Sensei. Forgive me. T_T* Sheesh, and you could've looked back on them now and realized what a dark, dark child you were... :P Yesss, they do, which makes you think that would give the mangaka's a bit of a clue~~~ that it's not realistic! *rolls eyes*
11:Yay! I love being extra fun! I thought he was nine or ten. :P are you going to do the play? *eyes sparkle* Well, who knows; maybe Masashi Kishimoto-san will do something with his unknown past in the future. IT WAS STILL SHORT!
Announcement:I was so overcome! T_T
--- chapter 12
well the little boring and the little exciting cancel each other out then, ne? XD
LOL Chapter name. XD
-_- I shall never ask you to personally serve the food you cook. ever. "dead or worse"... T_T
Me laughing six in the morning at "Please! Send me to the teenage girl immediately" is probably not healthy! XD
I love Konohamaru. He uses my catchphrase. BANZAI!
Miya-chi, i have no actual idea how big a tatami mat floor is, although i do know what they are. T_T I like the way you described the room, simply but you still painted a good picture. *takes notes*
Ehhhh, 149.5 centimeters converted is... *cheats* 4 feet and 8 inches! I need to see how tall my Obaasan is. XD
I just realized how lucky i am that you decided to experiment with me.... hmm... so glad you're more trustworthy now.
*SQUEALS*KAEEEEEEEDE-chan!!! FUN!
Author's Response: I edit quite a bit. XP Dark dark child. :3 I am definitely going to do the play I think. Ah, but I can put the date off for a while now with my new plot line. Mwahaha! Now, rereading this chapter (12), I realized that there were a lot of mistakes in grammar and whatnot and even one or two spelling errors. *look of horror* I must have been mega tired when I uploaded this or something. So I edited it! XP =_= Why? Why won't you ask me to serve the food personally? O_o I'm wondering, did you read this at 6 in the morning after staying up all night? Cuz that seems like probably that is the case. lol XP Ah ah, not even you know? Well, the Japanese don't measure their room/house sizes by foot or meter. They go by tatami mat, a tradition taken from times of old. They are approximately a little under 1m x 2m, though the size varies slightly by what region you are in. An 8 tatami mat room is 3.64m × 3.64m. Thank you for the compliment, by the way. I like trying to describe rooms only when appropriate and not overly much. If you're not careful, it can become like manga. T_T Nuh uh! It's 4ft 8.8in, so that's actually almost four foot NINE inches! >:O (Adrian: Because that makes soooo much more of a difference. *rolls eyes*) Wait. Experiment with you? Experiment with you on what? I am so lost. O_o Wait. Are you referring to the whole guinea pig with relationships thing? Anywho, thanks for the review! Out, Miya-chi
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 30/06/12 - 12:54 am · For: Chapter 11 - I'll Go on a Date With You...
To answer the question in your chapter notes.... YES, I DID. XD
Hum. Well, during those two seconds of weirdness, you could coincidentally be passed up for the modest modelling gig you were just going to be asked to do, the one that would change your life forever. *grin*
I like your interpretation of Konohamaru. He's so cute! And i see your experiance with little kids reflected well here. XD Ah, but Miya-chi, when you asked me for advice regarding that, i didn't realize he was seven.... hmmm...
*shakes head at Masumi, realizing now where Konohamaru gets a date from* Pooor pooor fool...
WHY DOTH CHAPTER END SO QUICKLY!?! I wonder what readers of MY chapters will say. T_T Yep. Meh, i don't know if i've asked you this before, but do youknow who Konohamaru's parents are...?
Author's Response: I've decided you're extra fun. XP Most people ignore my chapter notes even when I ask a question in them. You're actually responding to them! Eeeeh! But you know me a lot more! If you only knew what was in the story so far, would you have guessed it? *pouts* You just have to point out what damage could be done in those two seconds! *rolls her eyes* You didn't realize he was seven? O_o But what age could he be? You did know this was just before the manga debut since Zabuza was alive. Ha ha, but this is why I have to write a date chapter, and I have no idea what to do! Actually, I'm thinking of possibly doing a winter festival, but I'm already going to do a sakura viewing festival in the spring, so I'm a little hesitant on it. T_T Who Konohamaru's parents are....? O_o Does anyone know that? I think I had just assumed that he was an orphan or something since they were never mentioned. Or maybe that his whole family lived with the hokage. Because I remember seeing a picture where Konohamaru and the hokage were under a kotatsu one time as the chapter title page. T_T And chapter 11 was LONGER than chapter 10! Thanks for reviewing and mind my extremely long response! Out, Miya-chi
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 30/06/12 - 12:43 am · For: Chapter 10 - The Little Engine That Thinks He Can Often Becomes the Little Engine That Can't
I knew i'd read it before, i was reading it again to remember where i was! Yesss it does! So be happy! *shakes hand at Miya-chi in a scolding manner* I find it hilarious, Miya-chi, that you make sure to respond to everyone with their nickname for you when you can't remember their original username! LOL! And yes, i would be freaking out, or, laughing my head off because it's just SO COOL! WAH! I'll remind you 'bout the map; then I bet Teuchi san is the one person who watches out for her charms the most! XD
Okiiiiee chapter ten. LOL meh looooves the bribe in your chapter notes. EH? You referenced me! Hmmm... so what spoiler.... *reads on*
Meh, do you want me to point out spelling mistakes? *teasing grin* Well, there's one... wait, that's not a spelling mistake, that's a mark on my computer's screen... *pouts*
*stares at screen, mixed between hilarity and hilarity at your lack of sense of direction, also wondering how you go in the woods near your house without getting lost...*
*nods solemnly at the Masumi not truly being angry part. T_T*
AHHHHHH! 1/2 PRINCE REFERENCE!!! YATTAI!!! loooool i feel so sorry for the old man. XD
....send me a typed up copy of your revenge notebooks, pleas. *eyes sparkle*
Laughing out loud at "unnatural and unbalanced" chest in the middle of the night is not a good thing to be doing! I need to LOL face!
DARN! That ended too quickly!
Author's Response: It's my rule to sign with the nickname because they went to the trouble of giving it to me! Just like it's my rule to respond to every review no matter how tiny or rude it may be because they went to the trouble of writing it! >:O Teuchi is the best. :3 *goes back to read her chapter notes cuz thinks she knows what Peanut is talking about but is not completely sure* Ah, hai! That was the bribe I thought you were referencing! It totally is true, though, mm! Well, except that I still haven't read any of Wolfy-chan's stuff. T_T But with everyone else that's totally true! XD Like I would have spelling mistakes, Peanut! I'm the spelling and grammar nazi! Do you want to know how I assure no spelling mistakes? I go over my chapter countless times editing it. Then just before I upload I spell check it on Word (I write on Notepad). And then I go over it ANOTHER time just to make sure I get everything cuz Word isn't perfect and misses spelling errors sometimes. XP Once again, I'm dead serious. However, I'm not so prone to get lost in the woods. I get lost in town or on roads because everything looks the same then. T_T Everything looks COMPLETELY different in the woods! Don't feel sorry for the old man! He was being very dense and also trying to sell her food when she didn't want it! Although I too feel sorry for him at times. *is very thoughtful about this* Alas, I don't actually have the revenge notebooks anymore. I burned them. They were too dangerous for the outside world to see. ;) Hey! Gianourmous boobs do make you look unbalanced! Anime girls look unbalanced with those giant things! You were getting so used to my longer chapters, nee? Well, sadly for you, this is more the average length in my newer chapters. Actually, many are even smaller than that. *shrugs* Well, as always, thanks for the review, Peanut! Out, Miya-chi TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 28/06/12 - 03:41 pm · For: Chapter 9 - Most Birds Aren't Meant to Swim
FYI This review is my reactions written on notepad. :P
I think it's hilarious writing a drowning scene like that. I doubt anyone has EVER done that before; you'll see what my drowning scens are like. XP I looooove how cynical and hilarious it is.
WHOA! She keeps on dying, that's so interesting!
Good gracious, i think Masumi is the only one to confront such information so straight forwardedly. -_- *laughs*
Penguins are magnificent birds that fly through water.
I need this map that tells you where the clans are located!
Wan what a change from the girl who was talking with Teuchi! I wonder if Teuchi noticed the change in Masumi's personality?
Whoa, your chapters are longer than mine! O_O
Author's Response: Ah, you already read and reviewed this chapter before! *rolls eyes but is grinning* Guess it just means more reviews for me, nee? So you liked my drowning scene? I had a lot of fun writing that. I really tried to delve into what it would be like to experience that, and I realized that if I was in that position--and Masumi is based on me--I'd just be really fascinated by what everything looked like and the science of what it would feel like to slowly lose consciousness. :3 But Masumi is very straightforward in these types of situations and takes it head on instead of pointlessly stressing herself out. You'd probably be like totally freaking, though, nee? XP I'll get you a copy of the map in one of our messages, nee? And if I forget to, remind me, mm. I've got quite a bit of it memorized already. XD I really love the ramen bar scene as a backdrop for Masumi's antics because I really love to imagine the viewpoint of someone in Teuchi's position in any kind of restaurant. I mean, you get to see a bit of everyone's lives. You see who they really are, how they react, ect. And Teuchi probably knows Masumi the best because he sees just about all of her personalities. She has fun letting him see different aspects of her life. And once again, my response has dragged on forever. *rolls eyes* Out, Ummmm. What's your current nickname for me? O_o lol
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 22/04/12 - 08:31 am · For: Chapter 15 - Immediate Pleasure or Lasting Affection?
Can you not have immediate pleasure and lasting affection?
My hand gives me both.
You really took vows? I'm so interested now.
Author's Response: That and more. I guess you could say that I am a majorly ultra conservative, ya know? You can't have the best lasting affection God has in store for you and still have immediate pleasure. All these things with people now that won't be your future spouse taints the marriage, brings about insecurities, unanswered questions that you're never really sure if you want the answer to or not. You can't give your full heart to that person because so many bits and pieces have already been given away to other people. You can't tell me you haven't gone through a lot of pain from dating and whatnot. I was of that scene at one point myself, and I still have scars from it, probably always will. That's what a scar is, a wound that will never truly go away. And don't make crude comments. Anyway, thanks for the review, Buta-chi! Out, Masumi TAT
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 21/04/12 - 09:15 pm · For: Chapter 1 - You Can Prove Nothing
View no Jutsu!
Author's Response: Truly amazingness Buta-chi! Truly amazingness! Ha ha Thanks for the three worded review. It definitely brightened up a slightly gloomy night for me. Out, Masumi TAT
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/04/12 - 08:19 pm · For: Chapter 15 - Immediate Pleasure or Lasting Affection?
Whoa... Such a deep conversation... It really made me think for a bit. I really liked the way of thinking. You explained it all very well. But the best part was the last sentence because it really flipped everything around. So Masumi tells herself these thins but they don't reassure her all the time? How interesting...
I really enjoyed this chapter, Mimi-chan! The beginning was fun, and the ending was just very psychologically deep. Good job on this, Mimi-chan. Oh, and happy birthday! May you have many more to come in your lifetime!
Author's Response: I'm glad I was able to explain it properly. I wasn't completely sure if it would be understood very well. I actually wrote the conversation about the purity ring and stuff when we were still writing NEFN, but we never got far enough into the story to use it. When I was inserting it into this chapter I suddenly had the urge to add those last two paragraphs, but I was hesitant at first about putting the last sentence. It really is true, though. A few of my friends have taken the vow as far as me as well, for our first kiss to be at the altar, to not date, and it really is hard sometimes, for all of us. Like every girl we worry that maybe he'll never come, that we'll never find the man God has for us--but it is sometimes even more intense because we never get that comfort from a boyfriend and whatnot that many more girls do. We want to do this, and usually we can feel comfortable knowing that God will provide, but there's still the occasion that we don't trust God. We humans are very unloyal at times, just look to the account of the Jews and their golden calf for proof. They were God's chosen people and they still wanted a physical, present comfort there. And so in the end I decided to use it. Yup. Wow. What a long, drawn out explanation. O_o Thank ya for the review and the birthday wishes, Wolfy-chan. I really appreciate them. Out, Mimi-chan TAT
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/04/12 - 03:50 am · For: Chapter 14 - I Was Not a Slave, Okay?
Aww, I was mentioned :D Thank you for the lovely shoutout, Mimi-chan. But you deserve the many reviews.
I keep forgetting to bring this up because only recently did I discover the theme of this story, and I remember bringing it up a while back. SHE IS AN ACTRESS! I understand now! It's much clearer in this chapter, but I think I realized it a couple chapters ago too....
Not much else to say about this chapter. It was a transition installment, but it was still pretty interesting to read. And the way you wrote it was very good. Considering you didn't care much for this chapter, you still had your usual talent of setting up the scene and pushing things to happen. It seemed like a pretty eventful and descriptive chapter, so good job!
I am looking forward to 'the good stuff', as you called in the chapter notes. I'm assuming that means we'll get to see Masumi in her new job, which I'm eager to see. Good work on this chapter, Mimi-chan! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: YES!!!! She is an actress! It will definitely be made more obvious now as time goes on, though I also hope that it will be noticable when she is around the few people she doesn't fully act around. Zabuza and Haku are two of those people, though she still always does to an extent. I'm glad you found this chapter well written and interesting. I was just lagging so much in it. I've appeased myself by writing a few chapters of 'the good stuff' ahead of time. But that stuff doesn't show up until December in the story, and we're still stuck only half way through November! I actually know the exact date of each chapter, if you can believe that. For example, this chapter was November 17, and I knew that off the top of my head. O_o Next chapter does of course have her in her job, and I am looking forward to writing the dynamics between her and Masaru. I love him too much! Thank you so much for this uplifting review. Out, Mimi-chan TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 07/04/12 - 06:52 pm · For: Chapter 9 - Most Birds Aren't Meant to Swim
ohhhh BOY..... So the kage knows her? Seriously? hmmm.....
Ah, this chapter wasn't that descriptive, Uzurosechan, I think it would've been interesting to see the city from Audrianna's eyes.
Augh! You mentioned Kabuto, know I want to see him really bad!
Author's Response: Yes. Hmmmm.... No, this chapter wasn't too descriptive. It was my filler chapter! I hate writing traveling chapters! I avoid them at all cost! But I also had to get in the whole creepy death thing, so that's what I did. Ya. TAT I can see the city from her eyes! In my mind! If only I could put it on paper for you. O_o You want to see Kabuto? He is amazing, isn't he? But he won't show up for a little while more. Thank ya for all these reviews that I missed because I've been so absent these days! Out, UzuRose-chan TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 07/04/12 - 06:16 pm · For: Chapter 8 - Don't Look Back
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Author's Response: What? That's all I get? Well, I suppose that means I left you speechless. Woohoo! Didn't see that coming, did ya? No one did! Except Lindsey, but that's only because she already knew part of the plot. X3 Thank you for the review, anyway, Peanut, even if it was pretty quiet. Out, UzuRose-chan TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 07/04/12 - 05:59 pm · For: Chapter 7 - Why Is Everything I Own Called Obnoxious?
I'm both nervous and curious as to what Audrianna is going to get up to.... Hah! I can imagine Zabuza's reaction! And, btw, I really like the way you've portrayed Zabuza. Is it wierd that I can't imagine him having a wallet?
Ah, i was wondering. Where's Aidan!?
Author's Response: You'll see soon. As in next chapter. Which means you've already seen. X3 But, yes, yes yes yes. lolz Thank you for the compliment on writing Zabuza. He is one of my favorite characters to write. Riley as even dubbed him as "Ana's fanfiction character". I only wish he appeared in the story more! He had originally been meant to be a much more major character than he is. In NEFN he was going to be our sensei! Can you believe it? XP I can't completely imagine him having a wallet either, but he has to carry his money somehow right? And I'm having an even harder time imagining him with a purse! rofl Ah! Finally! Someone has noticed AND made comment to Adrian's disappearance! I've been waiting for that to happen for so long. Unfortunately for curious you, you won't find out for a loooong time. Did you notice how I used 4 there in long? Thank ya thank ya for the review! Out, UzuRose-chan TAT
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 05/04/12 - 10:48 am · For: Chapter 6 - So Much Goddamn Talent
That's hilarious! Does she really have that much talent? hah!
It's awesome how much you know about weopons and japanese foods. How did you learn about weapons? did you just do research?
And, I wanted to say, cuz I haven't been on FFW for a while, that I left a message on your profile. Basically, I can't access FFW at all cuz of some stuuuupid thing, so not for a couple of days.
Awesome chap! TT_TT why must school come in the way of reading more?
Author's Response: Well, Peanut, I here am a severe Japanese otaku. I know a lot about Japan and its culture. I even know the proper etiquette for going to the public baths there. X3 I actually didn't start researching weapons until I started writing fanfiction, though. Actually, here's proof that I am officially a sever Japan otaku. Last week I had a dream and two of the people in it were Japanese with Japanese that I didn't recognize. The next day I looked them up online and they were real names. I must have read them somewhere at some point and my subconscious remembered them! Well, I hadn't been on FFW for a while either. I'm gonna go update RC and then try to check FFW afterwards if I have time. Because school's favorite pastime is getting in the way of our joy! Thanks for the review. Out, UzuRose-chan TA
Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 31/03/12 - 12:05 pm · For: Chapter 1 - You Can Prove Nothing
I gotta admit...
Audri is 1 heck of a hyper active kid
-sweat drop-
anywhoos...
Nice start =D
Bt i gt kinda confused... Is adrian a real guy, or audri's imaginary friend..? =P
Loool...! XD 3 watches...??! Seriously...?! XD
tht one ws funny =D
dnt tel me u do tht irl(in real life) xP
as fr her entering a new world...
I think she didnt look ar surprisd as one would..
Bt thn again, its miya-chan we're talkin bout xD
i like how u takd da time to explain every detail... =D
awesome start to an epic story =D i cn tell ;)
is tht hinata...? =P
D=
m i nt ur brother...? =(
Author's Response: Ah! Ka-chan! You're reading my--ahem OUR story since Yuu-chan is now a co-author--story now! This is so exciting! Okay, so first comment. Yes, Audriana is very hyper, as am I. X3 And Audri? I'm kind of liking that shortcut for her name. XP Is Adrian a real guy or an imaginary friend? Isn't that a good question? Mwahaha! Well, he is in her head, so I guess you could kind of consider him an imaginary friend, but she never sees him in the real world like kids usually play with imaginary friend. When she talks to him, it's always in this giant white room inside of her mind. And, yes, watches. Seriously. It's a habit I've picked up along the way. I'm obsessed with time and find the tick tock of clocks very calming. I have like 5 or 6 clocks in my room, and they're all weird. One is even a teapot, and another is less than 2 inches tall. As for entering the new world, let's put it this way. Of course she is surprised, but she's trained herself to handle strange situations well, and she's sort of in shock? It'll sink in eventually. O_o Hinata? Not a bad guess. Read the next chapter to find out! And of course you're by big bro! But this was written back in August or September before I even knew you! And don't worry. Adrian does not exist in real life. He is only in the story. I am not that mental and crazy. And, wow, my response has gotten really long. O_o Okay, I'm gonna shut up now. Thanks so much for the review, Ka-oniichan! Out, Miya-chan TAT