Reviews For Phoenix Flight
Name: blacknova (Signed) · Date: 27/01/11 - 04:08 pm · For: The Begining
i personally really like the story. it has jumped around but it seems more realistic since in reality you never know what is going to happen in life.please keep going i really want to see how it ends. (^^)
Name: belovedly_loveless (Signed) · Date: 23/03/10 - 04:20 pm · For: The Begining
I agree with reviews below. Things are rather rushed and ooc seems to be the norm with this story so I suppose that's alright. Its good. Please continue. Also, maybe you could put spaces between paragraphs to make it easier to read.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 11:24 pm · For: Complications
im really confused with all the plot developement. You add info tht wasn't there in the chapter// som wich could be connected but the story is just getting slopy now.
Author's Response: I know things have gotten sloppy with this - I started writing this a year ago and I could devote all the time in the world towards it. But now I have a daughter and work and school so I work on this when I have a bit of time and most of the time I'm just not inspired sadly enough - but I love the story and want to finish it so I work on it anyways. X.XrnrnThanks for the reviews though! It really does help since otherwise I'm only going from my own reading and to me, since I'm the writer and know what's going to happen, it makes sense for me.
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 11:20 pm · For: Development
*sigh* i really feel that there can be great improvement here. I really want you to have the best story u can make. but the story is fine as it is i guess
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 11:04 pm · For: New Enemies
....i really feel you a rushing this story! it has a good plot but, well it a skeley with skin and very little muscle
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 10:47 pm · For: The Begining
......the dance was nice but as i said before the events and reactions seemed rushed , try just making the details longer and clearer
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 10:47 pm · For: The Begining
......the dance was nice but as i said before the events and reactions seemed rushed , try just making the details longer and clearer
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 10:41 pm · For: The Dance
......the dance was nice but as i said before the events and reactions seemed rushed , try just making the details longer and clearer
Name: crazykittylover (Signed) · Date: 26/12/09 - 10:30 pm · For: The Begining
....well the story seems okay. a bit confusing on how the got there, all the events seemed bunched to gether and her unusal abilities seem to show up way too early for the story but thats just my option