Reviews For For life
Name: suzieuchiha (Signed) · Date: 19/04/08 - 05:59 pm · For: Love, Death and Laughter
aw i love it! really quite sweet and sasuke is so emo! yay! lol'd at 'Rape Sasuke's mind day' hehe
Name: ForyourLove (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 08:00 pm · For: Love, Death and Laughter
Oh, not bad...not bad at all. The beginning started out stronger then it all kinda drifted away and got weaker.
You should space it more, like whats being said and thought shouldn't all be touching and such...
It all seems to be missing something...its kinda lacking. You need to put more power and feeling behind the words and drive deeper into the characters thoughts and feelings and pull the reader deep into your world of words...you know what I'm saying?
Well I wish you luck and I will try and read an update if you ever have one ^^ Ever need any help just give me a shout :D
Later! And good luck!!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks a million, really appreciate it. I'll see what I can do to improve it.rnThanks again,rnLuffrnBeqs
Name: kibafan17 (Signed) · Date: 29/10/07 - 01:58 pm · For: Love, Death and Laughter
Not bad, not bad at all - it could do with some tweaking but it has some definite potential - just keep writing - you can only get better!
Kibafan17 =^.^=
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate this! I'm going to try and fix this chapter a bit better before writing the rest.rnLuffrnBeqs