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[Reviews - 5]Category: Alternate Universe & Crossovers, Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Itachi and Naruto
Characters: Haku, Temari, Tsunade, Itachi Uchiha, Naruto Uzumaki, Kabuto Yakushi, Ino Yamanaka
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Graphic lemon, Romance
Warnings: AU, OOC, Yaoi
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 26005 | Read count: 5901 [Report This]
Published: 01/12/06 | Updated: 16/01/08
Date: 10/09/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Arrival
Why isn't this story having more reviews, I don't understand it. It's very beautiful...
Rated: R18
[Reviews - 52]Category: Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Itachi and Naruto
Characters: Itachi Uchiha, Naruto Uzumaki
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 16 | Completed: No | Word count: 72282 | Read count: 17861 [Report This]
Published: 11/12/06 | Updated: 13/09/08
Date: 23/01/09 Title: Chapter 16: Possession
I absolutely adore this story...
Rated: R18
[Reviews - 70]SasuNaru…yaoi…m-preg...possibly OOC
Category: Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Fluff (Shonen-ai/Yaoi), Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Warned (Shonen-ai/Yaoi), Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Angst (Shonen-ai/Yaoi), Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Sasuke and Naruto
Characters: Konohamaru Sarutobi, Naruto Uzumaki, Pair KakaIruk, Pair SasuNaru, Sasuke Uchiha, Team Gai, Team Rookie Nine, Team Sand Siblings
Genres: Angst, Dark, Graphic lemon, Romance
Warnings: OOC, Sexual Themes, Yaoi
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 16 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 76883 | Read count: 28952 [Report This]
Published: 23/04/08 | Updated: 27/03/09
Date: 11/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Morning
Sasuke really remembered what they did that night when they were drunk??!!That was hilarious!They are so cute together,though...
The spell mistakes you maybe oversaw:
1.Yeh, it sucks that life is so cruel.-I think you wanted to write 'Yeah'.
2.“Love you, dobe,” ware the whispered words that made the jinchuuriki’s heart clench and his world spin…-maybe a 'were' ?
Date: 11/02/09 Title: Chapter 2: Camping
The two sentences that touched me the most are:'Hinata’s heart had plummeted a million miles at his words.',and 'She might have thought – told her self – before that she would get over this, but right now she thought she was dying.'...
I can't even imagine how she felt,I'm so sorry for her,I'm glad she 'found' Kiba.
I love it when you write 'opal eyes'-I've never read a description like that,it's really unique...
And then Sasuke's wandering around the Uchiha district...Oh,God,I actually hate Sasuke,but I felt so sorry for him as well...
'Mistakes':
1.“Kiba! Not bad thanks, you?-maybe-Not bad,thanks,you?...Those are just minor mistakes,nothing special...
2.'She let the tears roll her down face'-maybe-She let the tears roll down her face?
3.“Its Sakura-chan isn’t it?'-maybe-It's...
4.“Pfft, the usual; stoic, moody bastard hehe. Yeh he’s good.”-maybe-Yeah,he's good.
5.“I thought so. Say, How do you fancy coming for a week camping?”-maybe-Say,how do you...
6.“Yeh sure, one is fine',and,'“Yeh see you Naruto.”-in both sentences is 'Yeh' insted of 'Yeah'
7.'Rock-lee'-maybe-Lee
8.“Oh ok Naruto. -maybe-'Oh,ok,Naruto.'
9.“You sure are Naruto. Everything has turned out awesome now hasn’t it?” Naruto smiled at her words…”yeh, I guess it has.”-maybe-'You sure are,Naruto.',and,'Yeah' again.
Date: 11/02/09 Title: Chapter 3: Camping: day one
The conversation between Sakura and Ino was the top...definitely...I laughed my ass off at that! XD
Uuuuu~ the lemon was steamy...I wonder if Kakashi will comment in the morning *grin*
'Mistakes':
1.a ten hand reached out cautiously towards the creature almost afraid to startle the fragile insect.-maybe-a tan hand...
Date: 11/02/09 Title: Chapter 4: Camping: day two
Ooh...I almost began pouting at Sakura yelling at Lee...why is she so mean to him?*pout*
An even better description than 'opal eyes' is 'flamingo-haired kunoichi'...definitely unique...
What Naruto said to Iruka was absolutely true and wonderful,even if it came out a little bit harsh.
'Mistakes':
1.“I need to talk with you please” -maybe-'I need to talk with you,please.'
2.“Cause’ he’s a pervert?”-isn't it-'cause?
3.“Would you please just shut the fuck up a minute?”-shouldn't there be a 'for' between 'up' and 'a'?
4.Iruka smiled pulled Naruto into a hug.-maybe-Iruka smiled and pulled Naruto into a hug.
Date: 12/02/09 Title: Chapter 5: Camping: day three
OMG-I laughed my ass off as I read the drink-game!!!XDThat was a hell of a game-hilarious...hahahahaha...wonderul...!
P.S.Is that me or was Lee drinking at one point?!O.o Shouldn't he and Sakura be the ones not drinking?
'Mistakes':
1.“Hush, Kiba. Please don’t worry about him…everything will be fine! Believe it, Akamaru is strong and is not gunna go leaving you -maybe-there should be 'gonna'?
2.Sakura followed her best friend closely and dragged Rock lee into the market place also. -maybe-Rock Lee?
Author's Response: Yeah, Sakura wasn't drinking. Lee did drink and I think that's because I totaly forgot about him being mad when he drinks S= I think...I can't really remember though, it was ages ago that I wrote this chapter. Sorry about that hehe...
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Date: 12/02/09 Title: Chapter 6: Camping day four
The 'morning after' was very realistic...fantastic-to say at least-I could really imagine how they looked like.
Oh,Kyuubi looks so beautiful,and her clothes must be really wonderful as well...
'Mistakes':
1.“Well looked after? Yeh cause spewing my guts up is...-maybe-'yeah' again?
2.“Yeh. I suppose, I was afraid...-the same mistake again...
3.“Yeh but, it feels good in the sun like this. -again the same mistake...
4.A sob broke from the silver haired mans throat and-maybe-silver haired man's...
5.Kakashi is certainly hansom, perhaps even more-maybe-handsome?
6.“Hey Iruka” The Jounin said quietly as he separated fro his love.-maybe-"Hey,Iruka."The Jounin said quietly as he separated himself from his love.
7.Sasuke turned swiftly in the sleeping bag and sat up so that his face was millimeters away from the older mans.-maybe-Sasuke turned swiftly in the sleeping bag,and sat up so that his face was millimeters away from the older man's.
Date: 12/02/09 Title: Chapter 7: Camping: day five
There was an 'interesting' sentence when Naruto was giving Sasuke a blow-job in the cave:
He looked straight into Naruto’s gorgeous, sparkling blue eyes as his own member disappeared in and out of the blonde’s hot mouth.
I got all hot after that...seriously...;p *drooling*The whole scene was very well written,with many interesting details I mean,and the scene after Sasuke came seemed very realistic as well-maybe it's strange,but I like that scene even better than the blow-job,because it's 'wonderfully' written...And I also love seeing Sasuke comforting the blonde,'cause I love it when someone makes my little Naruto feel safe...X)
'Mistakes':
1.It was a sigh to see.-maybe-It was a sight to see.
2.“I can’t dobe.”-maybe-“I can’t,dobe.”
3.“Oh and why can’t the almighty Uchiha pick up a stick?...-maybe-“Oh,and why can’t the almighty Uchiha pick up a stick?-or-“Oh?And why can’t the almighty Uchiha pick up a stick?
4.“Oh gosh Sakura!-maybe-“Oh gosh,Sakura!
5.“I guess its just amazing;-maybe-“I guess it's just amazing;
6.“Oh! Yeh…it could be.”-'yeah'
7.“Yeh…and he happened to hang out with Neji a lot; in private.”-'yeah' again...
Date: 12/02/09 Title: Chapter 8: Long night
I also think that it isn't obvious that Naruto is pregnant...I mean-no one would be tipping at it...it's not obvious...
The scene in the hospital was so dramatic and sad at the same time,i...I really don't know what to say...I'm really overhalmed by it...
'He wondered if Naruto felt like this when Sasuke snapped at him.'-this sentence is very good...I loved it.
'Mistakes':
1...a leg thrown over Sasuke’s and his blond clad head resting against the ravens shoulder -...-maybe-...a leg thrown over Sasuke’s and his blond clad head resting against the raven's shoulder ...
2.“Yeh lets go.” Kiba gently pushed...-maybe-“Yeah,lets go.” Kiba gently pushed...
3.“Uhuh. And I keep acting weird...-maybe-“Uh-huh. And I keep acting weird....
4.“Oh…Kay."-maybe-“Oh…'kay."
5.“Yeh…we were drinking the night before so maybe…”-maybe-“Yeah…we were drinking the night before,so maybe…”
6....I dunno what she did to make him so horny but god!...-maybe-...I dunno what she did to make him so horny,but,God!...
Date: 14/02/09 Title: Chapter 9: An Interesting Discovery
I know it's a bit sad,but I laughed my ass off when Sasuke and Naruto were yelling at each other in the kitchen,and what for Kami's sake was Naruto eating there?!
The sentence Gaara said:
“He’s a beautiful baby. I love him. But I also hate him.”
It was very 'hard' and powerful...it left a great impression on me...Hell,everything-every single work he said-was true...
P.S.I love it when the two of them are having rough/hard/kinky sex...XD
P.S.Kaname...?Isn't Saukra's baby supposed to be Tifa? O.o
'Mistakes':
1....he could here Naruto in the bathroom,...-maybe-...he could hear Naruto in the bathroom,...
2.“Yeh.” They were having a...- 'Yeah'
3....unlocked it before swinging It open...-maybe-...unlocked it before swinging it open...
4.“No thanks ...-maybe-“No,thanks...
5. she certainly didn’t se anything wrong with the food.-maybe-she certainly didn’t see anything wrong with the food.
6.“I think you should leave.” Sasuke’s voice held no emotion but Tsunade could ...-maybe-“I think you should leave.” Sasuke’s voice held no emotion,but Tsunade could ...
7.as soon as he heard the door close behind her he let out breath he...-maybe-as soon as he heard the door close behind her,he let out breath he
8.streets of konohagakure. maybe-streets of Konohagakure.
9.over-dominant way sasuke acted...-over-dominant way Sasuke acted
10.Fuck me Sasuke!” -Fuck me, Sasuke!”
11., “there’s a good baby.", -“There’s a good baby."
Date: 14/02/09 Title: Chapter 11: What I must do...
Let me tell you this-I had a hard time returning on reading this chapter again after I read the part with the stupid/blind/egoistic/dumb fuck called Sasuke and that girl (I don't even want to remember her name).My whole excitement and the wish to read this story has completely vanished...
I want to be honest with you since the two of us began talking over mail,and you seem very nice,and it seems that you love the same type of stories I do,so...I want to be honest:If I weren't in love with Naruto,and if I wouldn't have the longing to see what's going to happen to my beloved blonde and his baby,I wouldn't continue reading this story.
Although I'm very disappointed,I'll continue reading it even if only for Naruto...that's all I got to say...
Author's Response: Yeah...I'm pretty sure that I lost allot of readers at this point in the story.
But you have to believe me when I say; not everything is as it seems!
I'm really glad that you haven't given up on it, because I'm sure you'll be very happy with how things turn out!
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Date: 17/02/09 Title: Chapter 13: Dawn
Ok,maybe I was wrong,but I was really sad and kinda pissed at Sasuke for doing that with Mijime...But (there's always a 'but',isn't there?)I'm still sad,because I have the feeling that Sasuke's feelings towards Mijime are real,and he actually lost his interest in the blonde,and lost all of his love he felt for him...that's what makes me sad...And when is Sasuke going to find out about the pregnancy?!
Author's Response:
C= I'm glad you're still reading.
Trust me, you'll be happy very soon.
And It might be a while before the pregnancy thing gets sortedout =P
...I know...I'm evil!
Xx..xX
Rated: PG
[Reviews - 2]Category: Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance > Top Pairings > Sasuke and Naruto
Characters: Naruto Uzumaki, Sasuke Uchiha
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 3107 | Read count: 2220 [Report This]
Published: 21/08/08 | Updated: 21/08/08
Date: 17/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I liked this story...I actually thought that it's gonna have a sad end,or that it will be a tragedy,but I was wrong as it seems...XD
However-I really liked it,and the last few sentences touched me in a special way-I got goos bumps all over my body...seriously O.o