Reviews For Akatsuki Teens
Name: coolninjaboy (Signed) · Date: 07/03/15 - 05:25 pm · For: Chapter 1 Siblings....What Maddness!
i loved it
can i be in it,
Author's Response: well....perhaps if you give me a character profile i might think and see about it.
Name: lilmissmindy (Signed) · Date: 27/08/11 - 01:07 pm · For: Chapter 1 Siblings....What Maddness!
Hahaha! This is hilarious! Keep writing.
Author's Response: thank you, sorry for taking so long to respond. I'm getting ready for college and getting a job...and well its just eating a ton of my time. I will be writing more of this, rest assured, but thank you again for the positive review. May I ask, though and if it doesn't bother you at all what parts of the chapter did you find funny? I'm rewritting all my stories and had a few major changes in mind to apply to this one and well, I want to make sure whatever aspects of it appeals to the reader remain fused into the work when I impliment, thank you.
Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 29/11/09 - 04:15 pm · For: Chapter 1 Siblings....What Maddness!
It was a very good story with quite a bit of humor and interesting characters,CKL!
Author's Response: ty.. ^^ i reedit so it would be better <3
Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 23/11/09 - 10:48 am · For: Chapter 1 Siblings....What Maddness!
I was going to say this was the best plot you've had so far but then I see you grabbed the idea from another ff =/. I think your dialogue is alright along with the humor.
You still have a mass amount of characters to the point where you have to constantly remind the reader who is a brother of who and so-forth.
Making a section just listing out the Akatsuki siblings and their features is a lazy/uncreative way to introduce the characters and is a clear sign to the reader that you aren't able or aren't putting in the effort to introduce them through the story.
The only thing the story has going for it is picturing the reactions of the characters, but it isn't enough to make me follow the story.
4/10 for some creative and funny situations with the characters.
Author's Response: ..... thank you for your honesty, ill look in to the problems...