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Reviews For All Alone Together

Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/06/12 - 04:53 pm · For: Foul Transformation
There are a lot of grammar issues in this, such as punctuation, capitalization, and verb tense usage. And the beginning narration didn't really seem to flow right with the story.

But other than these nitpicks, I am really interested with this creative angle. The whole thing with the wolf pack seems rather interesting, though that could be because I love wolves XD

Anyway, this is an interesting start to the story, I wonder where it will go. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: I tried to edit ths but as you can tell... i suck royally at it but i am trying. and thank you for the review silverwolf1213


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/06/12 - 02:15 pm · For: Escape From Death
I'm going to agree with everything Sasaui said in terms of mistakes. It's not very long, so I can't really see much else to nitpick :P The only thing I wonder about is that a stick was able to puncture a wolf that badly? Eh... I'm not so sure, but then, I've never seen it happen or seen it not happen, so.... Also, I'm surprised the girl is still injured and didn't try to continue moving. Or at least attempt to fix that leg.

Your writing is pretty good. As I said, there's not much to really go off of, but what is here is pretty good so far. There were a couple times you misspelled some things, like when you meant 'tired', you put 'tried'. Little things. This is interesting, and I do wonder what is going to happen. I look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: thank you so much for the review. they mean a lot to me. i hope i'm able to make my writing better. i'm rewriting this chapter at the moment. hope you like the chapters i'll put later one this month (not sure when is the next one but its getting there)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/06/12 - 09:01 am · For: Escape From Death
Well, first, the bad. Near the end, you started missing a lot of places where capilization was needed. And the other thing was that the final sentence of the first paragraph just didn't seem written right. It seemed as if you ended it too soon. Also, and this is kinda picky, but it seems at times the topic changes and you keep the same paragraph. Such as in the first paragraph, you go from describing a girl to a wolf suddenly being there. In this situation, there can also be more description. Also I believe you could have did a little more description with the emotions, something this seemed to lack.

Otherwise I loved it. It was a really great intro. Sorry if the first part seem picky, but I'm just trying to help. It was a really enjoyable read and has me hooked. I really like wolves, so that also drew in my enjoyment. Poor guy got hurt. And so did the girl. Anyway, I can't wait for more bit sounds very interesting. Great job, SoulEater.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I tried to make this so people can actully read it and review instead of glancing at it then leaving. Once i'm out of school, which is in a few days, I'm planning to fix this chapter and hopely add in two more. both of them explaining the pup's past and the silver haired girl. I might change the point of view as well. SoulReaper13


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