Reviews For Fire Escape
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/07/11 - 02:29 pm · For: Episode 20: The Memory, The Nightmare
Wow! Again, awesome training session. There was progress, but not too much that it was unrealistic. And the freakout was so believable, especially with the way she has been dealing with things. It's a good constant that you continually show her fear of Interpono, just because the plot develops while storyline is still there. Great chapter, as always! Keep up the awesome work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/07/11 - 02:16 pm · For: Episode 19: Momochi Zabuza
Yes! Finally, a believable training session! Just as always, your originality makes me fall in love. I've read way too many stories where the protagonist picks up on ninja stuff so easily. Not realistic whatsoever. And you were ring about Zabuza being bipolar, but I think it's very accurate. He's nicer since Haku's death, but he still holds his tough guy persona. Well done, I loved it! Onward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I tried really hard to watch how I wrote this episode because training sessions are not only important, but often cliche and predictable. It's hard to write something interesting so instead of even trying I just had her black out half way through the episode and made it super suspenseful and dramatic! It made for a very interesting episode and a fun chance to show some more of Zabuza's sudden bipolar syndrome. It makes him look like a slightly confused, lost character, which personally I think he would kind of loose himself for a while if Haku died. It's fun to write from a combination of his point of view and mine. Thank you again Silver-san for reading!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/07/11 - 12:23 pm · For: Episode 18: To Replace
Ooh, now that's quite a different way of learning the shino I arts. Usually, the protagonist learns from the usual Leaf teachers or the Akatsuki (for those who end up being found by Itachi or someone). I like how Zabuza acts, as it still seems like his original personality. Nice job!
Another great chapter to add to the collection! Keep up the awesome work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/07/11 - 12:14 pm · For: Episode 17: Goodbye, Goodbye, Goodbye
I started tearing up when Ross said she would want her brother to be like Choukan.
This chapter was sadder than I expected. It seriously made me cry at the end ),:
In the end, where Ross was thinking about how a chapter of her life was ending, I thought it was sappy. The good kind of sappy :) I love little moments like those.
Great work, yet again! It's sad to see her leave, but I look forward to seeing what you will do once she meets the other Naruto people. Can't wait for more! Keep up the great work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/07/11 - 07:42 pm · For: Episode 16: Home Bound?
Aha, I just love the way you made Zabuza. You're right in saying how he changed, and I love how he ended up. It's also nice to see more plot developments as Ross thinks about leaving. It's sad, but you do an excellent job of illustrating the transition here. I love how you write this, it really is phenomenal. Keep up the wonderful work!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you Silver-san! I always have fun writing Zabuza and he makes for a really entertaining creep! He always helps fill some hard to jump gaps but it's always hard to write him sometimes because he is used a lot in cross overs, and a lot of stories in general. There's always room for him, but the question a lot of fanfiction writer's neglect to ask is if they really need to use Zabuza at all, or if they are just adding him because they like his character. It happens to the best of us XD I'm glad to know you like this episode and I'm even happier to know the story is still good! Thanks again for reading!
Name: WinterzDream (Signed) · Date: 16/07/11 - 07:38 pm · For: Episode 1: Knock out Girl
Interesting....I keep seeing your story pop up so I thought I should check it out. I rarely read Naruto crossovers but this one looks promising. I'll work on reading the following chapters in the not so distant future :)
Author's Response: Why thank you! I find your review enticing in itself, it's very mellow for a TONFA user yet very pleasant to read. It's becoming harder to write a good cross over because it seems like everything has been done, but I think I finally found a way to make a cross over completely my own. Thank you so much for your review!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 16/07/11 - 07:32 pm · For: Episode 15: Squid
O.O
Wow... You were right... Even after all that, I just can't find it in me to hate Lance. He is kind of getting sexier every time I see him ;)
Anyways, yeah, how convenient it is that Choukan was looking for a bracelet. I'm worried for...well, everyone's sakes. And I still don't know what is up with the bracelet anyway except that it's bad! And judging from possible plot twists, it might not even be as bad as I think... Ugh...
Wow, wonderful chapter! I loved it! Keep up the excellent work!
Author's Response: ha ha, that's exactly what is supposed to do! Lance is the kinda nice guy who is stuck working for the bad guy, which just makes the girls love him XD He's fun to write too, partly because he has this kind of dark past that is very slowly shown through out the story. It's a lot of fun to write his relationship with Interpono as well so I'm glad people are warming up to him. Thanks you for your review Silver-san!
Name: xXxTiNkxXx (Signed) · Date: 12/07/11 - 11:33 pm · For: Episode 14: The Angel
Prepare yourself for the long paragraph that is about to ensue. I'm fully convinced that TONFA hates me, because it never lets me insert a paragraph in reviews -____- To start off, the originality of your story is very respectable. I have to say, even with my own story, the OC-Centric genre is very cookie-cutteresque, but this breaks the mold. It really makes me think about the quote unquote originality of my story. Honestly, your creativity intimidates me. I admire the fact that each chapter begins with a quote that pertains to the chapter in which it begins. I'm also loving that Ross doesn't instantly make her way into Konoha, but there's a whole prelude to that as well. Again, your originality is overwhelming, and I'm very happy that I decided to scope this story out (: Added to the favorite list, fer sure. Another thing, the fact that you update so often is aweeesooome. I've noticed that in the Most Recent feed I see the same story pop up over and over. A lot of people don't write on here as often as other authors as dedicated to their story as you are. It's refreshing to see an author that maintains their great story frequently (:
Author's Response: You know you might want to try the (br) tags between sentences? They work just like the other tags so it might help with your paragraph problem :D
Aside from that of course, I feel extremely fortunate to have people reviewing this story so frequently and I am really happy, and surprised, by how much good freed back I've been getting. I've gotten some really nice comments about the Originality of this story that make me really want to stick to this story!
I really like your "cookie cutter" reference and I've noticed it a lot in my own stories lately; and where it is easier to color inside the lines, it's always more fun to just scribble all over the page with every color in the box. However, a random scribble is still just a scribble, so adding some sense and order to the mix makes for a very interesting picture.
Intimidate is a first I must say, I don't know if anyone has ever told me that before and I honestly don't know how to reply to that statement... Regardless, I'm grateful for your time :) The quotes are a lot of fun to find, and copy down, and add to episodes. A lot of the quotes I use lately are from people I know personally, which makes them more personal and it means more to me.
Thank you so much for your review, you make a lot of points that I really appreciate. I pride myself on quick updates, updates that I'm sorry to say I haven't been able to keep up with in my first fanfic... Very tragic, but I'm trying to get back into fanfiction; I am an entertainer, after all XD
Thanks so much for your time, yours thoughts, and your review!!
Name: Lakey101 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/07/11 - 05:38 pm · For: Episode 14: The Angel
Omg its sooooooo amazing!! I must read more....pwease? lol absoulutly amazing!
Author's Response: Ha ha, thanks! I'm glad to see how popular this story is becoming so thanks for leaving a review!
Name: Lakey101 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/07/11 - 04:30 pm · For: Episode 5: The Face of Evil
I am loving your story so far!!! Google translator was my friend in this chapter!!
Author's Response: As was it for me, ha ha, I used google translator and a couple others to get the words just they way I wanted them. I glad you enjoyed the story! I love writing it :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/07/11 - 02:04 pm · For: Episode 14: The Angel
Wow.... Wow.... Wow....
Interono is by far the greatest bad guy ever. It's everything a bad dude should be, I love it! I love how you write these scenes, too! They're dark and filled with creepiness, yet it's so beautiful, in its own spooky way. Great job, it's amazing!
Thanks for so many updates, they were all incredible! Keep up the awesome work, please!
Author's Response: And thank you for your always pleasant reviews! It always fun to read them and I look forward to them when ever I update an episode :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/07/11 - 12:43 pm · For: Episode 13: Human Side
Why are you sorry for updating so many chapters? It's so kind of you! We all should be thanking you. So thank you so much!
Wow, I love how you are slowly showing Ross's vulnerability. She tries to act strong, but these sudden memories haunt her and show her weakness, and she's too stubborn to deal with that.
I love her character, I love how you're portraying Zabuza, and I love the plot. Excellent, fantastic, great, awesome, amazing, beautiful job with this! Keep up the wonderful work with this!
Author's Response: I don't know... Some people get annoyed by major updates...
Ross is a stubborn person so she never deals with her emotions or problems and she goes out of her way, like most people, to avoid her weaknesses. The episode with Interpono really scared her and she hasn't really been able to heal since then. It's really bad. *nods*
Anyway, Ross is going to have to face her demons through out the story or she won't grow past them! It's all very emotional, you see... fun to write though! ANYWAY, thanks for the review!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/07/11 - 11:58 am · For: Episode 12: The Bar Fighter
o_0 Zabuza is alive and Haku is dead?!
Wow....
Oh, by the way, you have no idea how awesome it was to see this new update literally a minute after I reviewed the last chapter :D
I think you made Zabuza a very mellow character, in a good way. After Haku's death, he changed in his final moments. It's actually nice to see him alive with that change of personality. I like it, I really do.
Ugh, cliffhangers XP
Good job with this chappie, keep up the awesome work with this exceptional story!
Author's Response: I KNOW!! I thought, "Hey, I can't think of anyone who's ever written this arch like that!" so I decided to kill Haku! Which was sad because I really like Haku D:
Anyway, Zabuza changes a lot after Haku's death but we don't really get to see it because Zabuza dies shortly afterward but that's okay for me because then I can depict him however I want... Although I like to stay close to his original character because i think he's awesome! Anyway, Zabuza is a fun character to add to any fanfiction and I think this is the best way I have ever written him! THANK YOU FOR YOUR REVIEW SILVER-SAN!!!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 12/07/11 - 11:46 am · For: Episode 11: Unlikely Normality
O_O Cliffhanger?!
Zabuza?! It's Zabuza?! What is he doing here, what is going on, I am so confused!
Hehe, sociopath homicide case... That line made me laugh.
Wow, what a twist. I'm so impressed with this turn of events and how you write this story. It creates even more questions, and I am so locked up in suspense right now, I need to know what happens!
Awesome job! You continue to amaze me with this story, it's so impressive!
Author's Response: MWAHAHAHA! Fear my Cliffhangers! Actually I hate cliffhangers, but they are entertaining to an extent though XD I'm glad you enjoyed this episode! Between you and me I've been planning to upload two-three episodes a day because I've been getting a writer's high lately so I have a ton of episodes on my computer and I don't like doing it because then I forget where I am and then I upload the wrong part and it's just confusing... I hate it XD
ANYWAY, thanks for the review :)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/07/11 - 05:56 pm · For: Episode 10: Indirect Heart Break
Aw, no more updates :(
Nah, that's alright. Three chapters within the hour was more than anyone could have asked for, even if they are already written. Thanks a bunch for updating these :D
Anyways, it was so cute to see a bit of Choukan's home life. And it was also nice to see the little rascal happy when Ross brought him home.
Then that transitioned into a heartbreaking scene, as Choukan's mother cries for her deceased husband. It was so sad! And then you finished the chapter with a completely heart-wrenching line with Ross expressing her inner thoughts. That was just like... like a cherry on a sundae, except it was sad... so, uh, there was no happiness that usually comes with ice cream....
What the heck, I can't make a comparison to save my life.
I hope you understand what I meant...
Anyways, once again, thanks for all the updates, they were all amazing! Keep up the awesome work with this story, it's going so well!
... Just because I've been saying it all night, I LOVE THIS STORY!
Author's Response: Ha ha, I'm glad you are such an avid reader of my story, thank you for that as always! I love this arch of the story (and I get to call it an arch!) because it shows the human side of Ross. Her weaker and more fragile side that she never showed people in the real world. It's a lot of fun to write from this perspective.
Sad ice cream? I have never heard of such a thing! But that explains Ross almost perfectly! ha ha! Onto the next review though XD
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/07/11 - 05:22 pm · For: Episode 9: Rain Water Rider
RainWaterRider, Ra-
Yeah, that's literally how far I got when I tried saying the title five times fast :P
Hmm, if giving you my normal reviews (although, you seem very amused and entertained by them) will get the next chapter out sooner, I'll even add in extra fun just for you... and then hopefully, I'll get more updated chapters ;D
Right then! Review!
Gotta love Raki (loved the name by the way), what a good horse. And Choukan, how adorable is he? Very, that's the answer! Gosh, poor kid...
And wow, now Ross has seen another person! Holy gosh, I wonder where this will lead her now...
Please keep up the amazing work with this story! This is really good! Thanks for updating two updates within practically the same half hour :D
I'm quite sure I covered this in my previous review, but....
I LOVE THIS STORY! ;D
Author's Response: AW! THANK YOU!! I love Ross, Choukan, and Raki! He is an amazing horse with an amazing ability to KICK BUTT! Ha ha, just kidding XD Anyway, I like these chapters because they show the human side of Ross that she is convinced she doesn't have. She's actually a really nice person once you get to know her, she just thinks everybody is an ass hole so she doesn't bother :D
Anyway, I actually have chapters, 10,11, and 12 all written and I had planned to do a double update but then changed my mind... But then got you review and changed my mind again, ha ha ha. I'm calling this a marathon XD
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 11/07/11 - 04:46 pm · For: Episode 8: Selfishly Selfless
Wow, have I mentioned how much I love this story. If I haven't, well then, I love this story! If I have... oh well, I love this story!
Seriously, you're actually playing things out realistically and in a more relateable manner. It's so refreshing to see the protagonist not fall into the Leaf Village right away and befriend everyone. There's actually a challenge obstructing Ross from having it easy, which is so much nicer than the easygoing stories.
I really like this... no wait, I love this! Keep up the excellent work, I love how original this story is and how well you write it!
Author's Response: I love your reviews! There always so funny and spirited! JUST BECAUSE OF THAT I'M GOING TO UPLOAD EPISODE 9!!! Ha ha, I've become really bored with the classic style of fanfcition writing where the character falls straight into Kohona. Some people can write that and make it good, but I've found it's really difficult for me to just start the story out like that. I kind of lean more towards realism in fanfiction and, well, my life so it's easier to write this story because it's a lot like my own life. I always have a million challenges in front of me :P Anyway, thank you so much for the review Silver-san!!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 - 04:40 pm · For: Episode 7: Lassie the Dog
Again, I became depressed when I noticed there is no "Next" button on this page. XD But maybe it's a good thing, it's already 2:40am and I have a con to participate tomorrow...
But about the chapter - you never ever have done a bad one! It's unbelievable! So, again a great chapter! It's good that she didn't meet Naruto and the gang straight away (would've been a bit too Mary Sue'ish), but Hanafubuki and his dog. Lassie... That one made me laugh. XD
Can't wait to read more of this! I really like the direction you are taking with this one. :)
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 - 04:34 pm · For: Episode 6: The Game
WOW. I mean wow! You've made two great characters here! Interpono is the general creepy and evil bad guy and Lance his unwilling henceman! Great work and great detail. :D You have a great imagination for coming up with something like this! I can't wait to read more. :3 And I can't wait for the Naruto gang to show up!
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 - 04:29 pm · For: Episode 5: The Face of Evil
Aaa, more creepy characters! Damn you. :D
Hey, could you put a translation of the Latin-text in the end of the chapter so we would know exactly what Interpono says? It would be helpful :) I know some Latin, but I couldn't understand even a half of what he was saying XD
I really like how you are doing the whole Going-to-Naruto-world-thing. :D It's different! And I like it. ^_^
Name: ontuva (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 - 04:23 pm · For: Episode 4: Interpono, Inbetween Worlds
Whoaa! The beginning was scary. I mean SCARY. The minute you mentioned Resident Evil, the music started to play in my head. And it's 2am here, with me being the only one awake. And just as I'm reading forward, a HUGE mosquito flew right past my face and I actually got so startled I fell from the chair... XD After that I felt stupid.
But great chapter! Wow - that's all I can really say. I think you did well with the sci-fi intervention (although I'm really not sure if it's Sci-fi, when there's no actually science involved... Most die-hard Sci-fi fans I know don't even count Star wars as Sci-fi, which I think is strange, but... Whatever. :D Enough of my rambling, the chapter was awesome!)
You've made the mystery character really intriguing, I can't wait to know who or what he is and what he is cabable of. And I really like how you've done this, I mean, I don't think it's quite often we see characters dying in the beginning. :D Although she is probably going to get "reborn" or "moved" but still - she died!
Ach, I need to go to the next chapter, I can't wait anymore XD
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/07/11 - 01:24 pm · For: Episode 7: Lassie the Dog
Oh.... Snap....
That was quite original. A dog, huh? Nice job. And the reference to the bandits made for a nice suspenseful intro to the new world. I really liked this chapter; it combined Ross's actual personality with a new shown vulnerability. Great work. I definitely can't wait for more!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 06/07/11 - 12:01 pm · For: Episode 3: The Encounter
Haha, love the little question mark in the end... Like horror movies.
Author's Response: I love horrors movies! Ha ha, I'm lying! I'm actually very bad at writing this style of scene but I wanted to try and get into more intense writing instead of the comedy stuff all the time :D I'm really happy how it turned out so I'm glad every one likes it so far! THANKS FOR READINGS XD
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 06/07/11 - 10:12 am · For: Episode 2: Life as I know it; a Horrible Short Term Agreement
Lol ^^ The second chapter didn't dissapoint! I really like the way you write- it inspires me.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review on Episode two :) and I'm glad I inspire! It makes me feel important XD *inflated sense of self*
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 06/07/11 - 10:07 am · For: Episode 1: Knock out Girl
Man, seriously amazing.
In the beginning, with the girl, i didn't guess until it was revealed that she herself was the killer. What a jolt! And then the description was just killer.
I'm really loving this story T.K. and I really want to find out what's happening next!
Oh and welcome back. ^^
Author's Response: Ha ha, thanks so much! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! I'm having a high old time writing it, let me tell you :)