| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 13/08/10 - 09:34 pm - Title: Chapter 34: Maiko Diary /Alternatetitle/ Three kids and a cat |
they waled for enough miles
awy through the trees. His sister had done quite well- ut that
3 errors first off. *walked*away*but*
Now, I don't hate and I don't want to kill you. I just want to slap you forthe silly and annoying mistakes you made. I'm not a volient person nor do I wish to make people feel stupid unless I find it amusing or nessary. It's nessary here.
The shortness of the story is not a problem if it had made sense and didn't seem so scattered brained. the breaks between the scenes was so quick and the scenes themselves being so short made them seem useless to some exent and pointless.
I do love your stories miss and I enjoy reading them but, this chapter well is a FAIL. Good news is that to me at least, it's not an EPIC FAIL. That would be very bad indeed (=/).
So with that in mind please work harder and continue to produce the quality that I've come to enjoy reading and reviewing.
No harsh feelings miss; I'm just in a mood and found myself with high standards, lolz.
CKL
Author's Response: Your bluntness is completely appreciated, ck. I've been doing a lot of stuff cuz of our move, and etc, and it being summer vacation it was fun time! and all, but i won't make any excuses. It is, in my personal opinion, the writers job to please the reader, not vice versa. No harsh feelings! Although being slapped... Anyways, i won't be available for a while, but i promise you (an utmost promise) that i will edit this chapter and meke the next one in the excellant quality that you've come to enjoy reading (thanks for the vieled compliment!). Unfortunately, business (not in literal terms) awaits and i 'gotta go'. Adios for a while. oh, and re-check the chapter once around noon? tomorrow. It might have been updated. I gotta see if i have time tomorrow. Anyways, goodbye!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 13/08/10 - 06:03 am - Title: Chapter 34: Maiko Diary /Alternatetitle/ Three kids and a cat |
T_T NOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! You won't update for another long time? That's it. I don't care. I'm coming to find you and strangle you unless you update! )=< Jk. I would never do that. I consider you a type of friend, and I'd never hurt you. Anyway, there's some other stories on here to read until you can update, plus I'm working on my own stories. And, though short, the chapter was great. I wonder what Itachi meant........BUT I'M NOT GOING TO FIGURE OUT FOR A LONG TIME T-T. I can't wait until you update again. And it's okay if you can't. Everyone needs a break once in a while, I guess. Or would you even call it a break?......
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| Reviewer: xaneresx Signed - Date: 10/05/10 - 04:56 pm - Title: Chapter 33: Fight! Fight! |
This story is excellent; you're a brilliant writer! Keep up the good work! =]
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. ^^ (me happy!) thanks for reviewing! It helps a lot!
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 06/05/10 - 07:16 pm - Title: Chapter 33: Fight! Fight! |
.........hm... the multiple POVs are annoying and slightly confusing and the entire chapter with all the battle happening seemed rushed. I would length the battle scenes with better not quicker description of what is happening. The POVs... I would trying seeing if those are really nessairy; if all really need to be there. Just some tips.
CKL
Author's Response: Yep, let me re-do that chapter! I thought the POV's would be interesting (seeing things from other people's points of view, and how they delt with their baddies) but i suppose not. Hmm..... thanks for the suggestions CKL! I'll try them out.... I haven't gotten the hang of battle scenes quiet yet... Although i can't wait to put Aiko in a seriously good one!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 04/05/10 - 01:20 pm - Title: Chapter 33: Fight! Fight! |
Holy friken crapizoial assist (these are my three favorite words in my colorfully weird vocab)! I loved this chapter, Rose - chan, and can't wait to read the next chapter. Update soon please!
Author's Response: I will try my best! Thank you! Kitty cat cooties! :)
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 29/04/10 - 10:10 pm - Title: Chapter 32: Ambush! |
hmmm.....this story is so interesting! I keep wondering wat will hapn next; its very nice to find a story in fanfiction that has its own unqiue kick. good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you think it's unique!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 29/04/10 - 01:52 pm - Title: Chapter 32: Ambush! |
Wow. I wonder who the people who ambushed them are. They're going to get their buts kicked by one of the following people (I think) : Kokoro, Itachi, Shura, or a new character. I can't wait to read the next chapter, and you'd better be lucky I didn't die because my parents forced me to go to school, and the food was just too darn delicious looking to ignore. It was chicken! But you may not be so lucky next time. Oh, and here's some words to describe the way your writing makes me feel: holy fricken crapzoidly flying monkey terds. Yes, once again, my vocab is colorfully weird..... If that makes sense.
Author's Response: ^_^ - my lips are sealed. Haha, i'm glad i'm lucky! I don't want to be accused of murder.... *life spent in jail flashing before eyes* tell your parents they saved me from a sad life in jail! Tell them they also have a mean black mailing daughter. (kidding) No, it doesn't make sense, but it made me laugh- again! ^^
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 06/04/10 - 07:42 am - Title: Chapter 31: Hey AK |
Holy friken terd monkeys! That was one heck of a twist. Oh, and, by the way, similar to the dogs used by the Akimichi clan ; it's Inuzuka clan, not Akimichi. That's Chouji's clan. Other than that, I saw very few mistakes. I can't wait to see what happens after this. Please write more soon!
Author's Response: Hahaha! Holy friken terd monkeys! Haha! Gosh, that made my day ! Yeah, I edited that, I was having trouble remembering it,... Thanks for telling me! I will try my best to, sorry I take so long! Seriously, I need to work harder! I wonder how terrible I'll be, when I'm a writer and I have deadlines.... You'll read my stories, won't you?
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| Reviewer: Fire_and_Ice Signed - Date: 06/04/10 - 03:53 am - Title: Chapter 30: Tinkling and Shopping |
All I can say is, thank you for updating! I liked this one, and it was a lot better than Sasuke's angst, but I'm wondering when Kokoro and Sasuke will finally meet and realize they're siblings. It's something to look foreward to!
Author's Response: Yeah, it is! I'm sorry I have so much angst in the story, sorry to disappoint.. Thank you for rreviewing! You have no idea how much reviews motivate me! :)
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 06/04/10 - 01:47 am - Title: Chapter 31: Hey AK |
wooh......that was very interesting turn of events...Itachi first saw her.....his thoughts thou remind me of an asshole but meh. im curious wat will hapn nxt!
Author's Response: Aha, yeah, in my opinion, he is an asshole! I'll try to put up another chapter soon, sorry. I m currently orking on Aiko's story.
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 02/04/10 - 06:16 pm - Title: Chapter 30: Tinkling and Shopping |
interesting developments...keep up the good work. *ps* u hav a few spelling errors X3
Author's Response: Thanks! Thanks for telling me! I don't really proofread... I should, right?
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 02/04/10 - 06:09 pm - Title: Chapter 29: Only the Weak die |
hmmmmm........the action sounds can be changed from using "bleh" to *bleh* it wouldnt be as confusing in my mind. just an opinion and also...i know most of it was all back ground info but...can u mayb zazz it up a bit? its just dry to me thats all.
Author's Response: I know. i was having a hard time writing that chapter, so i seriously don't expect it to be good.
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 31/03/10 - 03:46 pm - Title: Chapter 30: Tinkling and Shopping |
If you mean the kids in the fanfic, they just act too mature, in my opinion. For kids who read it, no, it's just fine. I really love this story, Rose - chan, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
P.S U ROCK!!!!!!!!!!! =)
Author's Response: Yeah, I mean kids who read my writing. I showed a sample of it to my caousins, and THEY liked it, but then the adults saw it (it had a bloody part) and they were all like, 'Goodness Gracious Moi!' I don't think they expected that type of writing from me..... Dunno why. THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! That helps a lot, gives me SO much confidence!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 30/03/10 - 03:07 pm - Title: Chapter 29: Only the Weak die |
0_0.... *parents raise an eyebrow when they see brown headed girl staring blankly at the computer*......How do you right so good, Rose-chan?! I absolutely love this story, and I can't wait for the next chapter! Update as quickly as possible!
10000000000/10000000000
Author's Response: yay! I'm glad you like it so much, you're boosting my confidence up for my (hopeful) future writing career! ^^rnI'll update tonight, just need to do some last minute things.... Thanks for the review!
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 21/03/10 - 02:41 pm - Title: Chapter 28: The Sharingan |
hmm........nothing really to say its basic background info for anyone so cant wait for the com'n episode!
Author's Response: yeah, it pretty much is.... It's sorta a checking up on Sasuke episode.... Plus, it's sorta needed for my future chapters... Yeah! I'll put up another chapter as soon as possible, promise!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 13/03/10 - 12:14 pm - Title: Chapter 28: The Sharingan |
Sorry I didn't review before. It's a really good story, and I can't wait to read the next chapter! Please write more soon!
Author's Response: i will! sorry i'm taking so long!
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 08/03/10 - 02:54 pm - Title: Chapter 27: A Glimpse of the Past Part. 1 |
really great story, Rose-chan!I can't wait to read the next chapter! I'm sorry it took me so long to read this chapter. It was really good!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it so much, I was worried it would be bad 'cuz I had to look at the naruto book for most of it. Masashi Kisimoto is such a good autho/artist, ne?
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 04/02/10 - 06:34 pm - Title: Chapter 27: A Glimpse of the Past Part. 1 |
so its a flashback basically? I like it, its cute and fluffy!
Author's Response: Yup, it's sorta like that! I'm glad you like it... I think it's important to the story.
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 28/01/10 - 08:14 pm - Title: Chapter 26: WE DON"T KNOW THEIR NAMES! O.O |
this chapter was short but, very amusing i cant wait to see wat develops~ keep moving forward gf!
Author's Response: Sorry it was so short, thank you for saying it's amusing, and I'll try my best to trudge on forwards with a smile, a pen, apaper, a laptop, a car, a warm bed, an internet access, a library card... Hmm, what else will I need? ^^ Thank you for reviewing, i'll try to update soon! Let me start nagging my mom to get me to the library. :)
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 28/01/10 - 01:15 pm - Title: Chapter 26: WE DON"T KNOW THEIR NAMES! O.O |
hahaha! I laugh this story. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please please please hurry with it!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad you laughed! :)
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 28/12/09 - 06:27 am - Title: Chapter 25: The story |
What frightened them so much? Anyway, great chapter. I wonder what Dai will do with the blood. Anyway, can you read my two knew storied, even though Until the End mainly tells you info on the story.
Author's Response: Well, you'll find out what got them so scared! And, I'll try to read your stories! I just don't have time to review... I have to STUUDY for school, and it's a total headache..
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 28/12/09 - 12:09 am - Title: Chapter 25: The story |
indeed what made the children panick and why are the ninja giving up so easily? i would think that they would pursue the killer of the banits and question them...then again...going by the book seems the way things usually work...
on Memory Touch...i have no idea really when ill update...ill try later but i really want to finish a chapter im working on for Seeing Beauty. HOpe you have a safe trip!
Author's Response: Yeah, i guess they should've chased after the children, but they were in a hurry... Thanks! I had a safe trip, and it was awesome! Snow, aah, snow. Although i wouldn't ant to live where it snowed forever..:)
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 22/12/09 - 12:24 am - Title: Chapter 24: A second heart |
nice....i lik this chapter it makes me feel that we as the readers are getting to know the character kokoro better, nicely done!
Author's Response: Really? Thanks! I'm glad you feel that way! :)
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| Reviewer: Sasaui Uchiha Signed - Date: 21/12/09 - 07:03 pm - Title: Chapter 24: A second heart |
T-T....That was so fricken sad!!! Poor Koko! Why do you have to make her feel like that? Boo on you... Yet at the same time, you rock at the same time! Please please please continue.
Author's Response: I know, I'm sorry, but Koko isn't a cold hearted murderer so she had to feel like that! And, thank you for reviewing, I'll try my best to update soon! This is going to be a hectic couple of weeks I think- I'm going somewhere where it actually 'snows', so we have to get snow gear and prepare... ANd I'll probably be going to my cuz's house... But I'll try my best to update, PROMISE!
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| Reviewer: crazykittylover Signed - Date: 14/12/09 - 10:36 pm - Title: Chapter 23: Bandits- you gotta hate 'em. |
well...i glad the bantis are no more but... Kokoro is becoming mor of a perfect shinobi in mind of having no prob in killin...*shiver* i wonder wat sasuke will think and if it get lik even worse or sumen...bah brain being weird nicely done!!
Author's Response: Uh, yeah, sorry to say, buu-ut, the bandits aren't exaaactly no more.... You'll understand as you read on. And thank you for reviewing! You know, i think my chaps are getting more and more depressing.... I better liven them up!
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