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Rated: 15 [Reviews - 26]
Kimiko Kazuki has lived in the Hidden Leaf Village, in the Land of Fire, one of the Five Great Nations all her life. When she was five, just after entering the Ninja Academy both of her parents died on separate missions, leaving her an orphan. Now at the age of thirteen, she is about to graduate from the Academy with her friends, taking her ever closer to her dream of being the Shinobi her parents had been for the Village she loves. But nothing in her life has ever come easy.
Category: OC-centric, Het Romance > Angst
Characters: All
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: Dark, Death, OOC, Sexual Themes
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 19 | Completed: No | Word count: 90911 | Read count: 21123 [Report This]
Published: 11/06/13 | Updated: 10/08/15
Date: 14/07/14 Title: I am Kimiko Kazuki of the Hidden Leaf
Decent story and a fairly likeable and more importantly relatable OC. Even though I personally think that Kiba is a little immature to have a girlfriend. Atleast at the moment. But on the downside you really haven't deviated much from the canon which while allows you to keep people in character also tends to make things repetitive. I personally wish you would take more chances. Good luck with the rest.
Rated: 15 [Reviews - 37]
Category: OC-centric
Characters: Akamaru, Akatsuki, All, ANBU squad, Anko Mitarashi, Asuma Sarutobi, Ayame, Baki, Chouji Akimichi, Clan Uchiha, Gaara, Hayate Gekkou, Hidden Leaf Ninja, Hidden Sand Ninja, Hidden Sound Ninja, Hinata Hyuuga, Ibiki Morino, Ino Yamanaka, Iruka Umino, Itachi Uchiha, Jiraiya, Kabuto Yakushi, Kakashi Hatake, Kankurou, Kiba Inuzuka, Kin Tsuchi, Kisame Hoshigaki, Kurenai Yuuhi, Maito Gai, Matsuri, Naruto Uzumaki, Neji Hyuuga, OC, Orochimaru, Rock Lee, Sakura Haruno, Sarutobi Hiruzen (Sandaime Hokage), Sasuke Uchiha, Shikamaru Nara, Shino Aburame, Shizune, Team Asuma, Team Gai, Team Kakashi, Team Kuranai, Team Rookie Nine, Team Sand Siblings, Temari, Tenten, Tsunade
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: AU
Challenge: None
Series: Path of my Brothers
Chapters: 22 | Completed: No | Word count: 73242 | Read count: 21270 [Report This]
Published: 22/06/13 | Updated: 28/07/15
Date: 18/07/14 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14: Wisdom
May not have moved the plot much but it did a lot for character development. So great job on that front. Look forward to the main story. Good job and keep it up
Author's Response: Yeah I know. The plot only slowly moves with this arc and mostly focuses on the characters themselves first. It speeds up later though I swear! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it. I hope I don't let you down!
Date: 14/07/14 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13: Concerns
I usually avoid OC centric stories as most of the ones out there simply use OCs as Mary-Sues. Despite some weaknesses your story stands out I must say.
Every other character seems true to the canon which is a big plus in my book.
Good luck with the rest of it.
Author's Response: Well thanks for giving it a read and letting me know what you thought! I know what you mean. I still believe I could do a lot more with my story and make it a lot better, and I'm not completely satisfied with the beginning to this day, yet I don't want to go back and redo them again (trust me I've thought about it) because it's not fair to my readers by making them start over... AGAIN. I do feel like I'm getting better as I continue to edit the next chapters and get to the really good stuff. I'm glad you think the canon characters aren't OOC. I tried really hard to make sure of that. Thank you! I'll definitely need it to get through the story! Your thoughts are well appreciated.
Rated: PG [Reviews - 8]
It's time to find out who will reign superior in the Chuunin Exams.
Category: OC-centric, General Fiction > Character-Centric, General Fiction > Naruto
Characters: Ino Yamanaka
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 | Completed: No | Word count: 5930 | Read count: 3865 [Report This]
Published: 20/07/14 | Updated: 23/07/14
Date: 22/07/14 Title: Chapter 4: Thirty Seconds
Nicely done. Wish you would write longer chapters though. The cliffhanger was great.
Date: 22/07/14 Title: Even Flowers Have Thorns
Your writing needs work. Reading the first chapter it felt like you are telling the reader what they should think about your character. That is something you should avoid. Let the story flow on its own without forcing it. Give yourself some breathing room with longer chapters and put a little more into character development. You have a decent concept, it just needs a little work. All the best!
Author's Response: Thanks, I like feedback of any kind. When you read the fourth chapter I'm curious to what you think