Well, so far, this is absolutely amazing. As for separating, you can do things like ~~~~, ****, and different things similar. That's what most people do.

Anyway, I was kinda surprised when I was your story summary thing that you submitted for the When In Need II story. And the Hearts thing, it kinda reminds me of a combination of an original story I've created and a book I'm currently reading. It's not much like it, but the terms you use makes me think of it.

The characters are awesome (as well as the pictures. It surprises me how people can find such awesome pictures). I loved the beginning. By the way, no offense to how you usually write, but your writing here seemed better. Maybe it's just the spacing and stuff, though. Anyway, I can't wait to see where this goes. It seems awesome. Only one question for Akira: What's a Heart of Neon do/mean?

Author's Response: Thanks! Bye the way, I'm in the middle of writing a morning chapter for Next Generation, since I don't know if I can do attachments with the contacts thingy. Haha.rnrnrnThank you so much! I know you were surprised, I didn't expect you to not be surprised.rnrnAs for spacing, I tried to do better! Thank you, and I take no offense at all. You'll find out what Neon does soon enough.