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Reviews For Neko

Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 23/04/12 - 08:01 pm · For: How Weird Can This Day Get?!
That's quite interesting, that everyone closes shop early because of the massacre. It makes a lot of sense and is well thought out. Although Iruka's character seemed a little stiff, ooc, this chapter was interesting. You've got great description, and your character stays in the first person narrative nicely. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks! Sorry about Iruka, though. I'm not used to his character yet... ^_^"


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 21/04/12 - 12:39 pm · For: How Weird Can This Day Get?!
Interesting, so she does have momentary flashes of memory. I wonder why she remembers certain things, like what she knows about Sasuke and the Uchiha. That is so peculiar...

Nice job on this though. Your writing definitely has an easy flow to it, which I like. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 27/03/12 - 11:58 am · For: One Thing After Another...
Ditto to that. Sta-range! LOL
I love cats. Yup, that's what made me read this story, haha, the "Neko", but I' haven't been disappointed!

So, i just wanted to wonder, why were Iruka and Naruto standing by when all of this took place? I'd expect Iruka, being a ninja, to take some quick measures.
Another thing- your story is very original. Adding your OC to the main timeline- that's been done before, but you've developed a different take to it. It's not cliche' at all and is easy to read.
Your writing is awesome. i don't have that many tips as far as style goes, and that in itself shows how awesome it is. As you can see, keyword here is awesome. I look forward to reading more!


NEKOMANIA!!!
I for some reason, love the word Neko more than Cat. hmmm....

Author's Response: Thanks! I didn't plan on making Iruka just stand by like that, though. It just sort of turned out that way. Life is full of unexpected turns and surprises, y'know? Hehe. Oh, and Neko is way more fun to say than Cat. If I could have picked my own name when I was born, I probably would have named myself that! Then again, half my family is insane, so... :3


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 27/03/12 - 11:47 am · For: First Memories?
Woa! Awesome first chap! Quite quick, well paced, with plenty of room - or "entering" as I call it.
Anyways, I believe One major mistake you made was shift in tense. In the beginning of the chapter, the tense was present, and moved on to past tense. I believe it would suit your interests to write everything in present tense- I'd also suggest fixing this right away as I can tell you from experience what a pain it is going back and editing things when you're further into the story.
Another thing is, you described Sasuke's eyes to show pain and betrayal - this seems a bit unnecessary to me as Sasuke probably isn't thinking, at that moment, of the Massacre. It is in context, though, but it might be better to include this observation later on in the story when she's studied him a bit more...? Although this is just a suggestion.

Awesome chap, and I'm truly amazed that I managed to write for so long without just hopping over to the next chapter, what with the cliffhanger!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 26/03/12 - 04:37 pm · For: One Thing After Another...
I kinda like the idea of Amemaru. He sounds cute :3 I do hope he helps Yuki learn more about her past though, because now I'm eager to learn about who she is.

Nice job so far, this was written very well. Much better than the first chapter, if I remember correctly. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you! The idea for Amemaru basically hit me in the face, though his name was going to be Ame. It didn't really sound right, so it ended up taking me an hour to think of a more suitable name. Goodness, he's a handful, even for the author! :3 Glad you think he's cute, though!


Name: Kazumi-chan (Signed) · Date: 21/03/12 - 01:15 pm · For: First Memories?
I like your story so far. It interests me alot and I like how you started it.

Author's Response: Thank you!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/03/12 - 07:27 pm · For: First Memories?
Huh... I try to avoid neko girl stories... They're usually kinda overplayed. But a neko with amnesia? I find great interest in that. I just like seeing how the writer interprets amnesia as they out their OCs through it.

This went well so far. I really enjoyed how you described everything so far. I look forward to seeing where you take this. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I honestly didn't know that neko-girls were overplayed, though... O_O It's good to know you're interested anyways! ^_^


Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 16/03/12 - 05:03 pm · For: First Memories?
Okay, I have one question! Is there a reason the text looks different? It was kind of hard to look at, but that's just my finicky opinion. Aside from that, I enjoyed this :3 My own OC has a sort of amnesia, so it's fun to see a different take on that. Your style was lighthearted, which is a nice change of pace from what I normally read. DOn't you just love how easily freaked out people are? Some may try to tell you how the villagers reacted was unrealistic, but just look at Americans. We use to burn people at the stake for "Witch Craft." Anyhow, I hope to see more of this some time. It was a pleasant read that flowed nicely. Oh, and as for your favorite anime. No... Teen Titans doesn't count, but they're still awesome :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I don't really know why the text looks like that... Then again, electronics hate me, so whatever. ^_^ It's also a nice change of pace to write lighthearted things, though I tend to struggle with that because I'm kind of a negative person. Of course, being negative has it's advantages. I love to scare people and freak them out by saying negative and depressing things in an innocent tone and cheerful voice. People who freak out easily are fun to hang out with! I hope to write more soon, but I get writer's block frequently... Thanks again!


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