One word of advice I'd like to give is that you do spend a big chunk of time drawing out things that don't need to be drawn out. This chapter was about 2800 words, and I'd say maybe the first 1000 were just about Yukari walking through the streets, strolling through the village, which isn't really all that necessary.

That being said, while I'm being nitpicky about extra long scenes, your description really is very very nice. Very vivid and I actually like hearing everything you have to elaborate on.

Yukari is developing pretty nicely as a character, and I like how she meshes with Naruto. They're a very nice contrast and it's interesting that both want to know more about the other.

And this little...flashback? Vision? Thingie that Yukari went through, I'm very curious about and wonder if she sees dead people or something XD

Nice chapter, I really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: I've always been a writer that likes to get in there and get really descriptive, but that's the thing I really didn't like about this chapter. It's just a filler, but still. I was literally trying to keep from bashing my head into the keyboard the entire time I was rewriting it. It makes me mucho happy to hear that you still enjoyed it! Getting her character across and portraying her correctly is my number one goal everytime I write a chapter. She's supposed to come off as emotionless and almost hollow, unsure of everything and antisocial. Definitely the opposite of our favorite blond! I'm excited to divulge deeper into the reason for the flashback. I almost can't wait and I'm dying to spill it, but I gotta keep myself in check! Haha. The answer is a little ways off, but hopefully it'll be worth the wait. Thank you for taking the time to review again! I really really appreciate it!