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The Original Naruto Fanfic Archive

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An area to submit intelligent essays debating topics about the Naruto Universe and writing tutorial submissions.
 
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Any Naruto fanfiction focused without romantic orientation, on a canon character in the current Naruto Universe.
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Self-evident
 
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Any Naruto fanfiction with the main plot orientating around male same sex couples.
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Any fic with no real plot and humor based. Doesn't require correct spelling, paragraphing or punctuation but it's a very good idea.
 
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Any Naruto fanfiction with the main plot orientating around female same sex couples.
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Reviews For A Snake's Tale

Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/09/12 - 07:15 am · For: Prologue
What? You're just going to leave it there? You meanie! How dare you? I was getting drawn in with the creepiness, then there was nothing left to read T_T.

Saori seems interesting, and for some reason reminds me a bit of Aiko. I'm not sure why, though. You have any ideas? I am eager to learn more about her.

A man is following her? Stalker!!!! Or serial killer! Or some other type of creeper person! I ran out of titles, so I just said whatever XD. Now I really want to see what's going on. Some force pulling him back, eh O_o? Gah, how dare you leave it there T_T.

Great start with this, even if it was a bit short and possibly rushed. I'm a little border line on the rushes part. But I really loved it and can't wait for more.

Author's Response: haha! That was hilarious to read! Sorry, has it enticed you to read more? XD Really? She reminds you of Aiko? Lol, i've been comparing her to Aiko all day since reading this review. I have no idea! If you get any, tell me! Stalker or serial killer! Good guesses! Almost close. Haha, the force! IT IS WITH SAORI!! Yeah, I'm sorry it was rushed. I've gone over it and have absolutely no idea how to fix that now, so I plan on going back after some time and looking it over with fresh eyes and seeing if I can fix it then. Thank you for the awesome review Brekky-chan! It was amazing finding a randomly new review. XD


Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 28/08/12 - 01:44 pm · For: Prologue
Ah what a great start. Not much going on but it was good! I'm very intrigued on what's going on. Not much else to say but good job, can't wait to see the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for that, Zhake san! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing, that we really appreciate it!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 28/08/12 - 07:40 am · For: Prologue
Whoa, was definitely not expecting you two to get together to write a story. That's kinda freaky O_O

Anyway...

...she ran to the stairs and hissed dup at them – “Quiet!” Umm... this should be up?

“I’m ready. Cut me up!” Okay, I feel almost dumb for asking, but what does this mean?

bus she had the ladle and it stung This should be 'but'?

This whole chapter was pretty short and, to me, seemed a bit choppy and rushed. Could just be me, seeing as I'm eating, listening to music, and reading this at the same time. But I almost didn't understand the first time I read it how the plate didn't fall or how the guy was jerked back. There wasn't much to really describe what was going on and I'm guessing you're leaving it as a sense of mystery with this girl's power perhaps? But it was still a bit difficult for me to follow such a short chapter because everything moved too fast.

As of now, there isn't much for me to go off of, so I don't know if I enjoy it or not just yet. But I'll definitely keep reading when you guys update. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Author's Response: Haha, right? XD Thank youuuuu for these. I reread and rewrote the chapter in accordance to your review and found some more thing I missed. I added more description and cleaned out the messy parts. "I'm ready. Cut me up!" was a very last minute addition that on second glance doesn't make alot of sense. She's saying it in response to her brothers saying she's "breakfast". XD Alsooo, the plate did fall. I made that more clear now, and I added more description to the guy jerking back. I made a mistake in making this so undescriptive - i meant for it to be short and sweet, like a prologue is supposed to be? I guess I didn't quite accomplish that. I'm glad you'll continue reading! If you've noticed anything else or if you notice anything else, do tell. Thanks for reading and for the amazing review!


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