i absolutely love these lists ^^ *two thumbs up*

-Yumi

Author's Response: Thanks! ^^ YAY TWO THUMBS!

Good, but some adjustments might want to be taken into consideration.

First, the paragraph beginnings of "I remember" may want to be re-worded. Talk perhaps in the past-tense, such as "it was" or "One summer I–" and the like.

Second, the beginning of the letter is a little too round-about. Kiba wants to let Hinata know about his feelings, and the details about the hornets is a tad detailed for what he's trying to say. You could mention it, but maybe not in so many words. Perhaps hint at all the times he got stung?

Third (and it may just be me), I don't understand what is the reason for what Kiba said about Akamaru on rainy days. It's a cute visual, but is almost like an afterthought there. If you wish to put this in, perhaps it needs to be in a different location? Or Maybe you should go into more detail of what Kiba was thinking?

Overall, a very good piece. I really like the ending!

- Yumi ^^

Author's Response: Very interesting points. I have to say, I wrote this with quite a bit of my own nostalgia mixed in.

Yeah... the beginnings can be a bit repetitive. What I meant to do was to emphasize reminiscence with the \"I remember\" beginnings, particularly to contrast with the aspect that these memories aren\'t coming back. Otherwise, I usually catch myself before I repeat something, or my beta-reader will. (The only thing is that I don\'t get one-shots like these beta-read.)

Your point about the roundabout aspect of the letter is understandable. As I\'ve said, I mixed my own nostalgia into this, and that might not have been the wisest thing to do. On the other hand, Kiba telling Hinata how he feels about her isn\'t the only point of the letter, either- I made the fondness with which he treats his memories of bygone summers quite an important subject in the story, in conjunction with that.

Lastly, well... the rain has this almost unconveyable aura about it that I can\'t really describe. I guess it\'s just how I look at it and feel about it.

Thanks for the feedback. I\'ll take these things into consideration in my future \"letter\" pieces.

Good, but I was slightly disturbed by the ending. 11-12 lines do not have the same rhythm as the rest of the poem, and it is painfully obvious once you get to the 13-14 lines. The image is done well, but perhaps the wording could use a slight tweaking. Also, the last line's question I feel is the wrong one to ask. A hero knows what he fights for, but perhaps why does he risk his own skin? "Why do they fight, when all ends in defeat?" ? Again, a wonderful piece with minor errors, in my opinion.

- Yumi

Author's Response: *sigh* Writing isn\'t easy for me without inspiration, it seems.

I wrote this one a while after I wrote the 1st one, and I will admit, it came out rather forced. What I aimed to do was to describe the viewpoint of a person whose loved one died in a heroic act that the person does not yet fully comprehend, yet it seems I didn\'t do it quite right. It does not reflect my views on the matter, however.

The other thing I\'d say is that, for poems, it seems that I should finish writing them in one sitting. I wrote the 1st part to this one, ran out of lines, and picked it up after about a month or so.

Well, I guess I just have to have inspiration, eh?

lol that was friggin' awesome! XD Rum. . . X3

- Yu-chan ^^

It's a beautiful songfic. It's all too sad that I can identify with this: breaking up even after you promised to wed. I tried not to listen to love songs; rather hate songs to keep me from feeling hurt. I'm sure I would have felt that there was only the decision that Shika made if I had done that.

Marvelous, deep feeling. 10/10

- Yumi

Author's Response: Thank you. To be honest, when I wrote this, I felt that I didn\'t quite do a good job, maybe having exaggerated the emotions involved. I won\'t consider this the best of my writing, but it seems that this has a quality above my own expectations for it.

I\'ve been trying to work on other songfics- particularly, a sequel to this. I hope I can do a good job on them. Thanks, once again.

Incredible. I love it! Keep up your wonderful writing!

- Yumi

Author's Response: Thanks. d^.^b Look foward to the next chapter.

omg, this is so awesome! XD I don't normally read OC's, but this looked WAAAAY too good to pass up, and I'm glad I didn't!! ^^ Noa is pure awesomeness, and I truly enjoy the bashing of Sasuke-fangirls. X3

By all means! Continue writing this!

- Yumi ^___^

Author's Response: Bashing Sasuke-fangirls is what I was born to do