Reviews For Path of my Brothers
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 03/08/14 - 09:59 am · For: Chapter 16: From Where I Stand
Woohoo! I liked the fight :) the give and take of their fighting was nice. And I love how she slipped in some chunin level wisdom and planning. Good idea to have her fight him, I never thought of it. I liked reading this chapter and look forward to the next one. Thanks!
Author's Response: Why thank you! ^.^ I'm glad you picked up on her intellect. That's what I had to fix with this chapter. Well I didn't want to tamper with the canon at all and knew that could get complicated, so I decided I'll just add more players to the field. Thanks for your review. I can't wait to see what you think about the other battles.
Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 03/08/14 - 12:44 am · For: Chapter 16: From Where I Stand
That was a freakin awesome epic fight! I really like the way you handled it. It was simple but still made Ayako look like a complete bad ass. I'm glad she won too, I mean I had a feeling she would. You created a good opponent for Ayako that really tested her on all levels.
One thing I would reccommend is using more transition words. During the battle I saw you used a lot of He and She. Don't worry I make the same mistake myself. Transitions just help it flow nicely.
Anyways awesome chapter! I'm eager for whatever you put up next
Author's Response: Well thanks! Haha I liked her fight too. I'm one hundred percent positive it's better than the of version. That one was... Just not good. Hmmm... I didn't even notice I used those pronouns a lot. Oops, but thanks for the advice. I'll be sure to become aware of that more. I mean, of course she's gotta win or else she can't participate in something bigger and shocking later on (and I don't just mean the actual third round). Alrighty, thanks for reviewing as always!