Reviews For Hidden Past
Name: X3Dee (Signed) · Date: 14/12/14 - 01:29 pm · For: Chapter One: A New Beginning
Well there was a bit of tense jumping here and there, but overall this was a good introduction to the story. I like Riku in the sense she has a kind of Naruto esk kind of thing going. That aside I think it's interesting that she's only trained in genjutsu, since it's one of the complicated to learn and master.
It should be fun to read through and see how her training goes. I'd figure it'll be a bit easier for her considering her Chakra control :)
Exciting!
Name: X3Dee (Signed) · Date: 05/12/14 - 04:27 pm · For: Prologue
well apart from a few spelling errors here or there I must say I really like the direction that this is going. I will admit that the first few paragraphs gave me a sort of History Channel kind of feel but then pleasantly transformed into a sort of epic narrative describing the plight of whom I assume will be the family of the main character.
Overall the feel and style that you've created here has me interested and I'm happy to say that I look forward to reading the chapters that follow this and I am so so so so glad the description says it is finished because it is a massive fear of mine to start something fantastic and have it end without ever being completed, so thank you for that :)
okay okay enough chattering! let's see what the story has up its sleeve!
P.s. never write reviews on your phone, it will drive you insane!
Author's Response: omg it's like no matter how many times i edit, there'll /always/ be spelling errors LOL smh. thank you so much for your lovely review! it's uh, been a while since you've reviewed (i haven't checked in on tonfa in a v long time l-lol) so idk if you read the whole thing, but in any case, I'm glad it caught your interest, even for a little bit! Super glad that you took the time to review, as well, even on mobile ; uu;
Name: NinjaRace (Signed) · Date: 23/09/14 - 04:16 pm · For: Prologue
You could have started it off with more action and a little less explaining but overall decent job.
Thunbs up.
Author's Response: I think that when it comes to an AU-divergence story that heavily involves OC aspects and an OC as the main character, it helps to give an idea of how this story deviates from the main plot. Though if I'm going to be honest, I wasn't very fond of the prologue about halfway through the story = u=;; Starting things off is always the hardest part, I think. But anyway, thanks for your feedback! It's highly appreciated.
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 12/08/14 - 08:39 pm · For: Chapter Twenty-Two: Victory for a Loss
Great chapter! I love the bond between her and her senseis.
Author's Response: Aah thank you very much! I try my best in showing Riku's relationship with the canon characters = u=b
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 11/08/14 - 05:09 pm · For: Chapter Eighteen: Preparations
I think fillers are great ways to show progress, so I liked it! keep up the writing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Personally, I've always liked fillers. It shows a lot more about the characters and what they do outside of the usual stressful situations, y'know? So I'm glad you enjoyed it as well~ Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 11/08/14 - 05:09 pm · For: Chapter Eighteen: Preparations
I think fillers are great ways to show progress, so I liked it! keep up the writing!
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 04/08/14 - 11:32 pm · For: Chapter Fifteen: Crossed the Line
How intense. A little sped up I think, but still enjoyable. I might have played around with her bargaining with him to have him take the tags off before team seven made their appearance. I guess it just counts on where you wanted to take it :) nice update, thanks
Author's Response: yeah, I wished I bothered to do something like that too when I skimmed through it before I uploaded it. It's so much shorter than I remember, I thought I cut entire parts out or something o Ao;; ...Maybe I did and I just don't know it /sigh. It's a little too late to do that now though LOL but I'm glad you enjoyed it nevertheless ^^
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 01/08/14 - 11:07 pm · For: Chapter Fourteen: Sneaky Little Bastards
great chapter! tanks for updating!
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 01/08/14 - 04:19 pm · For: Chapter Fourteen: Sneaky Little Bastards
Thanks for the update! I'm enjoying it :)
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 31/07/14 - 01:55 pm · For: Chapter Thirteen: Island Turtle
finally caught up. I've been so busy that I don't even have time to write my own story. Very fulfilling chapters. Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I hope you get time to write your story too ; uu; I've definitely been there before orz
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 27/07/14 - 07:07 pm · For: Chapter Nine: Exchanging Pleasantries
Love it. I like the progress. Thanks for updating.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading!
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 27/07/14 - 09:27 am · For: Chapter Nine: Exchanging Pleasantries
That was cool :) and I'm 80% sure that was a legitimate convo with him and she has no idea. I like the progress, and the direction things are going. Nice job
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 26/07/14 - 01:17 pm · For: Chapter Seven: The Youkugan
OMG!!OMG!! OMG!! ahhh! There are no words, tat was just an awesome chapter!! So they finally figure things out, I can't wait for what comes next.
Author's Response: Aww thank you! I'll put up a couple of chapters this time = u=b
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 24/07/14 - 02:05 pm · For: Chapter Five: The Impossible Truth
ooooohh! It sounds like she is beginning to connect the dots. I wonder who she will be teamed up with! I can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for updating so quickly. (i think you italicized incorrectly)
Author's Response: I actually have all the chapters written until ch29 :'D I upload this story on ff.net and AO3 as well, I just got lazy with TONFA because of HTML l-lol orz. You're free to read it on either of those websites as well if you don't feel like waiting. My username in ff.net is Your Idiot Writer and on AO3 (archive of our own) it's, surprise, YourIdiotWriter = u=b And I did italicize incorrectly OTL thanks for letting me know ; uu;
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 23/07/14 - 07:13 pm · For: Chapter Four: Get the Show on the Road
Loved it!! Can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you keep loving it ; uu;
Name: Fire_and_Ice (Signed) · Date: 23/07/14 - 08:11 am · For: Chapter Four: Get the Show on the Road
This is really cool :) I enjoyed this. I'll be looking forward to more updates! Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Heey I remember you! Welcome back to my story ~
Name: Cloud Enix (Signed) · Date: 22/07/14 - 08:12 pm · For: Chapter Three: Missions
I realy enjoyed this, I look forward to more! ^_^
what happened to the banner?
Author's Response: I was dumb and broke its link from where the image was hosted from, but I plan on fixing that soon :D
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 22/07/14 - 04:10 pm · For: Chapter Three: Missions
I want to know more about her!! Update, please.
Name: lovinganimetoomuch27 (Signed) · Date: 22/07/14 - 03:45 pm · For: Prologue
I'm really looking forward to where you head with this story. I love how it begins, kind of reminds me of my own story, since I like when there are questions to be asked throughout the story.
Author's Response: Ooh, awesome! There's a bunch of questions that come up and get answered throughout, so I hope my story suits your tastes ; uu;