Reviews For Divine Intervention
Name: Seiya (Signed) · Date: 16/11/14 - 11:06 am · For: Breakthrough
hey, I've really enjoyed your story! Finally a good Naruto OC Story ;)
Keep up the good work and please update soon!
Name: Same anon again (Anonymous) · Date: 07/07/14 - 01:19 am · For: Breakthrough
-omfg this thing ate more than half my review... or I'm just not seeing it. I'll leave it again, if it doesn't show up, i'll try later .___. sorry for the spam- Poor Kari-chan .___. She sure has a messed up past. I actually hate writing reviews, I never know what to say, and I don't even have an account here but whatevs, I felt like leaving one. Unfortunately, I don't have any constructive criticism, but I think your writing has improved since the first chapter. I think you're probably the first author who didn't make me wanna roll my eyes when mentioning abuse and a "dark past". Idk I suppose some authors use it as... just another character trait, like having long hair or green eyes (? or to give the character something to angst about. But I sort of felt like you treat it seriously. If that makes sense...
Naru-chan being adorable, awwn That definitely sounds like something he'd do, trying to help even if she pushes him away (or tries to lol not like she would succeed) and keeping his promises. I think... if he could get through to Sasuke, then he can definitely help Yukari. But I hope she doesn't suffer anymore than she already has... at least not before Naruto uses therapy-no-jutsu on her (?
Anyway~ I'll keep waiting for the next update... in a non-creepy way.
(Insert standard disclaimer about English not being my first language, sorry for any mistake blahblahblah)
Author's Response: I'm really glad that you left me one! This is all amazing feedback and it's greatly appreciated! A lot of authors create ocs with dark pasts and for the longest time I was worried that I was making Yukari too Mary Sue, but thank goodness that she isn't. The last thing I want is to cause any eye rolling. There's a lot more adorableness on the way soon, as well!
Next update should be out tomorrow! I hope you'll drop by and leave me another review sometime!
Name: Me (? (Anonymous) · Date: 07/07/14 - 01:14 am · For: Breakthrough
Poor Kari-chan .___. She sure has a messed up past. I actually hate writing reviews (I never know what to say
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 04/07/14 - 03:51 am · For: Breakthrough
Cool! Well-written, and a nice plot twist! I like it :) Naruto is so himself, and her situation is so perfect. I have no qualms with the way you write them. I just can't help but feeling that Oro must have known she'd go searching. It might be a trap :/ anyways, thanks for writing.
Author's Response: I'm really glad that you're enjoying it and that I'm doing the characters justice! I was really worried that Naruto would turn out OOC, so it's a huge relief to hear that he sounds like himself. Thank you so much for your review!
Author's Response: I'm really glad that you're enjoying it and that I'm doing the characters justice! I was really worried that Naruto would turn out OOC, so it's a huge relief to hear that he sounds like himself. Thank you so much for your review!