Reviews For Sand and Snow
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/02/11 - 09:02 pm · For: The First Meet, and a Promise
Oooh! I really liked this! Gaara and OC are so cute! I love fluff! Your character was very original. And I think it's cute that he calls her princess.
Oh, just thought that I'd say this. You used a lot of Japanese words and didn't give translations. You know, like during the duel. It might just be me considering I'm so language-deficient and can't memorize any of the simple words. But it could be helpful to the reader to provide translations for certain words at the end of the chapter.
But your writing is really good! It really flows, and your description is amazing! I loved this whole story in general! And actually, an entire novel could have been made from this. I've never read a good Gaara X OC novel, and I think this could be really good if you decided to extend it. But I understand if you want to leave this as a one-shot. It's still incredible with one chapter anyway. Again, great job on this and I can't wait to read more of your writing! Keep up the amazing work! I wish I could give you a 1,000 but sadly the rating box only goes up to ten.... darn.
Author's Response: Thank-you^^ And I didn't? I thought I had...better go fix that^^; Thanks for pointing that out. And thanks. My sister has also told me that I should make it into a couple chapters, at least. And I've been thinking of doing so lately. And thanks for the rating^^