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Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 15/07/11 - 12:23 pm · For: Chapter 5
Darn it! I hate when I don't see a Next option. It's so annoying. Especially with stories like this that keep me wondering what's going to happen next. I can't wait to read more. It's an awesome story. You did Zakaru perfectly. I loved the vision as well. It makes me wonder what it has to do with her. Great job, LostInForever. Just great job.

Author's Response: thanks! im soo glad you like your character! i agree, i hate when i dont see the next button.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 15/07/11 - 12:17 pm · For: Diagnosis
First of all, sorrysorrysorrysorrysorrysorry, and finally, I'm sorry. I didn't notice when you first posted this chapter. I was a little busy...... Anyway, it was fantastic. It reminds me of the idea (the jutsu sealing memories part) I have for one of my stories. I'm glad I finally seen this. It was so amazingly awesome.

Author's Response: haha its ok! im glad you liked it!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 15/07/11 - 11:22 am · For: Chapter 5
O.O. Wow... Very cool. I like how you introduce the OCs, they're coming quite nicely. And these sudden visions are slowly becoming more descriptive, helping the plot to be that much more suspenseful. It's wonderful! Great job! Keep up the good work.


Name: shadow4000 (Signed) · Date: 28/06/11 - 11:10 pm · For: Diagnosis
hey hey....
jutsu eh?
kool!!! i thought the vision ws related to her past...
interesting...
keep up Da good work........

Author's Response: It might have something to do with her past ;) Thanks, I'll update soon


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 28/06/11 - 03:34 pm · For: Diagnosis
To BattyBigSister... haha, I couldn't help myself with the name. Teehee... ;)

Now, onto the review!

Ooh, a jutsu, huh? Wow, that makes things so much more interesting! You just created an entire plot out of that little bit of information. A bunch of questions are formulating in my head, like, who put the jutsu on her? Why would they do that? What will happen? And now with this situation about the fire? Wow, that just created even more questions. It was such an evil cliffhanger, but I loved it anyways just because I didn't see it coming. Great work with the suspense factor, things are definitely getting better and more interesting.

Excellent work! I'm really impressed with this story. Keep up the great work, it's going good so far!

Author's Response: Haha thanks! I'm glad you like it :)Your questions probably won't be answered for a while haha sorry!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 25/06/11 - 04:36 am · For: A Vision
Wow. Just wow. I loved that sudden twist. I want so badly to know what it means. It's amazing. I loved every second of it. I can't believe how awesome this was. Please write more soon. Oh, and by the way, I meant to say that when Kasumi arrived, he started fighting back. I accidentally put she...... I don't think Zakaru would like being called a girl.....

Author's Response: haha ok :P I'm glad you liked it, I'll update soon :)


Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 08:32 pm · For: Waking Up
Okay - I've decided on a character Profile.

Onihara Amaya is twelve years old with very fair white skin that easily burns and short, but bushy, hair, which is a brownish auburn in colour with blonde and white-blonde highlights. She has a round face with a stubby nose, thin lips and shallow cheekbones. If you mention her eyes, then they are vastly oversized with a whitish pink colouration. Her body is also quite skinny, almost emaciated, and her joints quite knobbly. Although her natural limb shape would be very slender and fine, she is also quite small for her age.
Her favourite clothes are oversized frilly dresses with an empire-line waistline, floaty skirts and an oversized frilly collar. These are usually in bright colours like yellow, lime green, pale blue or pink.
Amaya is a mental patient, who Kusami meets during the course of her treatment for amnesia. The little girl seems to live almost in a world of her own and is constantly talking to imaginary 'friends' that no one else can see or suddenly screaming at the sight of monsters that aren't really there. She's especially fixated on fairies and they are one of her most common 'happy' illusions. In fact she wants to be a fairy when she grows up.
She tends to forget most real people, but strangely Kusami seems to be someone she always remembers and can talk to almost normally - albeit with interruptions from her fairy friends. She can get quite confused as to why the real people she is talking to can't hear comments made by her illusionary creations and can get quite upset or angry at people because they haven't answered the 'fairies' questions.
The problem is that Amaya comes from a family of ninja who specialise in Genjutsu and after too long in her company, people will start to see things that aren't really there, like vines of flowers creeping up the walls and over the furniture, or brightly-coloured fairies dancing around the room. They may also see more disturbing images, such as fanged green monsters crawling out of cupboards... especially when Amaya is upset and things are likely to get quite dangerous for them at that point. In other words Amaya subconsciously traps those around her in genjutsu and may accidently use it against them (much like Itachi deliberately uses the mangeko sharingan).

Can I also make suggestion for somebody else's character? Personally I would love to see a Naomi/Kiba romance (partly because he's silverwolf's favourite character), but also because I think there would be a really interesting dynamic between the two of them - especially as they are childhood friends.

Author's Response: I really like this character! As I was reading it, I have already come up with a few ideas for her! I like the idea of the romance too.



Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 07:48 pm · For: A Vision
Lovely attention to detail again, you just need to work on letting your words flow a little more naturally. This was a very interesting chapter, full of very intensive colours and smells, which were lovely, and lots of very bright images, which I enjoyed. Your characters came across as a very charming set of girls.

Author's Response: thank you, yeah i agree about the word flow, i'm still working on it


Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 07:40 pm · For: Waking Up
Naomi, huh silverwolf? ;0) Now there's a name I've seen before... *giggles* She knows what I mean, LostInForever. Don't worry about it.

Let's see. This was nicely done and a very interesting start. Naomi comes across as a lovely character, especially to keep visiting someone she found at the gates for a month, but the whole scene was very carefully written with a lot of attention to detail. Very sweet.

Author's Response: Thanks :) haha odn't worry either, i'm not worrying :P



Name: BattyBigSister (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 07:25 pm · For: Story Plot (Kind of)
Actually, as my old lecturers used to tell me, most amnesic patients don't forget their own name. That's a Hollywood invention. Memory is stored pretty much all over the brain and one's own name is repeated in too many areas to be easily affected by brain damage or most psychological disorders. Generally if people say they can't remember who they are - they are lying. Probably to get out of some kind of trouble.

Moving on, interesting idea for a story... Not sure if I have a character suggestion at this point. I'll have to come back to that...

Author's Response: Yeah, i read about that during science once i think. its okay about the character suggestion. I'm not going to add some more characters for about 2 more chapters. thanks :)



Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 06:29 pm · For: A Vision
Wow! A vision, didn't see that one coming. And it showed a lot while also being mysterious. Your writing tends to do that. It seems to be on the path of explaining and then suddenly ends with mystery. Haha, I like it! Great work! I can't wait to see Tsunade's diagnosis now. Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response: Haha yeah, in both my stories a mystry plays a big role. thanks, I'll update soon :)


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 01:19 pm · For: Story Plot (Kind of)
Oh, that's alright. The challenge is under my name. If you go to my page and click the challenges I have created, there should be a Respond to the Challenge option in the bottom left hand corner, and then you will be able to submit your story. Don't worry, this site can be confusing at first, it really takes some time to play around with. Good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks! I just added it. Yeah it is kind of confusing. rn


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 11:51 am · For: Waking Up
Wow! This is amazing! Great job, this is an awesome start to the story! And you did incredible with my character, she was perfect! Well done. With such an amazing first chapter, I definitely can't wait for the rest of the story! Keep up the great work! Oh and I hate to be a bother, but do you know how to add this to the Joint Stories! challenge? I'm sorry for being annoying about this, I really hate myself for being so irritating :P

Author's Response: haha I actually don't know how! but I want to!


Name: shadow4000 (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 08:23 am · For: Story Plot (Kind of)
name: Kazuki Ushiro

age: 17

gender: Male

personality: fun-loving, jolly, lazy, friendly...

appearance: black messy spikes, green eyes, fair skin, black tank top, cargo pants....
n a yellow locket...
abilities: wind chakra...
introduction: he was originally from the mist... but he got bored there... n decided to go out on an adventure... wen in konoha.. he met naomi or kusami... n fell in love with either... n decided to stay... he is veery flirty..
i dunno either this or.. u can make some other intro =)
watever seems best to u ^.^
btw awesome start... :D
feelin bad for kusami
but hope all turns out well ^.^

Author's Response: I like the intro you gave him. I think I might pair him up with Naomi maybe.rnrnThanks :) I'll try to update soon.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 05:04 am · For: Waking Up
Ooh. This seems really interesting. I like it. I can't wait to find out what Naomi's past is going to be. This seems like it's going to be one heck of a story. I think Naomi was awesome. I feel bad for Kasumi. I hope she gets her memory back. Even though that isn't always be a good thing...... Anyway, awesome story. Please update again soon.

Author's Response: Thanks :) I'll update soon


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 04:58 am · For: Story Plot (Kind of)
ooh. This sounds interesting!

Name: Zakaru Kazukae
Age: 16
Gender: Male

Appearance: (do not own this)

http://cdn.pimpmyspace.org/media/pms/c/4g/gp/pn/ply-8.jpg

Personality: He's a really kind person, but he has a dark side to him that is only revealed when he's in terrible emotional pain and he lets it take over so he doesn't have to feel it. Does that make sense? Otherwise he's doing whatever he can to help. He hates to fight unless absolutely necessarily. If he doesn't find it necessary, he usually just defends.

Introduction: Could you have Naomi meet him while someone's attacking him but he won't fight back, but then they try to attack her and she does fight back? I don't know. Just an idea. And since I know Krina will ask you this for me if I don't (she's my annoying sister that I need to stop telling things to), I was wondering, and this is only if you need it, that for romance it could be your character. Heck, I don't even know if you're going to have romance. If not, I totally understand. If I already had something planned and someone asked me, I'd feel pressured to change it. Don't feel like that, okay.

Author's Response: I like the idea of having a romance with your character!


Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 23/06/11 - 12:43 pm · For: Story Plot (Kind of)
A joint story, huh? Be aware to add it to the challenge ;)

Hmm.... character idea....

Name: Naomi Tenshi

Appearance: She has long black hair that is never kept all the way down, she usually wears it in either a bun, ponytail, or braid. She has relatively tan skin. Her eyes are deep brown. (You can decide her outfit, I really don't care).

Personality: She is fun-loving but slightly shy. She is always friendly, and will do anything to help out anyone.

Introduction: She's childhood friends with Kiba. If you want, she could be the one who finds Kusami, brings her to the hospital, volunteers to help her.... I don't know, use any of those options, I'm not picky. You don't even have to pick either of them :P

Anyways, I hope this goes well for you. Good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you like the way your character was introduced!


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