G'day BlazeOfBlades! Let's have a lot at Naruto: My Way. My first suggestion is to align to the left as it's standard formatting and will make for easy reading and might draw in more reviewers. A few more formatting things if I could mention is to beware the use of all capitals, (such as NINE TAILED FOX) it's commonly used to simulate a written message, such as a sign or a letter where as italics adds more emphasis or tone. For example whilst reading having it in capitals is like have a soft, spoken tone suddenly burst into excited shouting and go quiet again, where as italics would make it sound like a sinister emphasis.

I do like the scene splits though, nice and creative and the descriptions of Kyubei and him thrashing around and the present tense really adds to the excitement. A bit more paragraphing and length could have made it even better. Remember one topic = one paragraph so a new line could have started at -This Evil- and 'Ninja from the village'. See how one talks about Kyubei and the next talks about the Ninja, thus a new line. However I don't think the ---- is needed because it's still essentially the same scene. It's only when there's a completely new change of scene that one would be needed.

Ahh, some great description, especially describing The Fourth however I do see capitalisation errors that really take away from the excitement, it's like hitting a speedbump at a hundred kilometres and hour. All that description and tension built up, immersing ourselves in the scene and then we see something like 'fourth' or 'konoha', names that require capitalisation, and it jolts us out of the daydream.

Your action scenes are fantastic, wonderfully dynamic with great detail but unfortunetly the paragraphing and punctuation is a real downfall. I love it, but I emphasis the necessity of rereading. It will pick up all those typos and will really make that scene a real blast! Things like 'use's' should be 'uses'. The imagery is perfect, especially The Third as he carries the child through the smoke. Brilliant! 'Shrinking pillar of light, that's just amazing.

I emjoyed that so much, if you could just remove the centre alignment, reread for typos and work on the paragraphing it be brilliant.

Author's Response: wow thanksrnthis is why i want alot of reviewsrnthat way i can work the little things out and make the story better all aroundrni had better remember all of this for the next chapter