Reviews For Shi no Me
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 05/07/12 - 04:00 pm · For: Epilogue
simply beautiful! You are an excelent writer! I wonder how many times I've said that at this point.
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 05/07/12 - 03:05 pm · For: Bellona's Pride
I am pained to point out that the rokubi was sealed inside utakata, of the hidden mist. it was a slug btw.
Name: nightHxC (Signed) · Date: 14/02/09 - 05:23 pm · For: And Tribulations
I enjoy how you switch POVs from time to time. It gives the story more depth.
Name: nightHxC (Signed) · Date: 14/02/09 - 05:00 pm · For: Shut In, Cast Out
I first off have to say that I really like your story, and for the most part, am content with the plot changes you have made. However, a change that I am unhappy about that was brought up in this chapter is Tsunade's carelessness about Naruto. Did the whole conflict with Jariya, Tsunade, and Orochimaru happen without Naruto being present? I wouldn't think Sasumi's presence would affect Naruto's training with Jariya. I am disappointed because I liked the relationship Tsunade and Naruto had in the manga. Also, the thing about all of the villagers despising him. I don't think they hate him that much in the regular manga. I mean, they would have done stuff like that when he was younger... everyone hated him a lot more back then. However, I get the feeling that they aren't as extreme in their hatred as the series progresses. I remember reading some of the manga not published in America (thank you, onemanga.com!), and there were a couple of pages devoted to random quotes from civilians about the progress of Naruto's life. At first, the quotes were super mean (when he was in the academy), but they progressed until they were all supportive and kind quotes (during Shippuden). Sorry about the long babbling, put what I'm trying to say is that I really don't think they'd try to get him executed for fighting off Orochimaru and saving Sasuke. But if it works better for your story that way, it's fine. Just for future reference. Again, I love the story! Sasumi is a great OC!
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 03/09/08 - 05:03 am · For: Tempest Clearing
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Okay, that question was answered. So, Yuuki doesn't know that Sasumi spent all those years in the torture chambers of the Rain?
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 - 10:09 pm · For: Tempest Clearing
hey, wow. awesome chapter, great fight scenes. really believable motive.
well done!
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 20/08/08 - 01:04 am · For: Genesis in a Rainstorm
A chapter of flashbacks; thank you, I was wondering what the history was between Sazumi and Yuuki. so why did Yuuki say 'I'm going to slaughter you'? was it because she left?
“Are you scared, little girl? Don’t worry, it’s only going to get worse. Once you’ve grown up a bit,” He licked his lips, “we’ll have a lot of fun with you.” THAT'S SICK. Ew.
Sazumi has had a fucked up childhood. BUT I LOVE THIS STORY!
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 24/07/08 - 02:07 pm · For: Into the Inferno
.....amazing. that about sums it up.
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 28/06/08 - 05:26 am · For: Bellona's Pride
now were rain manipulated into announcing war, going to counterattack elsewhere while konoha's borders are vulnerable, or is their jinchuuriki going to make an appearance?
yay for new chapter! did you hold back on the gore? this chapter felt different, probably because of less time spent in sasumi's head?
looking forward to the next chapter!
Name: MindlessWanderer (Signed) · Date: 26/06/08 - 12:15 pm · For: Bellona's Pride
DUN DUN DUN
After Shi no Me is over, do you plan to write another fiction?
Author's Response: Well, I'm writing four other stories at the moment, so I haven't really though much about any new ideas. But who knows what other fic ideas I might get the compulsion to write?
Name: Miki Everless (Signed) · Date: 11/06/08 - 04:47 am · For: Shattered Persona
TOTALLY ADDING TO FAVOURITES =D
sry i couldn't read the entire thing but i have the final exams to study for =/ boooring
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 28/05/08 - 06:31 am · For: At Arm's Length
ooh dear! i most certainly hope you're not too killed to keep writing. great story
Author's Response: lol. I really do appreciate you telling me what mistakes are in these, though. Thanks for reviewing!
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 - 05:58 am · For: Cross dressing and Kabuto
"staking a group a particularly"
of
"He explained that they’re need to be a"
there needed
Author's Response: Gahh...*is killed by grammar mistakes*
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 - 05:47 am · For: Shi no Mori
ok, previous chapter, a bit i missed:
"The scared man named, Morino Ibiki,"
scarred, unless you mean scary
"She leapt onto the branch were the "
where
"sensations that were constantly plagued her body."
sensations that were constantly plaguing her body.
or
sensations that constantly plagued her body.
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 - 05:23 am · For: Redheads, Sand, and Tests
Leafs - Leaves
"Get it, moron.”
although it feels a lot like a statement, i suggest a "?"
um, there was some stuff for the previous chapter, but i lost it sorry...
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 - 04:48 am · For: Ramen, Pajamas, and Doctors
"He hadn’t has the best of childhoods"
had
"didn’t have a mission they would go there separate ways"
their
"as long as a normal starving twelve her age."
uh, you know what you mean.
i think i'm noticing small mistakes like these more because there are so few of them. good work.
Name: Vixkill (Signed) · Date: 26/05/08 - 04:31 am · For: The First Year
"which was the only reason she would hire a miner."
its "minor"
"as he walked away from the seen."
"scene"
i can't believe i dismissed this story without giving it a chance earlier. it is good.
Name: Thorns (Signed) · Date: 28/04/08 - 02:45 pm · For: Redheads, Sand, and Tests
This is a really good story!
Name: AllTheRightMistakes (Signed) · Date: 05/04/08 - 09:50 am · For: Perilously it Begins
...It's amazing. I'm addicted to this story now. I can't believe how incredibly good it is. [:
Name: Chris Logan (Anonymous) · Date: 04/03/08 - 12:25 pm · For: Perilously it Begins
Excellent chapter as usual =D look foward to reading more
Name: Crystal Logan (Anonymous) · Date: 17/02/08 - 03:20 pm · For: Redheads, Sand, and Tests II
I havnt commented on the other chapters cause im lazy and wanted to finish reading this ut im normaly a sakura fan but this story is awesome
Name: k_citrus (Anonymous) · Date: 03/02/08 - 10:38 am · For: Redheads, Sand, and Tests II
“You’re late,” Naruto said
“And you’re blond,” Kakashi-sensei told him.
…Naruto figured that was fair.
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XD Masashi Kishimoto should be proud of you.
Name: k_citrus (Anonymous) · Date: 05/01/08 - 11:19 am · For: Modoka Sazumi
hope ur gonna to continue this right? ^^ i like it a lot
Name: k_citrus (Anonymous) · Date: 19/11/07 - 05:39 pm · For: And Tribulations
story is great^^ im waiting for update!! :]
Name: Laur3 (Anonymous) · Date: 10/11/07 - 03:42 pm · For: And Tribulations
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