Reviews For The Toughest Choice
Name: kou keehl (Signed) · Date: 07/12/14 - 12:01 am · For: Chapter 1
I love it!
Name: chikiblue (Anonymous) · Date: 19/05/14 - 02:55 am · For: Chapter 1
OMG! please update already.:) I liked how you framed Naruto and the reason why he failed to address Hinata's confession. I am so excited!
Name: Apple (Anonymous) · Date: 23/03/13 - 11:40 am · For: Chapter 1
Areally interesting start; I look forward to what you'll do next.
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 19/03/13 - 03:48 pm · For: Chapter 1
I didn't read Jinookami's review before hand, I'd say that this is more expositionary, and the point was to get Naruto and Hinata to Suna, most of the other scenes are in the past tense, as if Naruto was remembering. We all know he would abridge his memories, which I supose is a service to us, as flashbacks are the very baine of mortal existance. (except when they're done right, which is NOT often) this is what hapens with me, I ramble :P
Name: Oni Nexus (Signed) · Date: 19/03/13 - 03:44 pm · For: Chapter 1
I feel like it's better to know mistakes than to have noone mension them.
you overuse the pluperfect tense, which is the word "had" followed by a verb. try more of the usual past tense
"Do you still love me, Hitana?" uh...
other than those two points, this is a very impressive setup. I'm really looking forward to more of this. you've got me siked! :P
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 17/03/13 - 12:25 am · For: Chapter 1
Well, first off, to get the errors out of the way...
You had a lot of misspellings in this. Spelling names wrong mostly, please slow down with writing. It's one thing if you're mixing up homonyms or simply don't know how to spell a word, but when you mess up the names once or twice (especially when spelling it right other times), it's pretty noticeable. Spelling is a pet peeve, I'm sorry.
Also, your scenes are really really short. Like so short that it was more of an overview of what was happening than an actual story made up of the various scenes.
Judging from what was here, I am fairly interested in the story just because a love triangle between these three would seem like a good story. You just have some polishing to do in your writing but then again we all do. I am looking forward to more though. Hope to see more and sorry for such a brutal review.