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Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 18/06/12 - 08:02 am · For: Epilogue
Ryu: Uh, please give Sasaui a second. She's off in the corner crying. *five minutes later*. Now she sharpening her scy- No! Sasaui, put it down! You cannot kill Danzo!

*ten minutes of fighting later*

Okay, apparently I am not allowed to kill Danzo, or poke out every last one of his eyes. So, I'll just settle with a review.

The overall story was great. I really enjoyed it. The second I saw there might be a sequel I wanted to tell Ryu to go break them out for it. It was a great story, and it definitely deserves a sequel. Though that is all up to you guys.

I am really sad that both Hayai and Gatsuuga met bad endings. I hope like crazy that things will work out for them somehow. I had really bonded with these characters.

All I have left to say is you two did a fantastic job and definitely deserve all the love and reviews this story has gotten.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, and sorry (maybe we're not) for pulling on your emotions, but it's what this story is. Just crazy. Anyways, as far as a sequel goes it will probably take some time, but it very well may happen. Who knows. Thanks for reading!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 18/06/12 - 07:47 am · For: Riders of the Apocalypse
Wow. Just wow........

THEY ARE FINALLY DEAD!!!!!!!

That was a great battle. I can't believe Hoshi would pull such a trick. Well, I guess I can, but you know what I mean. That was just wrong. But in the end, Hayai killed her. And Gatsuuga had an epic fight of his own. Shira so deserved what she got.

Wait wait wait. He's still going crazy? Nuh Uh! That's not allowed either! No no no! I already had to deal with Shizake dying. I don't want to see Hayai go insane.

Is it bad that I laughed at the title? Your really stuck on the four horseman thing, huh?

Author's Response: Epic fights huh? Hope it wasn't too gruesome for ya. Thought he would be getting better? Nope haha Haha sure? I'm lovin the four horsemen right now Thanks for the review :) I'm glad you enjoyed the story and it's entirety.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/06/12 - 06:14 pm · For: Epilogue
T_T Oh my god... What the heck?! Nothing worked out for them! Gatsuuga is in prison, and Hayai is labeled as insane! This sucks! T_T Not the story, I mean the way things happened in the end....

*sigh* I mean, I know there aren't always happy endings. It was great that they completed the mission, but still, I guess it would have been great to know that those two had a somewhat happy ending after the mission.

You both did really great with this story. Everything was completely original and you made a great story. I enjoyed reading this from beginning to end. I'm sad to see it's over, but it was a really good read nonetheless. Great job guys! You both work really well together.

Author's Response: Thank you for enjoying our story!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/06/12 - 06:01 pm · For: Riders of the Apocalypse
Are you kidding me?! Hayai and Gatsuuga kill those monsters, and Hayai is still losing his mind?! This is terrible! Omg T_T

The fight was so epic though! I loved how both parts went. I really enjoyed the intense epicness of it all XD I'm still really upset about Hayai though... Hopefully, the last chapter will tie it all up for me.

Good job on this, Shizake-san! This was a great and epic installment. The final battle was great.

Author's Response: It was a pretty messed up battle in terms of emotion Haha I hope it wasn't too gruesome for you ;) Thanks for the review :)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 16/06/12 - 06:42 am · For: Martyrdom
No. No no no no no. They are not allowed to die. I refuse. I will come in there and kick their butts if they die. No martyrs allowed on here!

Okay, now that my panic attack is out of the way, this was a really good chapter that has me on the edge for the conclusion. I must know what's going to happen. I want to see the fight!

The fact they made Kakashi and Asuma leave is probably one of my favorite things here. It shows just how noble the two of them are. I love it! Great job on this. I can't wait for Itoko-san's update.

Author's Response: Ahh, so you a little tense for what's going to happen? Up next will be a great fight, so get ready!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/06/12 - 05:06 am · For: Martyrdom
Omg, it is almost over O_O This is crazy! Those two are both suicidal! They can't die! I don't want them to! Oh my gosh T_T

I am really looking forward to the fight. I don't want anyone to get hurt, but I still want epicness :D

Good setup for the showdown, Hazard-san! I'm looking forward to seeing how this story ends!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it, and it's supposed to bother you a bit, haha.Glad you like the setup, and the battle will be great as well!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/06/12 - 12:41 pm · For: Pitch Black
I feel worse for Hayai the more I read about him. The poor guy is being tortured by this. I hope that after a while he'll be okay.

Sheesh. Those blackouts are going to be a real pain and I have a bad feeling it's going to screw things up for them.

I can't wait to read more of this. I'm so very excited. And sorry, but no-can-do on the banner. Think you could ask Yuumai or DDTD? They're both great artists.

Author's Response: It comes with the business you know? Blackouts are indeed bad...haha I asked DDTD so maybe she'll come through. Hopefully. haha Thanks for the review!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 11/06/12 - 12:13 pm · For: Voodoo
Darn it! More things making my imagination go wild. Now I'm thinking he's under that puppet jutsu spell. Stop fueling my imagination!

Anyway, great chapter. It was rather twisted, but I enjoyed it. Poor old man. I feel bad for him, being the one to die like that.

Oh man! Where is Hayai? Great, more wood in the flame of my imagination. I just told you to stop that! *sigh* Now I have to go read more before my brain explodes.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/06/12 - 06:09 pm · For: Pitch Black
Hayai should have just gotten rid of the rogue gang's boss for good. Would have knocked one thing off their list.

Hmm, now that they're getting ready to strike... I wonder how it will all go O_O I'm kinda scared for all of them...

Nice update, Shizake-nii-san! Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: True. But with the place loaded with other rogue's that wouldn't of gone down well. Plus with his shoulder and all :P Hopefully you'll like the final confrontation Thanks for the review :)


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/06/12 - 03:38 am · For: Voodoo
What?! That's... That's just sick! I feel so bad for that man... I can't believe it was Shira and Hoshi all this time, it just feels so wrong to see them so evil T_T

Ohmygosh, where is Hayai?! Please don't tell me he was captured! I think I might just start sobbing XP

Great chapter though, Hazard-san! Evil and twisted and suspenseful, but that's what makes awesome installments XD Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you, I aim to disgust and please all at the same time :D and it's getting down to the finale. Just going to get more tense from here on out.


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 02/06/12 - 06:43 pm · For: Unsettling
Oh phew, no panic attack in this one... I really do feel for Hayai, I worry for him when he takes those pills. And since Gatsuuga said Hayai was the one to hurt Kurenai... well... these pills can't be good for him.

The suspense is killing me, it really is. I want to know what's going on! This storm and the monster freaking everyone out, it's terrifying! And I want to know how it all plays out!

Awesome job on this, Shizake! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Most definitely bad. ha All I can say is...Shit is about to go down. Thanks for the review :)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 02/06/12 - 06:22 am · For: Unsettling
Ahh. They don't know Jack? But he's such a great guy. Sorry. I just had to do it XD.

Anyway, this was a great chapter. I can't believe that Gatsuuga gave him another half-pill. Then again, if his withdraw is what caused the blackout, I guess it is needed. Though it still seems like something more to me. That's probably just my imagination running wild, though.

I feel really bad for Hayai. This is really torturing him. I hope that he can find another way to cope besides the pills. Those seem to be doing more harm than good.

Great chapter, Itoko-san. I really enjoyed it, and I can't wait for Hazard's update!

Author's Response: *facepalm* Well at least Hayai is weening the stuff. Haha i dunoooo about your imagination :D We'll just have to see. Thanks for the review, glad you liked!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/05/12 - 02:00 pm · For: Boiling Point
For some reason, I'm leaning more toward possession by the demon, but that's probably just my over-active imagination =P.

This was a really good and surprising chapter with an interesting twist. I can't wait to see where this will lead, because it does look really bad for Hayai. I can't wait for the next chapter! This one was great!

Author's Response: Thanks for your support! The story will most likely be winding down soon, but it will definitely have a few more twists!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 29/05/12 - 01:50 pm · For: Face Your Fears
I noticed at first you said that they had to meet at 5, so that's a mistake that really stuck with me. If I saw any others, I've already forgot about them.

I feel bad for Hayai, seeing the events taking such a terrible effect on him. I hope that he can find another way to cope rather than the pills. I can already imagine that going in a bad direction. And I like to see the emotion in Hayai. It makes me glad he was kicked out of ROOT.

Author's Response: The Kakashi be there at 5 was a being late joke by the Hokage, so it was intentional. Glad you like it so far!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/05/12 - 07:20 am · For: Boiling Point
O_O Oh my gosh, Hayai hurt Kurenai? Those pills are dangerous... This isn't good... Really not good...

The suspense is killing me! Gah! I need to know what happens! Good job on this chapter though, it was awesome!

Author's Response: It definitely isn't lol Haha glad to see you liked it, thanks for the review!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/05/12 - 07:11 am · For: Face Your Fears
I really feel so bad for Hayai. He is taking this whole ordeal the hardest. It's sad to see him so freaked out. I hope he doesn't get dependent on those pills... Or worse, what if the pills affect his ability to fight? O_o

Good job on this chapter! The emotion was really well portrayed in this one.

Author's Response: Like Gatsuuga stated. This insanity comes with the territory. Hopefully Hayai pulls through. Thank you :)


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 28/05/12 - 02:12 pm · For: Overcast
I was wanting to defend Gatsuuga through that entire chapter. I feel bad for the poor guy. I mean, if the Hokage trusts him, why can't they? It's not like he was put away for a genocide of Leaf citizens. Seriously, they were being buttholes.

This was a really good chapter. It made me realize how much I like Gatsuuga. I hope he can feel better (mentally). And I'm starting to be happy Hayai's his partner. It means someone will be there that doesn't deem him a complete lunatic that will turn and kill them all.

Hehe. Kakashi has to be there at five. Hehehe.

Author's Response: Well that's just the angst between characters, and peoples reputations coming into play. Glad you liked it, and the second part of the mission will be intersting for sure.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 28/05/12 - 01:59 pm · For: Aggregation
Hm.... The choice of characters to go along was a bit predictable (Sorry if that seems picky. I don't know why, but it just stood out to me. Maybe I'm just used to the characters in this being ocs) and there were mistakes, but that's mostly it for the bad.

This chapter was good and really makes me feel bad for Hayai. Poor guy is figuring out just how hard it is to be a shinobi. Then again, since when was reading easy-going stories fun? This was a great update, and I can't wait to read what will happen when they return.

Author's Response: Eh. I didn't want to make a whole OC team. too much work lol. Yup! Being a ninja is never easy. I'm glad you liked.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 28/05/12 - 01:51 pm · For: Only Mortal
Ah crap. Another guess proven right. I can't believe those two were the true bad guys.

Really, I don't see how anyone could hate this chapter. It was really quite amazing with a great twist. I just feel bad since it seems the job is also starting to tear Hayai apart =(


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 26/05/12 - 07:15 pm · For: Confrontation
Holy snot face. I was hoping when I saw that it was a kid, it was a random kid. Apparently not..... Crap. Now I keep on thinking of him reading her the bed time story and I want to cry.

This was an amazing chapter. I absolutely loved it. This chapter was really surprising, and, in my case of creating scenes in my head, painful. Wow. I just can't believe it's Hoshi......

Author's Response: So glad you liked our little twist we did there! I'd like to say we did that on purpose with the build up to the reveal of Hoshi's true nature, just to make it crazy. More to come and thanks for the review!!!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 23/05/12 - 07:37 am · For: Overcast
Haha, my favorite part was when Hiruzen told Kakashi to get to the gates at 5. Oh, Kakashi...

I kinda feel bad for Gatsuuga because everyone thinks he's a lunatic. Even if he kinda is, he's still a Leaf shinobi.

I'm looking forward to the regroup and the next part of the mission! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Well that kind of reputation has drawbacks, and one is people will think you're completely psycho(even if true). Glad you liked it and the mission should get quite interesting!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 22/05/12 - 07:41 am · For: Aggregation
Aww, I feel so bad for Hayai... He seems so traumatized at this point. And he's going back out? That must be frightening...

Good job on this, Nii-san! You did well with showing Hayai's feelings on the whole issue. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: At least they have back up. Thanks :)


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 20/05/12 - 12:17 pm · For: Only Mortal
I loved it. I think I kinda expected Shira to be a monster or something after seeig what happened with Hoshi. It's just so upsetting, I quite liked them T_T

Good plot twist here, Hazard-san! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank ya! I thought it was a bit of a reach, but glad it turned out well. It's only going to get more interesting from here on out!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/05/12 - 09:30 am · For: Confrontation
Gah, the minute you mentioned the monster was a child, Hoshi entered my mind. I'm so upset that I was right! T_T

Ah, I don't know what else to say! This whole thing is just mind-blowingly insane... But I want to read more! Good job on this, Shizake!

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you liked.

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you liked.


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 08/05/12 - 03:50 pm · For: Meet n Greet: The First Mission
Hi Zhake-san!
I like the way you guys portrayed both Gatsuuga and Hayai. Their relationship is sure to get only more interesting from now on. I also realized something. The thing with dialogue, is that you guys use too many dialogue tags like "replied and stated".when writing dialogue, you guys don't need to find alternate adjectives for "said". These are called dialogue tags - here's a site that helps with this a lot: http://www.fiction-writers-mentor.com/dialogue-tags.html
Awesome chapter. onwards!

Author's Response: Thanks for the pointers. This story is to help get my footing for this style. I'll be working out the kinks as I go along.


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