Reviews For Against All Odds
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/08/11 - 07:47 pm · For: Someone To Watch Over Me
Hmm, at the end, did you mean that Naruto would make sure that Hinata wasn't hated? Because I think that would have made sense, but the last sentence said:
"He would do anything to make sure that Hinata was hated because of him."
Also, some kind of marker to indicate a scene change would be quite helpful, as I had to read it a couple times to see where Kiba and Sakura came in from.
But I completely loved this chapter, nonetheless! Naruto's determination to help Hinata is amazingly believable and excellently displayed. The part with Kiba and Sakura was sad, as we see her heartbreak and his disappointment in being unrecognized. Everything was so greatly described, and I loved it all!
Good job, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Oh, I just caught that. rnrnAnd I had double line breaks to distinguish the scene changes, but I think the format of this website messed it up. I'll fix it now.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/08/11 - 02:45 pm · For: House Is Not a Home
I like this! And I like your writing! Your style is so descriptive with so few words, and so far, you've caught my attention. This was a dramatic intro, and ironically, as the man called Naruto emotionless, I felt we could practically feel Naruto's emotions pouring off. This was a really impressive chapter, I thought it was amazing. Well done, I definitely look forward to seeing more. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks you very much.