Reviews For Wo Ai Ni
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 13/10/11 - 03:51 am · For: Chapter 3
I think I spotted a couple mistakes in your timing. 1) Noa said that Kiba's offer was from last night, but I thought the party was a couple nights ago? Or I think that's what happened in the previous chapter. 2) Naruto went to get lunch before school barely started, so would it be breakfast? I know some schools give out breakfast before school starts.
Other than all that, this was still a very cute chapter. The Noa and Kiba connection is really budding, and I look forward to discovering more about her past.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: That was such a silly mistake on my part. Thank you for pointing it out to me, I fixed it. :) I'm glad! I might leave a little clues here and there in the next chapter.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/10/11 - 03:23 am · For: Chapter 2
Oh, gosh, I'm sorry, I didn't realize English wasn't your first language. This is still really good. If you have any friends who can edit this for you, it would clean up the spelling errors.
I really enjoy this. It's honestly really simple and realistic with a nice flare to it. I think you could put a little more description into it, but that's really it. This is a really good story so far.
Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: dont worry about it. :) i appreciate you telling me because it helps me improve overall. Thank you. I'll definitely try adding more details to the next chapter. Thanks again for the review. :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/10/11 - 02:54 pm · For: Chapter 1.
Not too bad of a start. A few spelling errors here and there, but it's over all pretty good.
As I've told you, I love Kiba, and I think this has some potential to be a great KibaOC story. I look forward to seeing where you take this. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I'm sorry about the spelling mistakes, English isn't my first language but I'll double check the next chapter. :)